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Sticky: [WRITING TASK 1] The average on cell phone, national fixed line amd international fixed line service

4 - @Hannah Robjn Thanks for your feedback. Maybe i typed too fast so i made a lot unexpected mistakes. I...

Writing Feedbackelliemiller - Oct 13, 2020 / elliemiller - Oct 14, 2020
The quantity of Internet Express - My paragraph is too long. How can i make it short?

NEW - The graph shows the income of four cafes in New York in 12 months over the last year. ...

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English should be the only global language

NEW - It has been suggested that English should be used as the only spoken language in the world. Many non-native...

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It is no longer necessary to use animals as food or to use animal products for - agree or disagree

2 - I do not know where to begin with the review of this essay. The writing is just so bad...

Writing FeedbackTammyle - 14 hrs ago / Holt - 3 hrs ago
Essay about the advantages and disadvantages of taking a gap year

2 - There is a difference between discussing advantages V. disadvantages and . The latter is a totally...

Writing Feedbackcamtu0502 - 1 day ago / Holt - 15 hrs ago
IELTS Writing task 1 - Bar chart - Information about high school graduation in 3 countries.

2 - The summary overview must always be presented within 3-5 sentences. The information must be individualized into separate sentences due...

Writing FeedbackHuysero11 - 1 day ago / Holt - 15 hrs ago
It is a waste of time for high school students to learn literature such as novels

2 - The writer has over stated the original topic. It is no longer based on the simple original statement. This...

Writing FeedbackZari - 1 day ago / Holt - 20 hrs ago
Question about the benefits of universities. It is a topic for IELTS Writing Task 2.

2 - The restatement can be considered properly developed to the extent that the writer shows an understanding of the original...

Writing Feedbackkenny311006 - 1 day ago / Holt - 20 hrs ago
The process of making electricity from a geothermal power plant - Cambridge 12 Test 8 Task 1

2 - A clear lack of task 1 writing knowledge is evident in this writing. It is non- passing for several...

Writing Feedbackfanncia99 - 1 day ago / Holt - 20 hrs ago
The most effective ways to deal with environmental problems

2 - Do not confuse the IELTS writing tasks. The response provided here is incorrect because the format used was for...

Writing Feedbackstellamnj - 1 day ago / Holt - 21 hrs ago
People have a tendency to store knowledge on the internet at the present time

2 - Excellent work in making it very clear to the examiner that you are stating your personal opinion throughout the...

Writing Feedbacknhuver - 2 days ago / Holt - 1 day ago
IELTS TASK 2: Crimes committed by young people are increasing in major cities throughout the world

2 - The thesis statement is useless. It does not accurately restate the prompt nor establish the discussion platform for the...

Writing FeedbackChauAnnnh - 2 days ago / Holt - 1 day ago
TASK 2 people tend to have children later in life

2 - Do not place the basis of the writer's opinion / thesis statement in the first sentence. Always follow the...

Writing Feedbackantiphysics - 2 days ago / Holt - 1 day ago
The increasing rate of immigration is causing substantial changes in societies

2 - The prompt restatement is ill effective for a number of reasons. The first, is that is deviates to a...

Writing FeedbackWufeiyan - 2 days ago / Holt - 1 day ago
IELTS WRITING TAK 2: Replace parks and gardens instead of apartment buildings. Discuss both views.

2 - The overall discussion is off topic. The result will be a failing score because the writer changed the discussion...

Writing Feedbackquynhtotrd - Jul 4, 2022 / Holt - 1 day ago
Considering the amount of money that we can earn when choosing a job - WRITING TASK 2

4 - Reducing your usage of the following words and/or phrases in your paper: have to, a lot, big, get, good,...

Writing Feedbackvukhanhlinh - Jul 3, 2022 / Vink - 2 days ago
IELTS Writing task 1 - Bar chart - Information about high school graduation in 3 countries.

2 - This is a 3 paragraph report. It is missing another paragraph to complete the analysis aspect. A problem that...

Writing Feedbackdecember09th - Jul 2, 2022 / Holt - Jul 3, 2022
IELTS WRITING TASK 1: Films produced by five countries between 2005 and 2009

2 - There is a lack of clear image identification within the presentation. A specific image name is required for the...

Writing Feedbackalextieu98 - Jul 1, 2022 / Holt - Jul 3, 2022
Writing task 1 - line graph - illustrates the amount of spreads consumed from 1981 to 2007, in grams

2 - While the witter produced text above the word count minimum, he could have scored better if he had written...

Writing Feedbackchemistryforever - Jul 1, 2022 / Holt - Jul 2, 2022
Travel by air have a lot of negative effects to the environment. Should it be restricted?

3 - Just a reminder I'm a student, not a professional teacher or instructor. First of all, the word "air...

Writing Feedbackkenzo8 - Jul 1, 2022 / anmolwrites - Jul 2, 2022
SERIOUS CRIMES SOLVE BY DEATH PENALTY OR OTHER SOLUTIONS. DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS

2 - The discussion does not represent the correct for this discussion. It only portrays the personal opinion of the writer,...

Writing Feedbackjaneedilyss - Jul 1, 2022 / Holt - Jul 1, 2022
Essay about the influence of international sports events on a country

2 - When creating the prompt restatement, the writer must always review the prompt requirement. There are 3 statement that need...

Writing Feedbackphanngan - Jul 1, 2022 / Holt - Jul 1, 2022
TECHNOLOGY AND TRADITIONAL CULTURES. AGREE OR DISAGREE

2 - The prompt restatement is acceptable, along with the thesis statement. However, the question response is not within the expected...

Writing Feedbackjaneedilyss - Jun 30, 2022 / Holt - Jun 30, 2022
[IELTS WRITING TASK 1] THE NUMBER OF SHOP CLOSURES AND OPENINGS IN A COUNTRY FROM 2011 TO 2018

2 - The trending paragraph is no longer a trending paragraph. It turned into a report already due to the over-information...

Writing Feedbackangeloanh - Jun 30, 2022 / Holt - Jun 30, 2022
Fewer to become a teacher in secondary school, give reasons and solve it

2 - The prompt restatement is highly inaccurate. The given opening sentence is a writer's opinion, which is not represented in...

Writing Feedbackanhtuan2312nek - Jun 30, 2022 / Holt - Jun 30, 2022
IELTS Writing Task 2 - Live performance neccesity

3 - @Holt Thank you for your feedback. Would it be able to directly answer the question had I put the...

Writing FeedbackHoyEu - Jun 29, 2022 / HoyEu - Jun 30, 2022
IELTS writing task 2 about gap year out of formal education

2 - Please remember that the main score of this essay will be based on 2 important preliminary aspects that can...

Writing FeedbackJenny le - Jun 29, 2022 / Holt - Jun 29, 2022
Advantages and disadvantages of changing jobs IELTS writing task2

4 - -Same above, you must change the pronoun "you" into other pronouns, such as people, human beings, they,......

Writing Feedbackanhtuan2312nek - Jun 28, 2022 / janeedilyss - Jul 1, 2022
Writing Task 2 - Polution and Solution essay (problems caused by deforestation)

2 - The most severe problem with this essay is the lack of proper sentence development in relation to the discussion....

Writing FeedbackVink - Jun 28, 2022 / Holt - Jun 28, 2022
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement ? Playing a game is fun only when you win.

4 - there are some grammar need fixing...

Writing FeedbackCindy Trinh - Jun 28, 2022 / anhtuan2312nek - Jun 30, 2022
These days, there are more human deforestation activities caused serious results of the environment

2 - The prompt restatement should never contain any repetition coming from the original prompt. Not a single sentence, phrase, or...

Writing FeedbackVink - Jun 27, 2022 / Holt - Jun 28, 2022
In recent years, pressure on school and university students has been increasing and they are pushed

2 - Kindly remember that the direct question to be responded to it "Do you think this is a positive or...

Writing Feedbackmiinffuc - Jun 27, 2022 / Holt - Jun 28, 2022
Even though organic fruits and vegetables are more expensive than conventional fruits and vegetables

3 - @Holt By the way, this is an IELTS essay, so incorrectly overstated an opinion as far as I know...

Writing Feedbackfoxdiem4u - Jun 27, 2022 / foxdiem4u - Jun 27, 2022
The topic of whether a country will gain an edge when its students study overseas

2 - While the writer shows a good understanding of the discussion topic, a problem arose with the incomplete opinion statement....

Writing FeedbackBla - Jun 26, 2022 / Holt - Jun 26, 2022
Some people say that doing multiple tasks at the same time can be beneficial, but others disagree.

3 - - in your introduction, structure "While..." is used wrongly. insteads, "While A..., B..." -"assist+ --> "assists"...

Writing FeedbackKwan0504 - Jun 26, 2022 / janeedilyss - Jun 30, 2022
Schools offer now qualification through distance learning from the internet

2 - 2 problems exist with the topic restatement. The first, is that the writer has said the topic is "irrefutable"...

Writing FeedbackRedsoxnation - Jun 25, 2022 / Holt - Jun 26, 2022
In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people

3 - Spelling : + at a result --> as a result + such ( furniture, land) --> such as Long...

Writing FeedbackPotato Gardener - Jun 25, 2022 / Vink - Jun 28, 2022
In some societies, the number of crimes committed by teenagers is growing

3 - 1.which can leave them to end up suffering 2. i would rather say the prosecution of persons ......

Writing Feedbackbeckaa - Jun 25, 2022 / Redsoxnation - Jun 26, 2022
Many benefits for children to learn a foreign language from primary school

3 - 1.In paragraph 1, you got a run-on sentence "It has many benefits for children to learn (...) it is...

Writing Feedbackdiepanhnguyen - Jun 24, 2022 / beckaa - Jun 25, 2022
Energy consumption by the fuel - line chart in ielts writing task 1

3 - The line graph doesn't end at the moment but continues to the future so I don't think the sentence...

Writing Feedbackhoanglinh220301 - Jun 24, 2022 / beckaa - Jun 24, 2022
IELTS Writing Task 1 - The amount of fruit produced in four countries from 1970 to 2010.

4 - I suggest: "In general, the amount of fruit produced by Spain took a leading position over the period shown....

Writing Feedbackelwynht - Jun 24, 2022 / janeedilyss - Jul 1, 2022
Academic style essay about what are the qualities that make a good leader?

2 - There is no clear personal definition of leadership in this presentation. The definition should only cover one paragraph, rather...

Writing Feedbacktinganc - Jun 24, 2022 / Holt - Jun 24, 2022
IELTS Writing Task 1 - The percentage of five kinds of books sold by a bookseller

2 - This is a 4 paragraph presentation. The paragraph number is dictated by the number of images for comparison reporting....

Writing Feedbackdtthinh - Jun 23, 2022 / Holt - Jun 24, 2022
Every day, millions of tons of food are wasted all over the world. What are the effects? And how can

3 - Firstly, I am not professional so I hope my comment can help you with your writing! In introduction,...

Writing Feedbackbeckaa - Jun 23, 2022 / doanhly - Jun 23, 2022
The increasing rate of young people embarking on crimes is becoming a pressing concern

4 - in the 2rd paragraph, there is a grammar mistake, "some of..., creating...", I recommend you should change into "some...

Writing Feedbackhoanghone - Jun 23, 2022 / janeedilyss - Jul 1, 2022
IELTS Writing Task 1 - The changes in ownership of electrical appliances and time doing housework

3 - Hi, firstly, I am not professional so I just give some personal comments about your essay. Introduction: ...in...

Writing Feedbackridzkiekky - Jun 22, 2022 / doanhly - Jun 23, 2022
Although a lot of translation software available, learning a language could still be advantageous.

2 - This essay may be written correctly in the eyes of the writer but, in the eyes of the examiner,...

Writing FeedbackTiomo - Jun 21, 2022 / Holt - Jun 22, 2022
Opportunity to observe his motivation, personality and work ethic. LoR on behalf of Supervisor.

2 - There is very little difference in the tone of both opening paragraphs. These are actually more like clones of...

Writing FeedbackIcy - Jun 21, 2022 / Holt - Jun 21, 2022
How many people contracted diarrhea in Mashhad throughout the period from 1983 to 1992

2 - The shortened presentation requires more work. It is extremely short and creates confusion for the reader. Image identification is...

Writing Feedbackitsyourlinh - Jun 21, 2022 / Holt - Jun 21, 2022
The line graph depicts the proportion of people in the UK who went to the movies once a month

2 - Be careful with the use of tenses in the report. remember that the reference years have already passed. Therefore...

Writing Feedbackbeckaa - Jun 20, 2022 / Holt - Jun 20, 2022
Opinion essay regarding the trend that shopping is taken as a hobby.

2 - The writer cannot use an opposing point of view in the development of the response. He was prevented from...

Writing Feedbackparaghat - Jun 20, 2022 / Holt - Jun 20, 2022
The chart illustrates the amount of waste that was disposed and how they changed (2005 - 2008)

2 - A clear summary presentation must be composed of individual information sentences. By definition, a sentence is composed of one...

Writing Feedbackdrcyyy - Jun 20, 2022 / Holt - Jun 21, 2022
Advantages and Disadvantages Essay about the value of Advertisements

2 - The essay that has been written does not meet the discussion requirement. The current presentation uses an advantage V....

Writing Feedbackdanielsmith - Jun 20, 2022 / Holt - Jun 20, 2022
The chart compares the proportion of students who come from China, Japan and India to North Dean Un.

3 - The chart compares (...) and India who enrolled at North Dean ... ... Chinese and Indian students, while ......

Writing Feedbackahihihu - Jun 19, 2022 / danielsmith - Jun 20, 2022
The Graph Bellow Compares Changes In The Birth Rates Of China And USA Between 1920 And 2000.

4 - 1. You can not use the phrase "It is noticeable that" from this sentence "It is noticeable that the...

Writing Feedbacklittlecozyhome - Jun 19, 2022 / beckaa - Jun 26, 2022
In your opinion, what benefits do these celebrations have for society? Ielts Writing Task 2

5 - -In your introduction, you forgot to show your own opinion, which is really important and has a huge impact...

Writing Feedbackdouyin20102006 - Jun 18, 2022 / janeedilyss - Jun 30, 2022
Teenagers get a year-long break for pursuing their dreams, travelling or learning something new

3 - Nowadays, some people believe that freshmen are likely ... In this essay, I will scrutinize ... For...

Writing Feedbackdongoclinh - Jun 18, 2022 / danielsmith - Jun 20, 2022
Today, women no longer feel the need to get married due to strong financial capability. Do you agree

2 - Do not overstate the opinion presentation by using an emotional response. This is not an extent response essay. Use...

Writing Feedbackglish27 - Jun 18, 2022 / Holt - Jun 18, 2022
Some say that because many people are living much longer, the retirement age should be raised

2 - The writer did an almost excellent job in the prompt restatement and personal opinion. The topic presentation uses enough...

Writing Feedbackdoanhly - Jun 18, 2022 / Holt - Jun 18, 2022
Effects of science on the food we eat

2 - This is not an academic sounding phrase. Since the writer is practicing to write academic papers, informal English...

Writing FeedbackManaro - Jun 17, 2022 / Holt - Jun 17, 2022

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