Posts by Niks30

Niks30

Nov 2, 2016

Writing Feedback / Exploring every part of a house in search of a slots through which the air is leaking [3]

Hi Mardian,
Overall, your writing is good but here is some suggestions for you.

1)"... about the process of how air..."

2) Remember that air is a singular, so the verb after it should be +s/es.
"....that air flows into a house... "
"....air comes from many places.."
and so on

3) Take a look the time connector that you use since time transition is a substantial thing to be noticed in writing a process diagram.

4) I see that the sentence you use in your writing is a simple sentence. In order to get a higher score, it's better to use the complex one.

Keep doing your best!
Thanks.

Niks30

Nov 1, 2016

Writing Feedback / A breakdown of telephone call duration in UK during 1995 to 2002 [4]

Writing Task 1 - UK Telephone, by category, 1995-2002

A breakdown of telephone call duration in UK during the time 1995 to 2002, measured in billions of minutes, is illustrated in the bar chart categorized based on the call types. Overall, it can be seen that local call stands in the highest level of using throughout the time frame while the telephone calls using mobiles is the lowest one.

To begin, the telephone calls using locals shown a gradual improvement in 1995 to 1998. Stood at roughly 70, the level of locals use rose moderately to around 90. The same condition occurred in the other type, national and international call, which reached 50 billion minutes in 1998. This pattern was followed by the number of mobiles use, the fewest using among the types.

In the four last years, a moderate decline experienced the former which reached to approximately 70, the same level in the beginning of the time. In contrast to this, the other two types of calls saw a significant increase to the rest of the time. However, during the time frame, the greatest level still remained in the local use while the converse appeared to be true in mobiles use.