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Dec 5, 2015
Writing Feedback / The hardest dilemma about which choice we should take - SAT essay [2]
I'm practicing for my SAT with essay so please kindly help me grade this essay on the scale of 2-12
What two opinions are the most difficult to choose between?
We all have been in a dilemma and confound about which choice we should take as every decision we make could lead to a significant effect in our life. And to me, the two options that are the most difficult to choose between is to purchase perfection or accepting who we are.
No one is perfect and we all know that. To satisfy people around us or just to be defined as "accomplished" , we always hide our mistakes and imperfection. We can lose ourself, don't know who we are as we have been wearing a mask for a long time. However, if we make every efforts to become good at everything, we will discover our inner talents and be extremely fulfilled when we reach the thing that we consider as 'perfection'.
We have more chances to become the best version of ourselves.
In contrast to the first option, accepting who we are seems hard for an ambitious person. Though we might face either satisfactation or unsatisfactation of what we are having, those things which we are having is the only thing that makes us special. For example, Elizabeth in a famous Jane Austen's novel, Pride and Prejudice, rather than pretending to be a perfect woman or being pessimistic because of not being perfect, she accepted who she is, continued doing what she loved. She was always herself and that made Mr.Darcy - an intelligent, prestigious man interested in.
To choose between following perfection or living with our real abilities is always a hard choice for all of us.
P/s: I'm trying my best to improve my poor writing skills. Thanks for helping!
I'm practicing for my SAT with essay so please kindly help me grade this essay on the scale of 2-12
What two opinions are the most difficult to choose between?
We all have been in a dilemma and confound about which choice we should take as every decision we make could lead to a significant effect in our life. And to me, the two options that are the most difficult to choose between is to purchase perfection or accepting who we are.
No one is perfect and we all know that. To satisfy people around us or just to be defined as "accomplished" , we always hide our mistakes and imperfection. We can lose ourself, don't know who we are as we have been wearing a mask for a long time. However, if we make every efforts to become good at everything, we will discover our inner talents and be extremely fulfilled when we reach the thing that we consider as 'perfection'.
We have more chances to become the best version of ourselves.
In contrast to the first option, accepting who we are seems hard for an ambitious person. Though we might face either satisfactation or unsatisfactation of what we are having, those things which we are having is the only thing that makes us special. For example, Elizabeth in a famous Jane Austen's novel, Pride and Prejudice, rather than pretending to be a perfect woman or being pessimistic because of not being perfect, she accepted who she is, continued doing what she loved. She was always herself and that made Mr.Darcy - an intelligent, prestigious man interested in.
To choose between following perfection or living with our real abilities is always a hard choice for all of us.
P/s: I'm trying my best to improve my poor writing skills. Thanks for helping!
