Undergraduate / STORYTELLING COLLEGE ESSAY - academic programs focused on communication and the arts [2]

While the content of the second essay itself is good and interesting, there are parts that can be omitted to prevent the essay from dragging on and make it more concise and easy to read. I have my made my revisions on the version below (you are welcome to use them exactly if you wish). Sorry i didnt reply to essay 1, i didnt feel like i could give you very good feedback on it so i instead focused on essay 2.

The story of my life would be appropriately titled,"Expert Vagabond." A vagabond is a person who wanders from place to place without a home, and SIMILAR TO A VAGABOND I have been traveling to various parts of the world since I was one year old. My family has given me multiple opportunities to travel and I could never explain in detail the gratitude I have for them. I HAVE LEARNED SOMETHING VALUABLE FROM EVERY TRIP. My passion for traveling rose BLOOMED when I began learning more about the history and cultures of other countries all around the world through books, movies, and school. While I love the US, I can never imagine living here my entire life, and I hope to live in at least every continent throughout my life. One of my goals in life is to never stop exploring, to never stop journeying, because in my personal opinion there is just so much this world has to offer to experience THE WORLD HAS MUCH TO OFFER that you would be crazy to not try to encounter a chunk of every country in this world AND IT WOULD BE CRAZY TO NOT TRY TO EXPERIENCE IT ALL. Unlike a vagabond, while I do have a home, my objective is to see the world from someone else's perspective and so far I have accomplished that by traveling to various countries I WISH TO SEE THE WORLD FROM ANOTHER PERSPECTIVE AND CAN ACCOMPLISH THIS THROUGH TRAVELLING IT.