Undergraduate / Autobiography for Feng Chia University (Technology Pre-Major Program) [2]

When you introduce your family, try to say a few things about both your parents. What did your mother do for a living? Did she influence you in any way? It is important to represent the influence of both your parents in the autobiography because you are representative of the sum of both your parents.

I am unclear about the connection between your exposure to the work of your father as a ship mechanic and your interest in digital engines software. I believe that should be made a separate paragraph ang given more of a developmental explanation for your reader to better understand what you mean.

When you speak of your studies and how you were a relaxed student, you should discuss how this attitude led to the challenges that you faced as a student at that time. What responsibility did you come to understand that you carry and why?

Why did you have to develop a solution for your school community? State the problem that you needed to resolve of accidentally solved through your project.

The essay draft is good, but has room for improvement. My observations above should help you develop a far more informative and interesting essay for your personal biography statement. I look forward to reading the improvements you will be making on this piece.

Writing Feedback / Essay for ENG102 - The Present Dangers of AI: Causing More Harm Than Good [3]

One of the problems that I see with this paper is that you used AI to write or research some aspects of the presentation, leading the app to hallucinate about certain information. There is no such thing as ChatGPT 5 since this was reverted to version 4 after some problems with the system appeared on social media and public forums. You need to be careful and always double check the sources of information that is generated because these oftentimes appear to not be based on real or current information. Once information like that slips through your review, your teacher will realize that the paper was AI generated to a certain extent, and will cause a lower grade for your submission than you expected as a grade.

Undergraduate / Computing passion - personal statement opinions [2]

The personal statement you have written carries human elements, but not enough human writing to pass the AI assessment of the GKS scholarship committee. The personal statement still carries the hallmark markings of being AI polished. The reviewer would have preferred to read your actual writing in terms of thoughts and presentation. He does not need perfectly polished essays or academic sounding paragraphs that lose the humanity and character of the applicant in the process. I understand that you used AI to polish this draft, but AI does not always work to the benefit of the statement being written. In this case, the reviewer may decide not to consider your application once he is informed that the first paragraph of this essay was heavily AI influenced. Why don't you try to write the essay using your own writing skills? You will not lose anything by allowing your actual writing skills, character, and thoughts to be reflected in your personal statement. That is what this paper is all about, a written interview that shows the reviewer your personality, character strengths and weaknesses, without the aid of writing app tools.

Research Papers / When Growth Outpaces Planning: The Strain of Rapid Urbanization in U.S. Cities [2]

Unfortunately this paper is being detected as 100% AI generated. All you did was feed the writing instructions into the generator and asked it to produce the paper for you. This is why the paper contains reference hallucinations and improper referencing for data. While the paper meets the word requirement you were given, the content of the paper is not going to get you a passing grade in this class. Even though it looks academic in presentation and writing, the lack of proper information throughout the essay is what proves that the paper is not written by the student. Perhaps you should try to read the material that AI generated and then write the paper yourself, actually doing research for data references and using the correct in-text citation format to create a proper student written paper.

Research Papers / The Behind the Scene Job of Supply Chain in Healthcare - research paper [2]

This paper has the feel of a heavily AI generated paper. It has at least 75% AI generated text, while incorporating your human experience into the paper. This imperfect mix of writing styles created a choppy presentation and discussion style which resulted in an easily detectable AI generation of specific paragraphs. At this point, I cannot be sure if you inserted the imperfectly written sections or if you asked the AI to insert the information, but since AI does not have human comprehension and editing skills, it ended up generating a very badly written insertion instead. The paper is well written in most parts, which is good for your presentation. However, there is something missing in the way everything is delivered. It feels too mechanical for a paper that incorporates your first hand experience. I would suggest that you try to revise the essay to truly feel like you had taken an interest in writing the paper. Less AI and more human heart. Try to include more personal touches in the writing to avoid making it feel so automated in presentation and discussion format.

Scholarship / Applying master degree of AI. Supporting Statement for Australian Award Scholarship [4]

Yes. You need to mention it again in this section but in a different context from the previous response that you gave. This time, make it specific to the coordination and cooperation that will be needed between the international and local agencies. You do not need to over discuss it. Make it serve as a reminded that you previously mentioned this agency already but now you will explain how it works in the framework of what you want to do. That way the reviewer does not need to wonder about how the agency functions. He will have forgotten that you previously mentioned the agency so the reminded will come in hand. It may prompt him to revisit your previous response to see how the actions you plan to take might corelate.

Graduate / Personal Statement for the MBA in Marketing at Inha University [2]

The way that you prompted the AI to use your personal experience in writing the personal statement for you worked to a certain extent. The problem is that when you translate this essay to Hangul, things can get lost in translation. You may want to reconsider that and just submit this essay in English. It will allow you to further work on this paper to remove the AI elements of the presentation such as the repetitive structures and information presentation and clean up the transitions. I will admit that this presentation is strong, but the AI polish removed the human element of your writing. That is going to be a problem with the reviewer in this case.

The essay lacks the personal element such as a struggle that you encountered at work which would highlight your need for masters studies. The reviewer will also be looking for a relationship between your industry in Vietnam and Korea, which is something you would have naturally written into the essay, but AI would not include even a generic version of without proper prompting. I suggest that you try to improve these 2 aspects in this essay to help it gain a human tone and human interest presentation. Again, the essay is good, it just sounds too AI polished at the moment.

Writing Feedback / Challenges & Learnings from Running a Small Museum in Virginia [2]

I had a sense that this essay was AI generated, I ran it through a few tests and was proven to be right. This presentation is at least 59% AI generated and polished. The way that the human voice becomes an emoty shell in some aspects of the presentation, the cold way that the development of the museum idea was presented, among other things, clearly present an AI influence of the highest degree. That is always the problem with AI assisted writing. Unless the human bothers to revise the polished paragraphs, the writing becomes uneven and monotone, without the human interest aspect that would often be shared by the writer to help explain himself. So I suggest that you revise the total essay. Write from your heart. The areas that have the human hand in writing show you have the potential to create an interesting presentation, trust in your skills and writing talent. Don't let AI mess up what should otherwise be an acceptable personal interest essay.

Research Papers / Paid Parental leave for families [3]

Unfortunately this paper is not going to pass an AI generation test, which your teacher will probably use even before reading your actual paper. That is because, using the tools at my disposal, this opinion paper / research paper already came back at a high 85% Ai generated rate for the overall presentation. The format is very AI generated since it uses repetitive information and evidence, which leads to the lack of authority in the presentation, even though the AI uses words that try to help the paper sound academic and well researched. You need to take an actual interest in the writing of this paper. That means, while you can use the sources that the AI used for the essay, you need to actually rewrite the paper using your understanding and additional personal research for the document. That is the only way to ensure the human point of view presentation in this paper. Right now, it rates too highly as an Ai generated and uncorrected paper.

Scholarship / Applying master degree of AI. Supporting Statement for Australian Award Scholarship [4]


Why will you reach out the them? Remember that the reviewer does not have any idea about these organizations and their functions in your country. You need to give a quick reference to help them understand why the participation of this department will be critical to the success of your program and how you plan to coordinate with them for a successful undertaking.


You do not need to reference information sources in this response. While the reviewer will appreciate the presentation of data, he is not interested in the source of your information as this is a personal written interview instead of an academic paper.


This sounds like you will be applying for grants to help fund a specific program. You need to indicate if that will be your main intention for this particular situation so that the reviewer will have a better idea of post study implementation ideas on your part.

Letters / Motivation Letter for Radboud University (Master of Strategic Human Resources Leadership) [2]


This portion is not substantiated in the presentation. You are coming to a conclusion and dictating a belief upon the application reviewer. You should refrain from trying to influence his point of view regarding your skills and talents. Allow your narration to speak for itself. Let him come to his own conclusions about your strengths and motivations as an applicant.



Why did you cut and paste information from the website of the school? Or did you allow to write this paragraph? Eitherway, it does not feel natural and does not follow the previously established discussion method that you presented. You need to rephrase these oaragraphs to show your appreciation for the program and your excitement at attending the program. What was the true factor about the university that motivated you to apply for admission there?

Undergraduate / Parents and Teachers Association - solving a challenge and to implementing change or reform [2]

This essay shows that you are an effective planner, but not necessarily an effective leader. The event was more disorganized than chaotic. I do not see this narration as showing your leadership skills in as much as it highlights your organizer skills. Which of the two are you trying to make the central point of this presentation?

A major weakness of this essay is the lack of proper teamwork, leadership, and problem solving on your part. While you did seem to solve a challenge, you did not report on the problems that happened on the day itself which you had to solve, which would have shown teamwork and leadership skills on your part as you made the effort to implement change with regards to the PTA meeting. There needs to be a mention if you were also able to institutionalize the change so that it would be seen as a real reform by the reviewers of the scholarship program. Addressing the issues I have presented will help strengthen your response paper.

Research Papers / The Trophy Problem - essay reviews [2]


This section could use a bit more personal information development to help justify your point of view. I would suggest that you explain how it propelled your growth and why you appreciate losing as a learning experience for yourself. What did you learn from it that you would not have learned had you been part of the participation trophy generation?


This section seems a bit under developed. You have constantly said that the practice of participation trophies has been detrimental to the development of the child, without offering justified evidence to support this claim. Even when relating to your personal experience, you do not include any indicators to support the learning that came with your defeat.

I suggest that you review this essay for content presentation. Being an AI-Human hybrid paper, it is important that you add more human participation in the writing. Don't rely on the empty discussions of AI in relation to source content. Add the acceptable justifications to create a more human point of view. The paper is acceptable as a 50/50 hybrid presentation because it carries the element of human imperfection in the grammar and presentation. It is up to you to humanized the AI aspects of the discussion. Where there are uncertain elements presented, unqualified quotations in the paper, and a lack of proper exemplifications, you must improve the section. That is how your professor will catch on to the AI participation in the written paper.

Essays / Advice for yonsei uic personal statement - what to write? [2]

The fact that you were raised in a traveling family indicates that you have first hand experience when it comes to diversity and an understanding of how this helps to shape the personality of a person. It is this immersion and experience that would help you respond to how your personal background will help you add character and diversity to UIC. You could discuss how you learned to accept diversity as a part of life, how it helped widen your point of view about society and how differences among people could also mean that they are the same people, just in different personas. It would be interesting for the reviewer to learn about how your upbringing was influenced by the diversity you were exposed to. Which aspects of your upbringing do you believe make you stand out as a person because of the diversity aspect. Pick up to 3 character traits, or however many the maximum word count will allow you to discuss, and then discuss how it can help add to the interesting and diverse student community of UIC.

Research Papers / Peer review: Regulating Online Truth [2]

While I commend you for trying to write an AI-Human hybrid paper, the problem with the presentation is that you used AI to write the most important aspects of this paper, The academic discussion is at least 75% AI generated content. The human aspect of the writing is clearly identified in the presentation, which were the strongest parts of writing in this paper. However, the minute you used AI in the academic sections, the tone of the paper changes, going from a human voice to an automated discussion that could have been retained if you had chosen to paraphrase the information you were provided instead of going cut and paste in the presentation. Nobody is saying you cannot use AI to help with your writing. What students are often reminded of is that you need to read what the AI writes, understand it, and put it into your own words as a part of your research, writing, and learning process. The paper still have to be totally written by the student. Not a single percentage should be retained from the AI generated text.

Writing Feedback / Unconscious Bias in the Maternal Health Care - Undergraduate Essay [2]

I think that the first thing you should do is fix the format of the paper. It is not in an academically formatted style and would be difficult for the professor to read. It needs to be properly spaced and paragraphed for that purpose. You make good use of narrative devices in this essay. The way that you used comparative examples engages the reader and helps make the discussion even more understandable. Your use of specific examples highlights the human aspect of the writing in this essay. There is no question that AI was not used to write this paper and the professor will appreciate that and give it ample consideration when he decides what grade to give this paper. The way that you use personal insight in relevant aspects of the discussion further strengthened the information and point of view being delivered in this letter. I would not suggest changing too much in this paper. It works because of the obvious effort you placed into writing it.

Writing Feedback / Limiting Cruise Ship Tourism to Protect Coastal Communities [2]

The content of this essay is not human written. It is coming across as 95 % AI generated. It is too perfect to have been written by a human being and it follows the classic hallmarks of an AI generated research paper. It would have helped if you had only used this paper as a reference point for your actual writing. A model paper if you will. The lack of properly cited information sources within the page also indicates that the content was prompted by the student using general information, forgetting to ask for cited sources within the page. The evidence presented has become too generic and will not be accepted as an academic reference by your teacher. Rework the essay. Put the element of human writing into it so that it will work more properly as an academic, human written paper.

Scholarship / Skills Study Programme / Local Plays - My Essay Answer [2]

Your response is very much generalized and lacking in specific indications that you have familiarized yourself with the requirements of the university and course that you will be studying. There needs to be a clear reference to the course syllabus that you will be studying at the university, with specific mentions of how these will help you improve your skills as a professional. Your response is lengthy, but not appropriate as a response to the question. Try to revise the answer to build more on the alignment of the course with your interests and professional aspirations. The reviewer needs to be sure that you have given thoughtful consideration to the course, school, and how these relate to your personal and academic interests. These discussion points are not really coming across clearly in this response.

Writing Feedback / ENG 102- Teaching Religion in Public Schools: Is it rude to speak of Religion and Politics? [2]

This is a well written essay that focuses properly on the discussion of religion in relation to upbringing, morality, and mental health. What it is lacking, is a pointed discussion regarding politics and how it relates to the religious discussion. Where does it intersect? The title indicates that the discussion would focus on the religion and politics relationship in public schools, but that is sorely lacking in development and presentation throughout. You have 2 options as far as I can tell. You can either change the title of the paper to a more related one or, you can edit the content to properly introduce the intersection discussion and its importance in modern day politics. It is all up to you. Regardless though, this essay is thought provocative and indicative of your deep relationship with the topic of religious discussion in a social or academic setting. It will work even better once you tweak the content.

Writing Feedback / Mental health awareness in schools [2]

The format of the paper is very AI generated. You kept the bullet points intact, which is a dead give away that the sections were AI generated. A quick check indicated that the paper is 70% AI generated, with 30 percent indicating that you tried to make it seem like you actually wrote some sections. Unfortunately, that is not how AI works. You need to actually take this information and rewrite it in your own words and writing style. Your insight and writing instincts need to be felt and read in the page. While I will not stop you from using AI to help with your research, I will remind you that AI detection tools are now being used by teachers and professors to discourage cut and paste submissions from students. When AI gives you a summarized source material, that is your cue to double check the sources for validity and rewrite the whole paper to remove any traces of AI coding in the page. AI is a writing assistant and tool, it should be used as the main writer for any academic paper.

Research Papers / Lesson 11 Draft & Peer Review: Behind the Smile: The Reality of Teen Mental Health [3]

There is a problem with the way that you used AI to find reference materials and insert it into the parts of the paper that you have already written. You did not double check the references it provided to you for accuracy and actual existence. I caught some AI hallucinations in this paper when I double checked the source. I understand that you are not very confident with your writing and research skills but believe me, you would have done a much better job accomplishing those tasks yourself, since you would know the information to be accurate and verified, instead of hoping that AI will not lead you astray. That is similar to Maps asking you to drive into a lake and you actually doing so.

Research Papers / The Case for Tuition-Free Public Universities in the United States [3]

Now that you have had an AI do the summary of the research paper for you, it is time for you to start writing this paper yourself. Since this will come back as almost 100% AI written, I strongly oppose the idea of having you submit this essay in its current form to your professor. He is going to give you a failing mark for this paper for sure. There is very little chance he will give you a chance to rewrite this paper.

The AI written paper is just too repetitive in content. It creates redundancies in every paragraph that I have read. A human written paper would have discussed a different topic in each paragraph to move the discussion forward using new information and scenarios that would help build his research opinion. Try to use specific and current data in your reference material rather than allowing the AI generic references to evidence. It makes the paper sound good, but upon further scrutiny, comes back as an empty piece of writing.

Writing Feedback / Lesson 11: Drafting and Peer Review Why is the world so interested in serial killers? [2]

This paper was taken directly from an Ai generated presentation and contains AI hallucinations throughout that indicate the student did not even bother to read through the presentation before asking for a peer review of this "draft". You need to learn how to write a research paper that uses human brainstorming, research, drafting, and editing skills before you ask for a peer review.

The essay will not pass AI detection software because it uses an even older AI model for its presentation. You are not playing around here. Your grades are at stake. Your ability to perform your job properly in the future relies on your actual knowledge learned, not just AI generated content that you will pass off as your own work. That is even worse than hiring someone to write the paper for you. At least that would have had a human element to this writing, which this presentation sorely lacks. It is not even informative accurate in most instances and contains irrelevant information in certain paragraphs.

Scholarship / Construction Project Management - A development impact statement for commonwealth distance learning [2]

The presentation is too vague in response. You need to state the problem you hope to address at a specific level, then include a simplified solution that will be found your proposed study. Right now, the information provided is too generalized and lacks an actual focus on a specific problem for solving. You need to highlight the problem and proposed solution that you will be researching about.

Later on, you refer to how your training will contribute. That is a discussion deviation that is not relevant to the given prompt. You can instead, discuss, in further detail, how your proposed study aligns with say the development goals on an international, national, and local basis. That way the relevance of your proposed study will have direct relationships with important considerations factors indicated. the

Scholarship / The MBA program in Australia - AAS- use the knowledge, skills and connections [2]

There seem to be some gaps in your English thought process that affects the way that you present your intentions in the essay. You need to edit the content of the first paragraph for clarity. I believe that you have a misplaced period in the presentation. That should have been a comma instead for idea clarity purposes.

While the reviewer will appreciate your noting a major obstacle to your plans, he will also be looking for the limitations that you need to overcome with each intention that you have for using the knowledge and training that you will receive. That is because there will always be difficulties when you begin to share your knowledge with others either in a direct or indirect manner. He needs to know how you plan to overcome those obstacles as well.

Scholarship / Accounting, Business, and Finance - AAS- 3. study and your career [3]

You do not need to present the first paragraph in the presentation. Always remember that in character or word limited response statements, it is always best that you directly respond to the provided questions. You end up wasting word or character count when you write such a lengthy but unnecessary introduction.

Overall, you are presenting a sound business plan that shows you have been preparing for your career for quite some time. The fact that you have such a solid, well thought, and lengthy career plan shows the reviewer that you are a serious contender for this scholarship. They appreciate having applicants who take the time to create proper and responsive statement presentations. Good job !

Research Papers / Teaching the Bible Without Preaching: A Constitutional Approach to Bible Literacy in Public Schools [2]

I cannot continue to review this paper as it is 95% AI written. As such, this paper needs to be at least paraphrased by the writer using his own words. The reason for the paraphrasing is so that the paper will pass the AI detector software that teachers use. Once the flag comes back at 95%, the teacher will either ask you to rework the paper or, automatically give you a failing score for this task. That is why I am asking you to do the simpler thing, which is to revise the paper using your own words. By doing so, you will also allow yourself to learn from the information that the AI was able to collate for your paper. Remember that AI can write the paper, but you won't learn anything when you allow AI to fully complete the paper for you. You need to have a personal hand in the finishing of the paper.

Scholarship / Becoming a Music Director - The Bridge Program Fellowship - CROSSROAD Essay 1 [3]

The connection between the topics and the road towards your final decision is a bit confusing to follow. The subjects do not relate to one another in terms of basis and application, which leaves one wondering how you were able to connect tailoring, math, and music to help lead you towards a final decision. This becomes even more questionable when one considers that your strength appears to be in math and programming. There is no evidence of musicality as being one of your academic or theoretical strengths. Therefore, the previous questions that you tried to respond to in the writing prompt guides were not fully addressed. You need to edit this to create a more connected and justified discussion that better aligns with the prompt requirements.

Scholarship / Manaaki Essay 2026 Part 2 (RELATIONSHIP MANAGEMENT) 2nd version [2]


What was the circumstance by which you were exposed to this? What led to your discovery of this shortcoming? You cannot immediately lay out the problem for solving without first referencing the foundation that allowed the problem to develop.


How and why were your colleagues involved in the problem? What is the background for the group development?


Where? Under what department? Who gave permission for its establishment?


Which Un-SDG? You need to be specific about how you defended your stance, the UN SDG inclusion would make your opinion stronger.


What specific university department was involved and who did you have to negotiate with? What was the contribution of that department to your goal aside from permitting the establishment of the unit?


What was the competition? What was the criteria for winning?

There are so many gaps in the way that you are responding to the questions that it leaves the reader confused and disbelieving of your presentation. Try to fill in the gaps I found and some others that might arise from the gap filling once you edit the paper. I know there is a character requirement so consider that the challenge to your writing abilities. Be concise but KISS it.

Scholarship / Manaaki Essay 2026 Part 3 (Self Drive / Work / Motivation / Research) [2]


This essay is all abut character development and your self determination to succeed in a setting that may have involved family support. This is not about further academic or theoretical considerations. Your response is incorrect seeing as the keywords for the self drive in this case is
Responses provided do not show the interaction that you have with family and friends in relation to your interests. You do not need to constantly keep this academic in nature. This is the portion of the written interview where the reviewer is looking to get to know your character and how you handle interests that may be different from those in your community. Yes, you were told that you should be doing it without prodding from family, friends, and other people, but your activity and actions should relate to that immediate community just the same.

Scholarship / Manaaki Essay 2026 Part 2 (RELATIONSHIP MANAGEMENT) [2]


Try to remain specific since you have identified branches earlier on in your response. What branch did you lead? What was the reason that you were chosen for the position?


It is the relationship that you developed with the NGOs that matter in this response. That is because the reviewer wants to understand your negotiation skills, how you negotiate, and how you manage to resolve differences and conflicts within the sector you participated in.


Seeing as this was an activity that you participated in previously, can you confidently say that the program is still ongoing and having a positive effect on the lives of the women? How has it effectively changed the lives of the women in the area? How are the women that were trained to become trainers doing at present? Show that your actions have a post involvement effect on the women in the community.

Scholarship / Manaaki Essay 2026 Part 1 (Development Relevance) [2]

1. While you skillfully explained the background of the situation that led to your masters course choice. The reasons why you chose this program is limited in scope and explanation. By describing your professional shortcomings as one of the main drivers for the decision, you will successfully portray the skills you hope to develop in relation to the course curriculum.

2. Your response is highly academic. Try to add a personal connection in your response. Depict why you personally believe in the importance of developing this program for your country. It is not enough to cite historical sources, you need to prove that you are invested in solving this problem through your upskilling.

3.
Kindly fix this run on sentence. The way it is structured needs to be less confusing to the reader. Use a comma or a new sentence in the right place. Clarify the goal reference.

Scholarship / To bridge the gap - AAS-statement on solving a challenge [2]


What exposure immersion activity did you participate in that led you to this oberservation? Consider that the reviewer needs a thorough introduction to the problem. Creating the foundation for the exposure would assist the reviewer in further understanding the scenario and the situation you had to handle.


To whom did you present this proposal? What was the process for consideration that led to the suggestion that brought you to the meeting with the vice principal for approval of the project? Be clear about the steps that you had to take in order to solve the problem.


Why would this aspect be of notable consideration to the vice principal? What are the existing sources of revenue for your school?


Can you mention how you continue to track the improvement of the students in terms of class participation and graduation? That is important to show that you problem solving skill had a long term result that went beyond the classroom.

Scholarship / AAS-Statement MBA Melbourne or Monash - Essay for purposed course and institution [2]

You have conflicting interests in the presentation. Either focus on developing your family business or helping SMEs grow in Cambodia. Since your experience is mostly based on the family enterprise, I believe it would be better if you focus on helping to grow the family business as the focus of your MBA. It just makes more sense to the reviewer reading the response.


This is a very important discussion point for your university choice. Rather than presenting it as a single sentence, find the university course and immersion that actually addresses this situation and make that university your primary choice. Discuss the importance of this aspect in the continued growth of the business community and family enterprises in your country.

Undergraduate / An additional essay that highlights my fit and interest in Reed - Reed waitlist essay [2]

I think that this essay would help you better stand out as a student applicant if you expand on the FeverApp discussion. I feel that it was too short and did not highlight your contribution to the project. If this was an award winning project, then discuss it in a sense that would shine a light upon your team and individual contribution to the project. Right now the essay is not interesting to read. It has run of the mill content that not even AI editing can make sound exciting. You need to open up yourself more in the presentation. Display more strengths. I believe that expanding the FeverApp discussion will help you actually do that. If you have even just one stand out paragraph, the reviewer will more than likely remember that when reconsidering your application.

Scholarship / AAS -Master of Human Resource Management - How will the proposed study contribute to your career? [2]

You speak of how the courses you will be taking will help you become a better professional. While that is something that is applaudable, it does not make your response stand out. Would you consider sharing your thoughts about how you look forward to improving your job through your career vision over the next 5 years? Think outside of the box. Go beyond what you will learn in the classroom. Integrate what you will learn with your future career plans and development. It is not just about how the course will help you become a better professional, it is also about how it will help you create the necessary foundation for your future career plans.So the reviewer knows that you are a visionary leader and not just a follower who will not go beyond the lessons taught in class.

Scholarship / Chinese Investment in Cambodia - AAS -Master of Human Resource Management - course and institution? [2]

I would like to commend you for not using AI to write your response statement. This presentation shows the human intelligence and heart in the response. It clearly shows your personal involvement in the work you do and emotionally involves the reader in the shortcomings of the office you belong to and your desire to improve it. That said, there are still some points where you can improve the presentation.

Focus on the salient points of your job description. The reviewer does not need a back grounder on your professional experience. Discuss the immediate requirements as the prompt indicates. Removing the irrelevant lines at the start of the response statement will work towards that purpose. Additionally, you will need those extra character counts to help explain the reason you chose the 2nd school to attend for your masters course. You cannot present just 1 school to the committee. They require at least 2 school choices so that they can match your application with one of the two schools. It is important to show that you have properly researched the relevance of the masters programs available to your professional needs.

Scholarship / I would like my NTU Scholarship Essay to be reviewed. I'm open to suggestions! [4]

This is definitely going to get passed the AI detector writing and be flagged as Human Written. While AI may have been used to polish the content, it counts as less than 20% of the essay and will be considered negligible. The conflict that you chose to discuss in this essay is a good one. Most new leaders do struggle with a "lead from behind" situation and the resolution that you chose is simple but understandable. While the reviewer may want to see a more heightened conflict that you needed to resolve, the way that you presented the conflict is one that shows your strengths as both a student leader and an academic achiever so I would not worry about how the presentation will be received by the review committee. I wish you the best of luck with your application.

Scholarship / AAS-Why did you choose the Master of Business Administration? [2]

Your response is over the character limit but 333 words so you will have to edit the content presentation. Shorten it. Keep your thoughts insightful but concise.


Be clear that you mean this as it applies to your business. You may present an illustrative example to help strengthen your claim.

The 2nd, 4th, and 5th paragraphs are directly cut and pasted from the AI source. The number of paragraphs that were AI generated are what will flag this as a 60% AI generated essay. At such a high number, your application could be disqualified after passing through the AI detector tool. I strongly urge you to humanize the writing in those sections. Keep the honesty and integrity of your writing. Allow your soul to come through as it did in the previous paragraph. Those are the strongest points in this essay. When the human emotion stands out in the writing, the reviewer cannot help but notice and take note of it.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing Task 2 - Some think that young people should be free to choose any career they like [2]

You have to understand that I cannot help you improve your writing skills for as long as you use AI to create your final essay. At 80% flagging for this paper, I can tell you now that you will fail the test once you take it. You need to present your original writing to me so that I can properly guide your improvement. You will not have access to AI assistance during the actual test. You will be scored based on your true writing skills. If you cannot trust yourself to present your original writing for me to assess and help you with, then stop wasting my time. I cannot help you for as long as you rely on AI to improve your writing.