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Name: Sayeda Bukhari
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bukhari1   
Feb 5, 2016
Graduate / Graduate application for pursuing LLM after failing the Bar exam. [6]

Hey,

Thank you so for the insight. The word limit for all LLM programs or at least the ones I'm applying to are 1500 words. This is about 1500 words and I'll need to cut it short. I'll check the spacing and make another draft. I'm so thankful for the contribution. In Pakistan there isn't a law school that offers LLM and this is my only shot.

Many thanks.
bukhari1   
Feb 4, 2016
Writing Feedback / Writing Task 1: the condition of Stokeford village in 1930 and in 2010 [3]

All corrections (proposed) are in brackets.

... change is that open area was replaced by various kinds of residences.
(Replace "area" with the kind of land it was, for example grassland or plains etc)

Moving to more detailed explanation, in the north side of the village, figure of the bridge and the frame of River Stoke were not altered while the farmland area in 1930 was substituted by extended house in 2010.

(Refrain from using "side" when you are mentioning North, South, East or West. Always keep it as "in the north".
("Moving on" to "a" more detailed explanation)
(substituted by extended "housing" in 2010)

There were also changes in the opposite side of it in which houses became larger and made two shops disappeared. Fortunately, the construction of post office still existed over an eighty-year period.

(changes "on" the opposite side of it "which resulted in the enlargement of houses and the disappearance of shops".
(Fortunately, the "post office building" still "stood" after an eighty year period.

Turning to the south part (same mistake of using "side" from post office, many citizens' dwellings can ...

Opposite (opposite "to" these accommodations, there were retirement houses as the output of large houses substitution (of the substitution of large houses).

In addition to this, the new buildings, particularly in front of the retirement block, took garden area.(used up the garden area)
bukhari1   
Feb 4, 2016
Student Talk / PRACTISING SPEAKING ENGLISH? HELP? [5]

Hey there. I'd be available for the practice sessions but I have my exams from the 17th of this month which go till the 31st. I'd be more than happy to practice with you after that if that is okay by whatever timeline you have in mind for your IELTS. I can facetime which is most convenient. I'm a girl as well so high five and I'll be happy to help. My email is tehniyat.bukhari@gmail.com
bukhari1   
Feb 4, 2016
Writing Feedback / Increasing the price of petrol - the best solution to traffic and pollution problems? [3]

Hey. I've read your essay and propose the following corrections which are in brackets.

... not recognise many negative impacts that it poses, which clarifies the reason ... (The comma should not be there and change 'impacts' to 'effects'.

The flow of ideas is well structures and coherent but (this is just a suggestion) you could mention the model India is currently using to reduce pollution by allowing even and odd numbered cars to be on the road on alternate days with the exception of weekends. This trend will promote the use of public transport and thus the raise in fuel prices to reduce traffic density would not be as such needed. This approach will reduce the number of cars on the road and thus the fuel raise wouldn't be needed. Additionally the grammar needs some reworking and you need to run your essay through spell check as well for fragments that might consider revision.

... as a result, hardly ever will people have to confront the so-called traffic congestion. (more capacities of "roads" and "people will hardly" have to confront the so called traffic congestion."

These transports prompt many people to opt for rather than their own vehicles, which partially contribute to the high traffic density. (These "means of transport"/transport services" prompt many people to opt "out of" their own vehicles. "thus" contributing to "lowering of traffic density".
bukhari1   
Feb 4, 2016
Graduate / Graduate application for pursuing LLM after failing the Bar exam. [6]

I've rewritten the entire statement of purpose for an LLM. Suggestions/Advice please.

A nation who prided ourselves on the percepts of law, today have become a society where to be silent is an active verb. Everyday in terms of law and order we touch a new low; such are the circumstances which have triggered me to veer away and find my niche in the study of law which I feel would be of great benefit to society.

In order to gain first hand experience I interned at Chima and Ibrahim Associates for six weeks and four weeks at the Dubai Islamic Bank gave me a glimpse of the professional world during the summers of 2010. Chima and Ibrahim is a firm that specializes in corporate and land law cases. I was initially given the task to prepare a document on the application of the law of pre-emption across the country. This is a law which has been derived from the principles of Islam. However, the numerous sects that are prevalent in the religion have their own interpretation of the way the law ought to operate. The law is applied to the members of the society according to the sect they believe in. The problem arises when two people of different sects are a party to the same case because it becomes very difficult to determine which interpretation should be applied to that specific case. After extensive research and a lot of effort I managed to get through the task in almost two weeks following which I was taken into a team which was working on a case on the law of pre-emption and this was related to the conflict between two different interpretations of the law. As a member of team I helped with not just the research but was also active during our meeting with the clients and when we were discussing the case amongst ourselves. These were two different experiences which gave me the determination to work harder as I was in a very competitive environment.

I did my LLB hons as an external student of the University of London from an institution called University College Lahore. During my stay there not only did I perform academically but I also tried to continue with the other extra-curricular activities which were an integral part of my life during my school years. During my three years as a student there I won five national parliamentary debating competitions, runners up at five such competitions, was declared the best delegate at four Model United Nations, served as the General Secretary of the Debating Society for the academic year 2010-2011 and then also served as the president of the society during my last year there. I was invited to chair at numerous National Model United Nations across the country. I represented the college at three international tournaments: National Law School Debate 2009 in Bangalore and the Malaysia Debate Open 2011 and 2012. Owing to my dedication and hard work I was awarded the extra-curricular roll of honour in 2012. The practical experience gained during my internships and my love for speaking further instigated my urge to study law.

Through the time i spent doing by bptc in london, i faced multiple challenges but little did i know that by the end of it i would face the biggest test so far. Failure in anyway is irreconcilable considering my past record failing the bar was not easy to comprehend at first,but i learned that when failure strikes it presents you with a unique oppurtunity not only to self actualise but also to stand by the choices you make and own upto what you have done. Every sinner has a future and every priest has a past and just like that i had to swallow my pride pull up my socks and start from scratch. The rebuilding phase was tough and like any other rehabilitation regime it demanded time and committment.

I having understood what i had done wrong pinpointed the issues i face such as my growing disinterest in litigation in Pakistan and the rampant redtapism and also the intricacies of english that eluded me previously were clarified through endless research. I focused all my energies towards what made me happy rather than what was constantly demanded of me and in that i realised how once overconfidence could be transformed into intellectual and basic humility.

Furthermore I did two internships of three months each during the summers of 2011 and 2012 with Mr.Salman Akram Raja, a well known lawyer across the nation while doing my LLB Hons. Following the completion of my education I was offered a job by Mr. Raja and I thus worked as an associate lawyer at his firm for a year and a half. I researched on how the principle of judicial review is applied in different countries across the world. I am a strong proponent of the idea that knowledge without application serves no purpose whatsoever and this was the first time that I was actually applying a principle which I had studied in class to the real world. The difference for example of the way the principle of judicial review operates in Pakistan compared to the UK was very intriguing because the judiciary having the power to strike down an act of parliament under the principle of Pakistan was something which I would have never imagined having studied the operation of that principle in the UK. Knowing how the principle operates in the UK gave me an insight on how on a first level there is a difference in the way the principle applies in different jurisdictions and on a second level why is the application of the same principle is so different owing to the differences in the way the political system of that country works.

I worked with Mr. Raja on a case of constitutional importance. Democracy in Pakistan has always been threatened by the army. In this case we had to challenge the unconstitutional interference of the armed forces in the democratic process. I was given the task to formulate arguments around the principle of democracy to strengthen our case. Not only did I contribute during the meetings but I was also given the opportunity by Mr. Raja to accompany him to the Supreme Court when the case was being heard. When he used the arguments which I had put forth during our discussions it instilled a great sense of achievement in me. It was not just these two cases that I worked on during the internships there but also on several cases pertaining to mortgages and bank loans.

Tax, Civil and Constitutional law were areas of law that started catching my interest and thus I decided to shift to a law firm that was more focused towards these areas of law and thus I joined Sajid Hotiana Law Associates as a senior associate. My work with Mr. Hotiana was mainly focused towards learning tax trial work and then assisting him in various constitutional law cases which were linked with tax law.

One of the cases that caught my attention was the challenge under a writ petition to the power of contempt given to the Banking Ombudsman. My work included case law research across several jurisdictions on how separation of powers between different pillars of the state is the most important component of the protection of an individual's right to fair trial. In my written brief I distinguished between complete and partial separation of powers, with argumentation supporting the latter as being the more practical of the two and that overlap should be at a minimum possible to allow complete independence of the judiciary. This according to me is the most important component of the separation of powers.

During my work on constitutional writs I had to also do intensive research on International law which caught my attention. The question that sprung up in my mind during the research was how international law is a concept which many refer to as soft law and its distinction in the way it fucntions with that of any national legal system which is based on retribution acting as detterent to keep the populous under the realms of law was very intuiging to me. The main reason behind this was that my understanding of law was always that the monopoly over the use of force which the state inherently holds as being a mechanism to maintain law and order and to ensure proper application of the rule of law. International law works on the other hand on diplomacy and sometimes economic or other sanctions by states collectively on a certain rogue state such as the ones imposed on North Korea following their withdrawl from the NPT and their development of nuclear weapons. This example of North Korea though is a one off in international law and no such detterent really exists in that system yet nation states still follow it, and this for me is one of the most important features of international law.

I believe in hard work and have always lived by the motto of my school "Perseverance Commands Success" and pursuing an L.L.M at your University shall serve my ambition to prove myself as one of the best professionals in the field. Studying in the UK has always been a dream and it will be a great opportunity to broaden my horizon; get a taste of different cultures and to interact with people belonging to different societies of the world. For me attaining this degree is the corner stone to achieving my goals. I look forward to developing my abilities and contributing to society with the help of the education your degree offers.
bukhari1   
Jan 30, 2016
Graduate / Graduate application for pursuing LLM after failing the Bar exam. [6]

Thank you so much. My understanding was that it had to be focused as a personal statement and could not adequately distinguish between the two. I'll work on it again and upload it. Hopefully I get it right this time.

Regards
bukhari1   
Jan 29, 2016
Graduate / Graduate application for pursuing LLM after failing the Bar exam. [6]

Statement of purpose
Your statement of purpose should explain why you want to study your chosen programme (LLM Public international law) and how it will help your life and career.


Through the time i spent doing by BPTC in London, i faced multiple challenges but little did i know that by the end of it i would face the biggest test so far. Failure in anyway is irreconcilable considering my past record failing the bar was not easy to comprehend at first,but i learned that when failure strikes it presents you with a unique opportunity not only to self actualize but also to stand by the choices you make and own up to what you have done. Every sinner has a future and every priest has a past and just like that i had to swallow my pride pull up my socks and start from scratch. The rebuilding phase was tough and like any other rehabilitation regime it demanded time and commitment.

I having understood what i had done wrong pinpointed the issues i face such as my growing disinterest in litigation in Pakistan and the rampant redtapism and also the intricacies of English that eluded me previously were clarified through endless research. I focused all my energies towards what made me happy rather than what was constantly demanded of me and in that i realized how once overconfidence could be transformed into intellectual and basic humility.