MPT991
Oct 21, 2016
Scholarship / Proving that it's me who belongs to the future leaders or influencers - Chevening Scholarship [3]
Hi arian, thanks for your comment in my essay
In one of my past job experiences in the women's empowerment project, I faced the problem of motivating and managing the girls and women to write their feelings and start discussions about the critical issues of the day in their society, via social media through essay writing. For the first step, I did network for the under coverage girls and making teams among them to help communicating.
You should state the problems you faced in motivating the girls.
Then, in every team encouraged them to choose a topic for discussion, give their opinions, analyze from various aspects, find the weakness and opportunities and initiate the resolutions, provide recommendation for the improvement, and as a whole, analyze the topic based on their social status:
This sentence is too long, would be easy to understand if you break it into 2 or 3 sentence
I encouraged each team to choose a topic for discussion, share opinions and analyse it from their different perspectives. They also had to find out the weaknesses, opportunities, initiate resolutions and put forward recommendations for improvement.
The plan was that the girls were taking points from the group discussions and by the gotten ideas from the group, they have written their essays.
The ideas they shared during the group discussions helped them in writing their essays.
Hi arian, thanks for your comment in my essay
In one of my past job experiences in the women's empowerment project, I faced the problem of motivating and managing the girls and women to write their feelings and start discussions about the critical issues of the day in their society, via social media through essay writing. For the first step, I did network for the under coverage girls and making teams among them to help communicating.
You should state the problems you faced in motivating the girls.
Then, in every team encouraged them to choose a topic for discussion, give their opinions, analyze from various aspects, find the weakness and opportunities and initiate the resolutions, provide recommendation for the improvement, and as a whole, analyze the topic based on their social status:
This sentence is too long, would be easy to understand if you break it into 2 or 3 sentence
I encouraged each team to choose a topic for discussion, share opinions and analyse it from their different perspectives. They also had to find out the weaknesses, opportunities, initiate resolutions and put forward recommendations for improvement.
The plan was that the girls were taking points from the group discussions and by the gotten ideas from the group, they have written their essays.
The ideas they shared during the group discussions helped them in writing their essays.