Kholil
Jun 7, 2016
Kholil
Jun 6, 2016
Writing Feedback / Task 1 : The root causes of getting broken-heart [7]
Ichan., Thank you, Dude.
I'll definitely improve my writing. Especially for the collocation. I will learn it soon coz I haven't learnt it so far. Well, this is good advice for me to be better in my writing.
Well, may I have your essay, Dude as my consideration ? I can also learn from yours
Ichan., Thank you, Dude.
I'll definitely improve my writing. Especially for the collocation. I will learn it soon coz I haven't learnt it so far. Well, this is good advice for me to be better in my writing.
Well, may I have your essay, Dude as my consideration ? I can also learn from yours
Kholil
Jun 6, 2016
Writing Feedback / Task 1 : The root causes of getting broken-heart [7]
Akbar, thank you for suggesting and supporting me to improve my writing. This the first time for me joining in this group. Anyway, that is good advice for me to be better in my writing. Thank you, Dude. (y)
Akbar, thank you for suggesting and supporting me to improve my writing. This the first time for me joining in this group. Anyway, that is good advice for me to be better in my writing. Thank you, Dude. (y)
Kholil
Jun 6, 2016
Writing Feedback / Task 1 : The root causes of getting broken-heart [7]
Writer: ACHMAD KHOLILI
Nowadays, for the most part, adults and teenagers are getting relationship with each other. They are of those who are still under 18 up to those over it. They try looking for girls/ boys they are interested in and then getting relationship.
Looking for girls/ boys and getting relationship with each other is one of the people's dreams-especially for those still teenagers and adults. Many reasons are phrased by them. One of the reasons why they have to get relationship is that they wish to be happy and they can undergo this life together; but, we also know that not all of the people get a good relationship with their sweethearts/their boyfriends. They sometimes get broken in the middle. As a result, they get upset and get frustrated by reason of it. The following is some reasons why they must end relationship.
Firstly, someone can get broken with his girl/ her boyfriend owing to no more convenience between both of them. Having a good relationship is not a piece of cake. When she/he has found someone in his/ her life and she/he afterwards gets relationship with each other, she/he is supposed to have a commitment to be mutual understanding. She/he must know about his/ her partner's weaknesses and excesses. From time to time, when she/he gets relationship with each other and she/he deals with some problems either in communication or in other matters in keeping with his/ her relationship, she/he then cannot get them. Eventually, she/he gets dispute and as a result, she/ he must separate. If it befalls, you must have commitment to definitely figuring the problems out together in order not to have confusion and fracas in your relationship.
Secondly, the other side of being broken in relationship is that she/he no longer has satisfaction towards her/his partners. Relationship can last long because of faith to each other. Someone now and then must break his/ her relationship due to the fact that one of his/her partners cannot be loyal. It is significant for you to be faithful to each other if you are getting relationship so that you can get in touch and the relationship will keep in.
Lastly, the relationship can be broken on account of getting bored. This is one of the most influential matters that can make your relationship broken off. Someone sometimes gets bored when she/he has been getting so long relationship. She/he no longer has an eagerness to go on his relationship because she/he has no more affection. If this is the case, you have to consult with your partner in order that your partner knows about your actual feelings. Your partner will enter on you then.
In conclusion, inconvenience, no satisfaction, and getting bored are the main motive of getting broken in a relationship. So, you must be aware of them. To avoid them, you must be able to always have fun with your partners and make your relationship as good as possible.
Please put your comments about my writing!
Writer: ACHMAD KHOLILI
Nowadays, for the most part, adults and teenagers are getting relationship with each other. They are of those who are still under 18 up to those over it. They try looking for girls/ boys they are interested in and then getting relationship.
Looking for girls/ boys and getting relationship with each other is one of the people's dreams-especially for those still teenagers and adults. Many reasons are phrased by them. One of the reasons why they have to get relationship is that they wish to be happy and they can undergo this life together; but, we also know that not all of the people get a good relationship with their sweethearts/their boyfriends. They sometimes get broken in the middle. As a result, they get upset and get frustrated by reason of it. The following is some reasons why they must end relationship.
Firstly, someone can get broken with his girl/ her boyfriend owing to no more convenience between both of them. Having a good relationship is not a piece of cake. When she/he has found someone in his/ her life and she/he afterwards gets relationship with each other, she/he is supposed to have a commitment to be mutual understanding. She/he must know about his/ her partner's weaknesses and excesses. From time to time, when she/he gets relationship with each other and she/he deals with some problems either in communication or in other matters in keeping with his/ her relationship, she/he then cannot get them. Eventually, she/he gets dispute and as a result, she/ he must separate. If it befalls, you must have commitment to definitely figuring the problems out together in order not to have confusion and fracas in your relationship.
Secondly, the other side of being broken in relationship is that she/he no longer has satisfaction towards her/his partners. Relationship can last long because of faith to each other. Someone now and then must break his/ her relationship due to the fact that one of his/her partners cannot be loyal. It is significant for you to be faithful to each other if you are getting relationship so that you can get in touch and the relationship will keep in.
Lastly, the relationship can be broken on account of getting bored. This is one of the most influential matters that can make your relationship broken off. Someone sometimes gets bored when she/he has been getting so long relationship. She/he no longer has an eagerness to go on his relationship because she/he has no more affection. If this is the case, you have to consult with your partner in order that your partner knows about your actual feelings. Your partner will enter on you then.
In conclusion, inconvenience, no satisfaction, and getting bored are the main motive of getting broken in a relationship. So, you must be aware of them. To avoid them, you must be able to always have fun with your partners and make your relationship as good as possible.
Please put your comments about my writing!
