Undergraduate / "Why NYU?" Essay written based on New York's Charm [3]

I fell that it wont be enough for my application so I am open to your advices in order to improve it.

I gave my decision to apply NYU when I was in New York 5 years ago before high school. Besides Istanbul I have never been impressed by any other city in the whole world. It is everyone's dream to settle in New York and spend the rest of their lives. That is "The American Dream". I have seen New York before from movies: Times Square, 5th Avenue, Madison Square Garden... But, no. Seeing these places in real life made an even more impact on me. And I said to myself "This is the city that I want to study in.". After I enrolled in my current school Uskudar American Academy the dream seemed closer. Every year, I saw top students admitted to NYU and it made me think that why can't I do what they did? That was the key to my motivation. After I choose my area of study, I started to search the best schools in the USA. During my research, I had a chance to talk with people who were studying at NYU. Their opinions were all the same: " Apply to NYU, trust me, you will not regret it.". I knew it beforehand that the NYU Stern School of Business was one of the most prestigious business schools in the USA. Additionally, New York is the best city to work in the areas of business, economics and finance; and it is full of opportunities thanks to Wall Street.

To be honest, I have not seen the campus yet, but based on my friends' thoughts and experiences, it is attractive and vibrant. I am only interested in NYU's New York Campus because I think that I will not find the same school spirit in Shanghai and Abu Dhabi. Without no doubt, NYU will be my first choice in the USA, regardless of any other universities. I am willing to use NYU's reputation and global network in my future.

Undergraduate / The quote attributed to William Hastie, Amherst College Class of 1925 - Amherst Writing Supplement [3]

"Difficulty need not foreshadow despair or defeat. Rather, achievement can be all the more satisfying because of obstacles surmounted." Attributed to William Hastie, Amherst College Class of 1925, the first African-American to serve as a judge for the United States Court of Appeals

Throughout our lives, we face difficulties we think it is impossible to surpass. It happens because of human nature, we tend to see the obstacles bigger than they are. However, it does not have to be like that way. To overcome difficulties, humans must use their minds which differ humans from and other living creatures. If everyone had given up just because they faced with difficulties our World would have stayed the same.

This quotation has a special meaning for me because it beautifully explains the tough times I had gone through. After I experienced my first epileptic seizure in my prep year, I lost all of my morale since it made it hard for me to focus on my lessons and study hard. I acknowledged that one reason it occurred was stress which my school caused. My illness had an immediate effect on my grades since doctors told me to avoid stress and not study for a time being. In my prep year, I hoped that it won't continue anymore, however, it had seizures in 9th and 10th grade either. It was a difficulty that stood in my way of success but I never accepted to become unsuccessful just because of my illness. Even though my grades in 9th grade is low, I increased it by never giving up. When I face with difficulty I don't back off because I am not that person. Deep down I emphasized that the achievement would worth it as Mr. William Hastie said and I should work hard to get it. The best result for my painstaking work would be getting accepted by prestigious colleges in the United States.