Essays / Chevening 2017/18 process for the questions of networking skill; convincing readers on my experience [4]

Wow thanks buddy! @ arthavmane I already checked your essay and give a little correction mate..

@ichanpants89 wow.. thank youu buddy, I've got the clue now for my networking essay!
You've been really helpful.

Undergraduate / "Playin' it the right way" - CommonApp'16 Essay [4]

Hai buddy, I'll try to help you as much as I can do.

Try to use punctuation to make your sentence clear. bcause I thought in your first sentence is a dependent clause so u need to make it clear by connected your first sentence to your other sentence, and in your second sentence if it's the past moment in your life or an action that happen around a time or around another action, try to using past continuous form in your sentence.

Just a little bit correct that I can made for you.

"I have always been an indoor guy, because I was never found a friends who I could play for. "

2. the little OUTDOOR KID inside me didn't perish
If you writting an official letter, it will much better if you avoid to using contraction in your sentence.

3.but I used to play like any other 9 year old would .
"but I play like any other 9 years old."

4. I don'tam not dither to challenge any professional badminton players for athe game anymore.

5. ... to play for people, for athe team,and my college team!

6. ... at the right moment and hit it because that's what you owe to the game

"You need to make a right move at the right time and hit it because that is what you owe to the game."

that is a little correction that I made for you, I wish all the best for your process through the process for your application.