Writing Feedback / Leadership is one of my favorite subject study and my passion to influence people - Chevening essay [3]

Hello everyone im applying chevening scholarship and i would like to get some advice and feed back about my essay about leaderahip and influence.

Thank you for all your time to help me and correct my essay.

Chevening is looking for individuals that will be future leaders or influencers ...

Leadership is one of my favorite subject study and my passion to influence people, challenge me to apply the chevening scholarship. My vision in life to be a great leader in future is a reason to fight in a competition.

Some people think that leadership is a power or ability to lead other people, Koontz and O'Donnell have defined leadership as influencing people to follow the achievement of a common goal. It is the ability to exert interpersonal influence by means of communication towards the achievement of a goal. In my personal statement, leader is an individual to effect the thought, works, and behavior to other people and a decisions maker. Leadership is influencing and motivating other people or group to achieve the goals. There can be no leadership without influence, because influencing is how leaders lead.

My working experience as digital banking manager in bank excercise me to be comunicate to customers also to influence and motivate team for achieve some goals. In advancement of digital technology and banking competition demand banks to always be the best to serve customer and get business profit properly. Sharing ideas from me and from team is very important to perfect the strategies, divide the jobs and maintain the work produces the best result.

In challenges of working for together achievement is not always suitable as we planned, sometimes problems come to push and force us to quit. My role to always be stable in every condition, motivate other and influencing by thoughts and by works. In my opinion a leaders should be a role model to influence other people.

Despite my work in banking industry, never change my passion about public affairs and society. Instead, my work in team excercise me to lead and be influence, From my work i explore my knowledge about banking, economic, services and technology. Moreover my relationship with customers every day, broaden my knowledge not only about people's character but also knowledge in bussines, lifestyles, society and education

I have passion for further study and visions to back in my country or my province to influence people by my knowledge, my work and my ability.