Nada9210
Dec 12, 2015
Writing Feedback / Health is indeed wealth! IGCSE ESL - How to Improve for the Exam [7]
Thank you so, so much for your help, support and motivation. :D
Thank you so, so much for your help, support and motivation. :D
Nada9210
Dec 12, 2015
Writing Feedback / Health is indeed wealth! IGCSE ESL - How to Improve for the Exam [7]
Thank you so much :D One more question though, can I ask for feedback regarding a letter I wrote even if this is an essay forum?
And could you please advice me on how I could improve my sentence construction and vocabulary?
Thank you so much :D One more question though, can I ask for feedback regarding a letter I wrote even if this is an essay forum?
And could you please advice me on how I could improve my sentence construction and vocabulary?
Nada9210
Dec 12, 2015
Writing Feedback / Health is indeed wealth! IGCSE ESL - How to Improve for the Exam [7]
Thank you so much for your feedback, but I'm not sure I get what you mean. What is exactly the main problem with my essay? How do I refer to myself as the main speaker? And do you mean that I should state my opinion again in the last paragraph? So I should summarize the whole essay in the last paragraph and add my opinion again to support it?
I heard that in an essay, when you are writing for and against the topic, you state your opinion in the last paragraph. You give an introduction, write the next paragraph for the topic, the one after that against the topic, and give a conclusion in the end wherein you state your opinion. Is that not true?
Any advice on how to improve the sentence construction and idiom descriptions as well as enhance my vocabulary? Thank you so much, I really appreciate it :D
Thank you so much for your feedback, but I'm not sure I get what you mean. What is exactly the main problem with my essay? How do I refer to myself as the main speaker? And do you mean that I should state my opinion again in the last paragraph? So I should summarize the whole essay in the last paragraph and add my opinion again to support it?
I heard that in an essay, when you are writing for and against the topic, you state your opinion in the last paragraph. You give an introduction, write the next paragraph for the topic, the one after that against the topic, and give a conclusion in the end wherein you state your opinion. Is that not true?
Any advice on how to improve the sentence construction and idiom descriptions as well as enhance my vocabulary? Thank you so much, I really appreciate it :D
Nada9210
Dec 12, 2015
Writing Feedback / Health is indeed wealth! IGCSE ESL - How to Improve for the Exam [7]
Please help me improve my writing skills through this essay. I need to know if my writing is good enough in terms of content, style and language. I would really appreciate it if you could grade it out of 18; 9 marks for content and 9 marks for style and accuracy of language.
I would also like to know where should I include my opinion, first or last paragraph? And is it necessary that the writing should be in block form, or is indented fine? Is it important to write the article in 150-200 words long?
Thank you so much.
Health is indeed wealth!
Many people all over the world know and spell the popular saying "Health is wealth", especially mothers, who are adamant on ensuring that their children's health is treasured. However, do the children, and many teenagers as a matter of fact, understand the pristine and intrinsic significance of health today? I believe that health is the most important.
Young people should take certain measure to lead a healthy life. Firstly, they should be well-aware of the extreme vitality of their health and how precious it is for the sake of their lives. For instance, teenagers should sleep well so that the brain gets enough energy to do its work. In addition, a balanced diet and lots of water are compulsory and integral constituents of the development of their healthy life and they must take care of what they consume. Eating lots of fruits and vegetables instead of junk food is highly recommended, so they should not avoid them just because they hate them!
Moreover, cleanliness is mandatory for health maintenance, as well as physical exercise, in order to avoid diseases and decrease the chance of experiencing obesity.
Teenagers who take care of their health will certainly lead a happy life, rather than spending it in the hospital because of allowing it to deteriorate. Therefore, despite the pressure, it is definitely worth it.
Please help me improve my writing skills through this essay. I need to know if my writing is good enough in terms of content, style and language. I would really appreciate it if you could grade it out of 18; 9 marks for content and 9 marks for style and accuracy of language.
I would also like to know where should I include my opinion, first or last paragraph? And is it necessary that the writing should be in block form, or is indented fine? Is it important to write the article in 150-200 words long?
Thank you so much.
Health is indeed wealth!
Many people all over the world know and spell the popular saying "Health is wealth", especially mothers, who are adamant on ensuring that their children's health is treasured. However, do the children, and many teenagers as a matter of fact, understand the pristine and intrinsic significance of health today? I believe that health is the most important.
Young people should take certain measure to lead a healthy life. Firstly, they should be well-aware of the extreme vitality of their health and how precious it is for the sake of their lives. For instance, teenagers should sleep well so that the brain gets enough energy to do its work. In addition, a balanced diet and lots of water are compulsory and integral constituents of the development of their healthy life and they must take care of what they consume. Eating lots of fruits and vegetables instead of junk food is highly recommended, so they should not avoid them just because they hate them!
Moreover, cleanliness is mandatory for health maintenance, as well as physical exercise, in order to avoid diseases and decrease the chance of experiencing obesity.
Teenagers who take care of their health will certainly lead a happy life, rather than spending it in the hospital because of allowing it to deteriorate. Therefore, despite the pressure, it is definitely worth it.
