Undergraduate / It took me a lot of years to realize that the person influencing me the most was my father. Intro. [5]

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Indicate a person who has had a significant influence on you and describe that influence.
A human mind is such that it continuously absorbs, seeks and shapes in accordance to its context, circumstances, and experiences. From the moment we are born, we began to see things, interact with those that care for us, lets our minds soak in all that we observe ad gradually discern who and what we like than influencing us to become a distinct individual.

It took me a lot of years to realize that the person influencing me the most was my father. He is a calm and patient person