yvonnelee89
Jun 16, 2016
Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2 - Advertisements (problems & solutions) [2]
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Question: Advertisements are increasingly pervasive in people's lives. Explain what problems this trend may cause, and suggest some possible solutions.
Answer:
A wide range of advertisements are becoming more pervasive in today's society, and bring about different types of problems and drawbacks. Fortunately, there are solutions to tackle their impact. This essay will talk about the potential problems associated with pervasive advertisements and the measures we can take to address these problems.
There are numerous shortcomings of the increasingly pervasive commercials. Firstly, with more and more advertisements in sight, our society may become more prone to/susceptible to consumerism. Also, companies, in order to increase sales and revenue, some may make exaggerated or deceiving claims in advertisement, which may further worsen the throw-away culture. In addition, to make their goods more appealing, organizations usually have their products or services endorsed by celebrities, which potentially influences customers by associating certain feelings with their goods. To use a common example for this practice, advertisements of cigarettes which are typically endorsed by famous actors dressing as a cowboy may convey the association between cigarettes and coolness or masculinity. This can particularly have a negative effect on teenagers.
Despite the seemingly profound effects of advertising, there are various ways that everyone can take to lessen its negative influence. At an individual level, customers can become wiser buyers by having a deeper thought before deciding to buy certain products, especially when it is endorsed by idols. Besides, advertising agencies should consider morally before advertisements become public. Furthermore, governments could introduce a new law to forbid advertisements of unhealthy products from broadcasting during after-school hours and prime time. In this way, young people would be protected from the exposure of advertisements of unhealthy products.
In conclusion, both individual and advertising agencies, as well as governments can play their part in alleviating the negative impact of commercial.
(288 words)
Hi everyone. I made this question on my own and hope you guys can give some feedback.
Please don't hestitate to provide your valuable opinions, corrections, and suggestions even if it just just an omission of 'the/a/an' or not even examples
Thank you so much!
Question: Advertisements are increasingly pervasive in people's lives. Explain what problems this trend may cause, and suggest some possible solutions.
Answer:
A wide range of advertisements are becoming more pervasive in today's society, and bring about different types of problems and drawbacks. Fortunately, there are solutions to tackle their impact. This essay will talk about the potential problems associated with pervasive advertisements and the measures we can take to address these problems.
There are numerous shortcomings of the increasingly pervasive commercials. Firstly, with more and more advertisements in sight, our society may become more prone to/susceptible to consumerism. Also, companies, in order to increase sales and revenue, some may make exaggerated or deceiving claims in advertisement, which may further worsen the throw-away culture. In addition, to make their goods more appealing, organizations usually have their products or services endorsed by celebrities, which potentially influences customers by associating certain feelings with their goods. To use a common example for this practice, advertisements of cigarettes which are typically endorsed by famous actors dressing as a cowboy may convey the association between cigarettes and coolness or masculinity. This can particularly have a negative effect on teenagers.
Despite the seemingly profound effects of advertising, there are various ways that everyone can take to lessen its negative influence. At an individual level, customers can become wiser buyers by having a deeper thought before deciding to buy certain products, especially when it is endorsed by idols. Besides, advertising agencies should consider morally before advertisements become public. Furthermore, governments could introduce a new law to forbid advertisements of unhealthy products from broadcasting during after-school hours and prime time. In this way, young people would be protected from the exposure of advertisements of unhealthy products.
In conclusion, both individual and advertising agencies, as well as governments can play their part in alleviating the negative impact of commercial.
(288 words)
