Scholarship / United World Colleges (UWC) Application Essay [4]

Hi, @derri.
Some correction has already done. I hope I could help you. Anyway, I want to advise you not to be so repetitive. Try to make your ideas well linked so that you can make your text shorter. Good luck!

Have you ever ALREADY read or watched something that connects with you on such a deep level? This IS how PROPERLY I feel about the UWC movement and mission. Reading the UWC mission and seeing the lifestyle of UWCers I feLT it WAS a THE place where I need WANTED to be. where I need to learn, and where I need to share. When I first heard about UWC through various presentations, short courses and articles; and even further hearing about it from the alumni I have met, I knew this was the place. for me As soon as I discovered UWC I knewSOON I KNEW It was a remarkable opportunity to challenge myself both academically and personally. I feLT in love with UWC and I know it would be an environment I would flourish in . I wantED to learn from others and share with others and I know UWC will give me the tools to prosper and to/s]create a positive impact on IN the world. UWC also provides THE opportunity and encouragement for you to take on TO GET INTO projects or ideas THAT I HAVE NEVER not receiveD in Cayman. and I 'm WAS not able to live by the UWC mission since BECAUSE I 'm WAS not encircled by people who are passionateD about TO making MAKE changes. I also dIDn't feel I 'm WAS surrounded by as much diversity as I need to contribute to a vibrant education inside and outside the classroom like UWC. WhatELSE also motivated me to apply WAS the possibility TO receivEing two years of an IB education, which doesn't only COULD ALSO include academicsbut also extracurricular activities and the active environment ACTIVITY that I WAS seekING.

The UWC movement appealed to my dreamS of using business techniques to find solutions to FOR social problems, working to develop my knowledge of ABOUT the environment and breaking down misunderstandings and stereotypes held around the world. I have the urge to go somewhere where I can expand my knowledge and , contribute to the diversITY OF THE environment. and when I found out about UWC, it was an impeccable match. I want to WHERE I CAN learn how to perceive everything from ACHIEVE different perspectives, which I'm confident I will learn at UWC . I have a hunger AM EAGER to learn more and AND hear more of ABOUT people's stories and the world as I know AND how much I don't know. I no longer want people to see a little dot on the map when they think about the Cayman Islands, NO LONGER I WANT TO BE but a face inwhitheych rememberED from AS an excellent ambassador of the Cayman Islands, named Derricka. I'm confident that after two years of studying at UWC I will BE able to use NOT ONLY what I have gained PERSONALLY to cultivate not only myself and the BUT FOR Cayman Islands, but AND TO the world.