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|SPORT CHAMPIONS ARE COMMERCIALIZED THESE DAYS
2 - docs.google.com/document/d/1hEzXc1UJGYGDvJE3MhW4_gueQAslmS-H-KLiJwhQLH4/edit?usp=sharing Some correction...
Writing Feedbackstudyingabroad - 14 hrs ago / lhmils - 1 hr ago
|What are the benefits of pursuing university education?
2 - "After finishing high school, there are many ways for students to choose, for example: vocational education, university education, to...
Writing FeedbackHuyen1 - 11 hrs ago / scarletnguyen - 2 hrs ago
|The bar chart below shows the percentage participation of men in senior development
NEW - senior development position in IBM, microsoft and apple The bar diagram demonstrates the proportion of men that participated...
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|Task 2 ielts - Many countries nowaday have population with more young people than old people
6 - I think you should consider carefully about template of each type of ielts essay, task response and avoiding translating...
Writing FeedbackYolo120308 - 2 days ago / studyingabroad - 15 hrs ago
|Where are we heading in the imbalance ecology? Writing sample for postgraduate admittance-review
3 - You have to review your presentation for timeline differences. You are inconsistent in your presentation. As all of these...
Writing Feedbackmeatkiller - 1 day ago / Holt - 18 hrs ago
|Task 2 ielts - Different views about what top priorities of our government should be
3 - There is a problem with your paraphrase. The original prompt indicates that other people have the opinion that other...
Writing Feedbackliedsieg - 1 day ago / Holt - 18 hrs ago
|IELTS 2 - Career (Both views) - youngsters should be more realistic and think more about the future
4 - Again with this "hotly debated topic". There is no debate presented in any Task 2 presentation. These are mere...
Writing Feedbacktwhin - 2 days ago / Holt - 18 hrs ago
|The qualities a person needs to become successful in today's world cannot be learned at a University
2 - You have to remember that the examiner will not accept exaggerations in your presentations. There are no debates indicated...
Writing Feedbacktwhin - 2 days ago / Holt - 18 hrs ago
|writing task 2 - Should students work during high school years?
3 - Your presentation has several problems in the first paragraph. The first problem, is that you have improperly formatted your...
Writing Feedbackhailinh_nguyen - 2 days ago / Holt - 19 hrs ago
|IELTS Task 2: Environment - Problems and Solutions
4 - Your presentation is uneven and incomplete. You are being asked for 2 ways that we damage the environment and...
Writing Feedbackalexngn - 2 days ago / Holt - 19 hrs ago
|Number of Iranian, Greek and Turkish students who enrolled at Sheffield University
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - 2 days ago / LadyOfClockwork - 1 day ago
|Solutions to address traffic and environmental issues
2 - Do not leave your opening paraphrase hanging. You already said that you disagree with the point of view, so...
Writing FeedbackTuanHarry - 2 days ago / Holt - 1 day ago
|IELTS 2: Learning everything by remembering related facts to achieve a success in studying
Writing Feedbackjasonpham - Sep 26, 2020 / jasonpham - 1 day ago
|IELTS TASK 1 - The diagram illustrate immigration into the United States from 1850 to 1930
Writing Feedbackliliaeat - Sep 26, 2020 / liliaeat - 2 days ago
|Internet technology means we don't need to travel to foreign countries to understand how others live
2 - There is an error in your task accuracy rendition within the prompt restatement. The question is: To what extent...
Writing Feedbackquadau123 - Sep 28, 2020 / Holt - 2 days ago
|From the given line graph: how much chicken, beef, lamb and fish were consumed, by grams per person
5 - I rewrited two paraphrases for practice. In 1979, the average weekly consumption of beef per person was 200...
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Sep 19, 2020 / LadyOfClockwork - Sep 28, 2020
|Sports centres and social health - IELTS task 2
3 - Thank you so much. I recognize myself still have many mistakes about grammar, collocation, idea. Can you show...
Writing FeedbackPeterpen - Sep 27, 2020 / Peterpen - Sep 28, 2020
|Nowadays students have more opportunities to study abroad - whats your view on this?
Writing Feedbackhang32 - Sep 27, 2020 / hang32 - Sep 28, 2020
|Early technological developments helped people and changed their lives more than recent development
2 - I cannot say that this essay will get a passing score. You see, the minimum word requirement for the...
Writing Feedbackheyiin - Sep 27, 2020 / Holt - Sep 27, 2020
|IELTS TASK 2 The obligation to respect older people is a norm that needs to be maintained and taught
2 - You need to provide a direct representation of the original prompt in the paraphrase section. It would also help...
Writing Feedbackdarwin25 - Sep 26, 2020 / Holt - Sep 27, 2020
|The weekly expenditure of fast food on 3 categories in the UK in the period from 1970 to 1990
Writing FeedbackTrinhdieuhong - Sep 26, 2020 / todoroki - Sep 26, 2020
|Studying at university or get a job straight after school? Discuss both views
2 - With 266 words written, one would say that you should have written a pretty good essay. The problem, is...
Writing Feedbackthu741999 - Sep 26, 2020 / Holt - Sep 26, 2020
|Various reasons why people travel - Writing task 1
2 - Your first paragraph, the summary overview, is a marathon to read. There was not a single punctuation mark used...
Writing Feedbackphamngocnhan - Sep 26, 2020 / Holt - Sep 26, 2020
|Some people think the money spent on developing technology for space exploration is not justified
3 - Thank you!!!...
Writing Feedbackparadis_149 - Sep 22, 2020 / paradis_149 - Sep 26, 2020
|IELTS Writing Task 2: family members have less communications with each other compared to the past
2 - The question is asking you a question that deals with the present time. Therefore, it is improper for you...
Writing Feedbackf_mohamadi - Sep 25, 2020 / Holt - Sep 25, 2020
|Ordinary people unlike huge organizations, are said to have no impacts on environmental improvements
2 - You are discussing your non support of the statement in direct opposition to the discussion instruction provided. You have...
Writing Feedbackchanbinh - Sep 25, 2020 / Holt - Sep 25, 2020
|IELTS Writing Task 2- not enough students study science subjects at university (Reasons/impacts)
Writing Feedbackyumiwan - Sep 25, 2020 / Holt - Sep 25, 2020
|Meaningfulness life due to job satisfaction in long working hours at the workplace
2 - Your original prompt is incomplete. it does not provide the reason why people would think that life is meaningless...
Writing Feedbackyennhi_20 - Sep 25, 2020 / Holt - Sep 25, 2020
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: CONSTRUCTING HIGH-RISE BUILDINGS OR EXPANDING LAND SIZE TO CREATE HOUSES
2 - Your essay is confusing to read from beginning to end. You never really defend your belief that building houses...
Writing Feedbackhanvuong96 - Sep 24, 2020 / Holt - Sep 25, 2020
|IELTS Writing task 2 about the purpose of University
3 - You are being asked to offer an opinion based on 2 reasoning considerations. There is no debate / argument...
Writing Feedbackchouhonganh - Sep 24, 2020 / Holt - Sep 25, 2020
|What are some negative effects of spending too much time on facebook
Writing FeedbackTranTran - Sep 24, 2020 / Linhnguyen_317 - Sep 24, 2020
|VARIATIONS IN THE USAGE OF TRANSPORTS - IELTS writing task 1
2 - You are assuming that the reader can see the table in front of them. You have to always remember...
Writing FeedbackEabc - Sep 24, 2020 / Holt - Sep 24, 2020
|IELTS Writing Task 1 - The line graph of Iranian, Greek and Turkish students at Sheffield University
Writing Feedbackvyvan - Sep 22, 2020 / vyvan - Sep 24, 2020
|IELTS Task 2 - Opinion Essay - Language extinction
4 - There existed a grammatical error in here : Some people do not consider this as a significant loss .......
Writing Feedbackveenajayant - Sep 15, 2020 / ngthuha - Sep 24, 2020
|IELTS Writing Task 1 - Line graph: the figures for passenger railway journeys in the UK
4 - @Holt I do appreciate your feedback on my report writing. I will make note on your suggestion of the...
Writing Feedbackngthuha - Sep 23, 2020 / ngthuha - Sep 24, 2020
|Essays from Ielts Writing Task 2
2 - - The example mentioned in the second paragraph is quite confused...the doctors wear the same clothes which they use...
Writing Feedbackthaonguyenhihi - Sep 23, 2020 / ngthuha - Sep 24, 2020
|"Avenger series" - IELTS Writing Essay: Foreign Films > Local Films
3 - @Holt Thank you very much for you assessment. By the way, wouldn't you mind grading me the band of...
Writing FeedbackChrishuynh - Sep 23, 2020 / Chrishuynh - Sep 24, 2020
|IELTS Writing Task 1 - Line graph: Radio and TV audiences in UK October - December 1992
4 - @ ngthuta You have many mistakes related to tenses. "more people prefers" - it should be 'prefer' or 'preferred'...
Writing Feedbackngthuha - Sep 19, 2020 / Eabc - Sep 23, 2020
|The fundamental capabilities of new workers such as interpersonal skills are often below standards
2 - It is incorrect to use the term "required standards" in your paraphrase of the phrase "lack basic interpersonal skills"....
Writing Feedbacktonie_anh - Sep 23, 2020 / Holt - Sep 23, 2020
|Work performance factors - Bar graph - IELTS writing task 1
2 - Your summary overview is still too similar to the original presentation. It feels like you just moved words around...
Writing FeedbackEabc - Sep 23, 2020 / Holt - Sep 23, 2020
|The proportion of male and female students studying six art-related subjects at a UK university
Writing Feedbackan12102000 - Sep 22, 2020 / an12102000 - Sep 23, 2020
|Unsupervised social media usage by youngsters is dangerous. Discuss problem & suggest solutions.
5 - @Holt Please check if I have written it correctly this time. In present times, the development of social...
Writing FeedbackEabc - Sep 22, 2020 / Eabc - Sep 23, 2020
|Drinks containing sugars have gained increasing popularity among young people
Writing FeedbackKIM THU - Sep 22, 2020 / Holt - Sep 23, 2020
|The value of one's country exports - IELTS - CAM 14
3 - You have not accurately recognized the images provided. You only mis-identify one of the two images. The two images...
Writing Feedbacknamdang98 - Sep 22, 2020 / Holt - Sep 23, 2020
|Discussion - Environmental problems should be dealt at global or national level - for IELTS
Writing FeedbackEabc - Sep 17, 2020 / Eabc - Sep 23, 2020
|Writing task 2: Secondary education should be offered?
2 - Unemployment is upturns and ... - I was a bit confused on this topic sentence and what direction you...
Writing FeedbackDiepVu99 - Sep 16, 2020 / thaonhi97 - Sep 22, 2020
|Should young people have the obligation to volunteer for community service when they are available?
4 - However, I disagree that we should ... - I was a bit confused on where the response was heading...
Writing Feedbackliedsieg - Sep 20, 2020 / thaonhi97 - Sep 22, 2020
|Keeping 21st century wild animals safe and sound
3 - You have written a 344 word essay. The time allotment for this essay task is 40 minutes. Normally, this...
Writing FeedbackAiden Rose - Sep 21, 2020 / Holt - Sep 22, 2020
|Three different crimes and the number of cases committed between 1970 and 2005
4 - In your numerical presentation, you should use the actual figures from the image because you are scored on information...
Writing Feedbacknancyliao - Sep 21, 2020 / Holt - Sep 22, 2020
|WRITING TASK 2: ADVANTAGES AND DISADVANTAGES OF TAKING A GAP YEAR
2 - It is important for you to present a balanced discussion for the advantage and disadvantage discussion paragraphs. You would...
Writing Feedbacktuanhntta2020 - Sep 19, 2020 / Holt - Sep 20, 2020
|Task1: How much carbon dioxide an average person in four countries emitted into the environment
3 - Your summary overview is a run on and neglects to indicate important summary information such as: - What the...
Writing FeedbackTantan7012 - Sep 19, 2020 / Holt - Sep 20, 2020
|These days, the percentage of older people in the population structure has been increasing rapidly
3 - I believe that you should put your opinion in the introduction, right after paraphasing the topic. The conclusion is...
Writing Feedbackthaolinh - Sep 16, 2020 / tuanhntta2020 - Sep 19, 2020
|WRITING TASK 1: how bottled and canned gas drink are produced
3 - This is my first time trying to write a diagram description essay so I find it quite hard. Anyway,...
Writing Feedbacktuanhntta2020 - Sep 18, 2020 / tuanhntta2020 - Sep 19, 2020
|The chart shows IT components of GDP in the UK from 1992 to 2000
3 - I'm confused with "despite being less influential" in your second paraphrase. Actually, service industry's contribution to the GDP grew,...
Writing FeedbackJerry_Watson - Sep 17, 2020 / LadyOfClockwork - Sep 19, 2020
|Topic: Communicating online (advantages outweigh disadvantages?)
Writing Feedbackk1k1k3 - Sep 17, 2020 / k1k1k3 - Sep 18, 2020
|IELTS 2: A significant decrease in the number of high street shops has been witnessed lately
Writing Feedbackbstntphu - Sep 17, 2020 / bstntphu - Sep 18, 2020
|Staying at hotels when holidaying abroad is not the method to comprehend a nation and the people liv
2 - You need to develop a better way of paraphrasing. Aim to produce 3-5 sentences for that presentation. For this...
Writing FeedbackCarrious - Sep 17, 2020 / Holt - Sep 18, 2020
|Ielts writing task 2 - Animal extinction - Reasons and Solution
3 - hi, When using "First of all" I think you need to show more than two thesises, so "Firstly" is...
Writing Feedbackthaolinh - Sep 15, 2020 / Carrious - Sep 17, 2020
|The bar chart illustrates the number of people who decide on university subjects chosen in 2005
4 - It seems like your words are less than the requirement(150 words). by the way, I think that you ought...
Writing FeedbackHieu nguyen trog - Sep 16, 2020 / Carrious - Sep 17, 2020
|It is said that in the civilized world, animal-based products are not in high demand anymore
3 - I highly appreciate your rigorous feedback. I will keep those in mind when writing.Because I have started approaching IELTS...
Writing Feedbacktinnguye00218 - Sep 16, 2020 / tinnguye00218 - Sep 17, 2020
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