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Posts by Mai_chan
Name: mai Hickam
Joined: Nov 21, 2015
Last Post: Nov 22, 2015
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Mai_chan   
Nov 22, 2015
Writing Feedback / TELEVISION AND ITS advantages - it's very useful device [4]

Actually I feel like your Essay is informal and out of the topic (The question )

I am not an expert on correcting essays but here goes nothing .
In conclusion, television are useful devices for many reasons . People watch television for entertaining in free time or break periods. Adults can gain information on what's happening in their society or world by watching some news reports.Advertisement between each TV programs can introduce new products to viewers for better purchasing.

I think you can just improve this conclusion by adding more details and supporting ideas to get a better answer for that questions .

hope this could help -.-

Sincerely,

Mai_chan
Mai_chan   
Nov 21, 2015
Essays / Preparing for IELTS exam, need help in writing essays [10]

A short essay is longer than a paragraph , but like the paragraph it has three basic parts : an introduction , a body , and a conclusion .

The introductory paragraph states the topic [ including the thesis statement at the end of the introduction states the topic ]

the body paragraphs support the idea in the the thesis statement and each body paragraph has a topic sentence .

the essay conclusion summarizes the idea in the thesis statement .

I wish this could help you , it is written in my book tbh xp
Mai_chan   
Nov 21, 2015
Writing Feedback / My two houses. Deciding to move to another house is a big upheaval for the entire family. [4]

Hi everyone , This is actually my first post in this site .. please review this comparison-contrast Essay . *also English is not my native language*

Deciding to move to another house is a big upheaval for the entire family . At first, I thought it would be hard to forget about the old one , but when I compared them , they seem different in a pleasant way .

One of the differences is privacy space. In my old house ,The rooms were tiny and close to each other , and I had to sleep with my two sisters in one room . Unlike the new one , It has two stairs and the rooms are more beautiful and wider than the old one . I have my own room and its bathroom that nobody can share it with me .

The new house has a big yard with a beautiful garden to plant different types of flowers and Roses and we like to set there and chat with each other , also children have more space to play with the neighbors . In contrast, the old house was smaller and we spent the whole time watching TV or setting in the living room .for example , when it's raining , we could just watch from the windows without playing under the rain.

The last difference is living in a big house most of the time is uneasy to elder people or sick people because they have difficulty with claiming the staircases , also we have a difficulty in moving new furniture and other items.

To sum up , There are advantages and disadvantages in both of them , but I prefer the new one because the streets are less noisy and the neighbors are friendly and I am satisfied with it.

So . What do you guys think ?? I am not sure about the conclusion .

Thanks in advance :)
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