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Writing Feedback / People have a tendency to store knowledge on the internet at the present time [2]
Excellent work in making it very clear to the examiner that you are stating your personal opinion throughout the essay. By using the correct pronouns, you will certainly increase your scores across all considerations, specially in the C+C and GRA sections. However, you should not have discussed the disadvantage in the essay. The idea is to prove that your opinion (advantage) is the correct one. So the discussion format should have been:
Sentence 1: Perceived disadvantage
Sentence 2: Reason it is seen as a disadvantage
Sentence 3: Why it is an advantage
Sentence 4: Give a supporting example
Sentence 5: (optional) Additional connected supporting explanation
You cannot prove that your idea should be listened to and believed by the examiner when you are trying to prove and disprove both sides. The job of the writer is to ensure that he always disproves the side opposing his own opinion. High scores are sure to follow if the writer can accomplish that.
Excellent work in making it very clear to the examiner that you are stating your personal opinion throughout the essay. By using the correct pronouns, you will certainly increase your scores across all considerations, specially in the C+C and GRA sections. However, you should not have discussed the disadvantage in the essay. The idea is to prove that your opinion (advantage) is the correct one. So the discussion format should have been:
Sentence 1: Perceived disadvantage
Sentence 2: Reason it is seen as a disadvantage
Sentence 3: Why it is an advantage
Sentence 4: Give a supporting example
Sentence 5: (optional) Additional connected supporting explanation
You cannot prove that your idea should be listened to and believed by the examiner when you are trying to prove and disprove both sides. The job of the writer is to ensure that he always disproves the side opposing his own opinion. High scores are sure to follow if the writer can accomplish that.