Undergraduate / My lifetime goal is to go a good school and secure my future so I can help my parents and family [3]

I need help on feedback and what you think of my college undergraduate essay.

Topic C: Considering your lifetime foals, discuss how your current and future academic and extracurricular activities might help you archive your goals.

My essay:

My lifetime goal is to go a good school and secure my future so I can help my parents and family members financially. For the longest time I thought that I would become an interior designer, but it wasn't until last summer when I visited my aunt, who is an architect in Mexico. It was watching her work and see how she saw everything from scratch; from having an idea of creating a building, to buying land, to calling engineers, to contracting constructors, and designing the interior of each room to the taste of the client, that inspired me to take a step higher and also become an architect.

The class that are helping get an idea of what it would be like when I mayor in architecture is engineering. In engineering we have to find a task, create sketches, write the measurements, build our machine, and revise our work as it goes. Although in engineering differs from architecture, both share their similarities like: designing, planning, the science of construction, and structural function. I learn in engineering that it takes a lot of motivation, determination and revision to make a structure work. This will help me when I study architecture since I would have to use these aspects when designing and constructing a place.

I made a last minute change on what I wanted to mayor in, but my hard working attitude and my constant motivation to provide to my parents and family members to have a better life pushes me to become the best version of me. I imply what I learned in engineering holds true to my everyday life; I have to be motivated to learn and go forward despite the challenges, determined to push myself through until I complete my goal, and revise my way of life and work place so I would improve the quality of my work. Teachers often praise me for working hard and maintaining good grades, despite that my English in not my first language. Giving is not an option for me; I will continue to work hard and push myself forward; going to college will give me that opportunity to fulfill my lifetime goals.