Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing Task II The internet has transformed the way information [5]

Dear writer, allow me to give opinion.

... large number of negative impacts for the human being. However, the society can take some possible steps to address such drawbacks.

... potensial risks that arepresented(caused) by this phenomenon.
... most people enable to see it . If the user is carelessness, anyone can have access to that information (in my view better if you explain little bit about why if someone else uses the information such as if the user is careless, potentially someone else will be able to use his or her personal information irresponsibly like hacking the credit card and so on) .

Secondly, it is obvious that there is a sharp rise [...] time to make a face-to-face communication. (I think that this part should be clear more, you have to make sure what are the examples of cyber crimes. In my view, human selling (human trafficking ) is not a cyber crime, it should be that crime uses the Internet in an effort to persuade the prospective clients )

====)))) In conclusion, from my point of view, it is better if you create longer (ideally, 3 sentences)

overall, I love reading your writing. It is interisting. Keep writing and do not give up.
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Writing Feedback / Over-grazing was the most dominant aspect of worldwide land degradation. IELTS chart [6]

Dear writer
Allow me to give little opinion about yours.

... the predominant causes whyof agriculture land becomesing less productive and (...) land degradation in (North America, Europe and Ocean) (you may also use: in three different areas) during the 1990s.

.., over-grazing was the main problem forof land degradation which was supplied ,supplying more than a third (...) reasons at 30%. (It is very surprising to notice that)(you also use: surprisingly,) the over-cultivation at 2% ...

By contrast, other (categories / or others)waswere(or if it is only one category, you may use another category was) the least of effected ...

overall, I love reading your writing. it is enough clear. good luck. keep writing