yeasir
Nov 8, 2016
Undergraduate / A personal statement (within 300 words) explaining why you are interested in attending a UWC school [4]
@Holt
I've re-framed the essay and it is given bellow for the further criticism.
Naturally, I am a curious girl. I want to know how the world is really look like. I heard about UWC first time in 9th Grade from my father. I wish to experience things from various perspective to implement those in my life rather than preparing myself for examinations. UWC allows me to be a global citizen where I shall have the opportunity to mingle with different people from the globe and know about various cultures. I want to see the wide-world, experience new thing and grab the opportunity to acquire knowledge outside my comfort zone. This would be a rare scope for a Bangladeshi citizen like me to be a part of such a versatile community where I would be able to represent my motherland. UWC will educate me to be more aware of other cultures and beliefs and will help me to increase my acceptance.
If I get admission to UWC, I shall share my values, cultures and ideas with others and exchange thoughts. In the global village with complex challenges of ideas and beliefs, I think togetherness and understanding will give the better solutions. We can make a bright change together by embracing different communities. The words of Mahatma Gandhi "Be the change you want to see in the world", inspires me to step ahead and prepare myself for betterment. I can contribute in making my country and the world a better place.
I hope for wonderful experiences with people from all over the world and learn something which is going to stay forever. Exploring knowledge will be my greatest achievement. I hope to explore ambitions and expectations. I shall expose myself to a variety of cultures. I shall stand in the crowd as an individual and introduce my background.
@Holt
I've re-framed the essay and it is given bellow for the further criticism.
Naturally, I am a curious girl. I want to know how the world is really look like. I heard about UWC first time in 9th Grade from my father. I wish to experience things from various perspective to implement those in my life rather than preparing myself for examinations. UWC allows me to be a global citizen where I shall have the opportunity to mingle with different people from the globe and know about various cultures. I want to see the wide-world, experience new thing and grab the opportunity to acquire knowledge outside my comfort zone. This would be a rare scope for a Bangladeshi citizen like me to be a part of such a versatile community where I would be able to represent my motherland. UWC will educate me to be more aware of other cultures and beliefs and will help me to increase my acceptance.
If I get admission to UWC, I shall share my values, cultures and ideas with others and exchange thoughts. In the global village with complex challenges of ideas and beliefs, I think togetherness and understanding will give the better solutions. We can make a bright change together by embracing different communities. The words of Mahatma Gandhi "Be the change you want to see in the world", inspires me to step ahead and prepare myself for betterment. I can contribute in making my country and the world a better place.
I hope for wonderful experiences with people from all over the world and learn something which is going to stay forever. Exploring knowledge will be my greatest achievement. I hope to explore ambitions and expectations. I shall expose myself to a variety of cultures. I shall stand in the crowd as an individual and introduce my background.