Writing Feedback / We must be able to listen to the signal of body, because it is better than any doctors. [3]

Learning from her experiences, then Lissa researches _ unable to grasp the point and meaning.

This theory finally reveals the untold truth about the correlation between body and soul by providing ... - Break down into small sentences

She said, at that point, she was spiritually lost. - try using active voice

Corrected grammar :

As an opening, she begins by sharing ...
... she achieved all her dreams in a career, even had ...
In contrary with her brilliant job, her marriage ended miserably.
... blood pressure with three medications, but failed to heal her. She said, at that point , she was spiritually lost.

Undergraduate / "Don't you see? Syracuse is Syracuse" - impact on my decision for choosing this university [4]

This sounds more like a university Flyer. Not sure about the purpose of the essay, but if you are looking for graduate admission to specific department, I feel you must add more on the academic excellence along with few details from specific teachers. The essay itself is fine but needs complimentary info to make it more sensible. I feel at the current stage it's more of a college flyer :)