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Organisation needs, professional experience and education background - course and institution choice [7]
Hi, Ssakshijain! I am glad to receive your comments and advice. Thank you very much for that and sorry for the late response because it's quite hard to elaborate as you suggested. Anw, before I post my revised essay, let me explain why I write this essay. Well, it is one of the questions in AAS application form which has to done by the end of this month. According to word limit, yes there is word limit, approx 2000 characters max (space is counted). And yup, I work for one of government agencies and infrastructure management is my division. By considering my current working status, I have to make contribution to my organisation through this scholarship. So after finishing my study, it is a mandatory for us who work for government agencies to go back to our institutions. So, here is my revised essay. I will be glad if I can ask your time to read and give your comments about my writting progress.
As stated in the 5-year-medium-term-plans, the Indian government has increased its focus on infrastructure development. Since India is a developing country with limited resources, the government needs to invite private sectors to be part of infrastructure development through Public-Private Partnerships. However, in order for the private sectors to join in, the legal and management frameworks of asset is required and infrastructure planning need to be clear first before acquiring infrastructure. Since I have been 5 years working in the field of asset management, one of difficulties of asset management framework to develop infrastructure in India is infrastructure planning. As infrastructure planning is the most decisive part of infrastructure development, I have concerned to learn infrastructure planning. By taking the coursework of Master of Public Policy with a specialization in infrastructure planning, it is highly expected to give me opportunities to deepen my understanding and skills of the theory and practice of Public Policy related to infrastructure asset management that I obtained from Australia because Australia is a good example to learn it. I am sure that my enhanced knowledge will contribute directly to my organisation to develop and strengthen its role as an asset manager. According to my proposed institution, Australia has a good education system proved by large number Australian universities are ranked in the World's University Rankings. From those universities, I have decided Monash University and The University of Queensland to attend this appropriate coursework because they offered curriculum that I need. They are also the member of the group of 8 Australian Universities which has a commitment to excellence their education quality, such as building international connections with universities and research organisations worldwide. I believe that the more useful and powerful connections we can make, the greater our impact will be.
After reading that essay, is it easy to understand? and what do you think (too detailed/too general/too boring/too many unimportant words/statement? I look forward to your comments. Many thanks!
