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Name: Yuanchu Yang
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School: Vanderbilt University

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dundunyang   
Jan 6, 2016
Undergraduate / Why Yale? The academic resources at Yale far surpass the resources available at Vanderbilt. [6]

Is my delivery of the information too confusing? Should I change that?

I am currently a student at Vanderbilt, and the first paragraph has me describing Vanderbilt's own housing situation with the 10 houses on the Ingram Commons( I currently live there, the information is straight from my heart), and how I want to go to college at Yale because of its residential college's similarity to my current housing situation.

"Beating those smug Crawford House residents at flag football. Nabbing the game-winning question at the inter-house Quizbowl tournament. Enjoying ice cream with my housemates during Gillette Gelato. These memories will always be an part of me and my college experience."- These are events that have occurred to me during freshman year, and I thought it would be a good way to say how much I love my current house at Vanderbilt(Crawford is a house on Vanderbilt's Ingram Commons, not a residential college at Yale).
dundunyang   
Jan 6, 2016
Undergraduate / Why Yale? The academic resources at Yale far surpass the resources available at Vanderbilt. [6]

Transfer Essay for College Student: Why Yale? (250 word limit):

The residential colleges are the biggest nonacademic reason that Yale appeals to me. At Vanderbilt, freshmen are randomly sorted into one of ten residential houses on the Ingram Commons. From that point forward, the other students in your house, along with the Faculty Head, become part of your live-in family at Vanderbilt. Each house has its own history and traditions, and the atmosphere gives each individual a unique self-identity and loyalty to their house. Personally, I love the sense of comradery that the Ingram Commons brings, and given its similarity to Yale's residential colleges, it's not surprising that I am attracted to Yale itself.

In addition, the academic resources at Yale far surpass the resources available at Vanderbilt. From Yale's history of studying and applying TCM in many of its labs, to the connections formed by the Yale-China association to let me acquire medicinal herbs firsthand, Yale's resources are available nowhere else in the world with respect to Traditional Chinese Medicine.

Beating those smug Crawford House residents at flag football. Nabbing the game-winning question at the inter-house Quizbowl tournament. Enjoying ice cream with my housemates during Gillette Gelato. These memories will always be an part of me and my college experience. But I am positive that at Yale, I will form new, lasting relationships with my college family, and reach even greater heights in my academic career. I know that a college experience at Yale will be demanding, but at the same time, I look forward to its inexhaustible rewards.
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