Writing Feedback / Caring for people and spreading happiness [4]

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My topic is on caring for people.

From my experiences, it gave me a mindset of what I can do to use my strengths and weaknesses to spread positivity and that this is what I want to pursue in my future. I want to go into the medical field and help assist, comfort, and treat patients like the janitor in my school. I want to be able to walk into a clinic, hospital, or a pharmacy and bring happiness into them. Helping them in a way where they can trust me and realize that I am there for them can really spread happiness. Not only learning about my identity and my knowledge by my experiences and trying to be that "hero", I know that having the traits that I have can impact the society little at a time. Just as Mr. Freeman Hrabowski, he is a caring person and his commitment level on fighting for his rights interest me tremendously. My commitment to using my strengths and my great traits everyday to spread positivity to others will continue in my life. Having the enjoyment of assisting someone in need is a passion I'd love to pursue.