dundunyang
Jan 6, 2016
Undergraduate / Why Yale? The academic resources at Yale far surpass the resources available at Vanderbilt. [6]
Is my delivery of the information too confusing? Should I change that?
I am currently a student at Vanderbilt, and the first paragraph has me describing Vanderbilt's own housing situation with the 10 houses on the Ingram Commons( I currently live there, the information is straight from my heart), and how I want to go to college at Yale because of its residential college's similarity to my current housing situation.
"Beating those smug Crawford House residents at flag football. Nabbing the game-winning question at the inter-house Quizbowl tournament. Enjoying ice cream with my housemates during Gillette Gelato. These memories will always be an part of me and my college experience."- These are events that have occurred to me during freshman year, and I thought it would be a good way to say how much I love my current house at Vanderbilt(Crawford is a house on Vanderbilt's Ingram Commons, not a residential college at Yale).
Is my delivery of the information too confusing? Should I change that?
I am currently a student at Vanderbilt, and the first paragraph has me describing Vanderbilt's own housing situation with the 10 houses on the Ingram Commons( I currently live there, the information is straight from my heart), and how I want to go to college at Yale because of its residential college's similarity to my current housing situation.
"Beating those smug Crawford House residents at flag football. Nabbing the game-winning question at the inter-house Quizbowl tournament. Enjoying ice cream with my housemates during Gillette Gelato. These memories will always be an part of me and my college experience."- These are events that have occurred to me during freshman year, and I thought it would be a good way to say how much I love my current house at Vanderbilt(Crawford is a house on Vanderbilt's Ingram Commons, not a residential college at Yale).