Posts by Abdelrahman

Abdelrahman

Jan 3, 2016

Undergraduate / What excites you about Notre Dame - I need your opinions about my application supplement essay [6]

The latin phrase means: Rising from the ashes towards a brighter future, either ways, I am going to rise above all and own the world. Intellectual, limitless, faithless. Do you think it's relative??

Abdelrahman

Dec 31, 2015

Undergraduate / What excites you about Notre Dame - I need your opinions about my application supplement essay [6]

Thanks so much for your review,, I will try to write it again including what u told me. I also need your opinion about the idea of answering the question, the Latin phrase I mean?!

Abdelrahman

Dec 30, 2015

Undergraduate / Helping hand in translating - Common App essay. Does this all work together? [9]

Your essay is rich with ideas and that's good but I agree with the last comment, you need to make it more about, don't talk too much about Kartar Singh Sarabha. Use the space to mention another quality in you, maybe an academic achievement that you accomplished despite the difficulties you faced.

That phase in your life that changed you dramatically, I think you should dedicate a separate paragraph on this topic, it's a great idea to talk about but you need to support it with examples, events that show it changed you, not only tell.

The rest of the essay is good, just try to link all sentences together, use more transition words, and omit any redundancies or information that could be implied from other parts of the essay.

good luck

Abdelrahman

Dec 29, 2015

Undergraduate / What excites you about Notre Dame - I need your opinions about my application supplement essay [6]

Hi, this my first time to do this. I wrote an essay for University of Notre Dame using an idea that I am not sure I can use so I need your comments.

Prompt: What excites you about attending Notre Dame?

I was allowed 200 words to answer this question, but I only need less than 150 words to say exactly why I want to attend ND. So, at the end, you will find some words that you may or may not know their meanings, yet they do have one.

I had some thorough conversations with a current student, and I was automatically drawn to ND when he said "It's like family here, there's no place else where you live in the same building for four years with people of different ages, majors, backgrounds and cultures". For me, that's the type of community I want to be a part of. Particularly, neuroscience and behavioral psychology are my fascination. I have been following up with prof. Gerald Haeffel's research in clinical psychology about cognitive vulnerability and studies in mind-mood connection, and, if admitted, I want to join his research team and be part of his C&E Lab. With its rigorous science program, harmonious community and connection between studies, faith and ethics, I'm more than excited to learn from ND, not at it.

Ab ortu clarior futura ad suscipiendos cineres, aut viis suis, et ascendet super omnes ego mundo. Intellectualis, absque limite, fidelia.