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4 - @Hannah Robjn Thanks for your feedback. Maybe i typed too fast so i made a lot unexpected mistakes. I...
Writing Feedbackelliemiller - Oct 13, 2020 / elliemiller - Oct 14, 2020
|The quantity of Internet Express - My paragraph is too long. How can i make it short?
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|English should be the only global language
NEW - It has been suggested that English should be used as the only spoken language in the world. Many non-native...
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|It is no longer necessary to use animals as food or to use animal products for - agree or disagree
Writing FeedbackTammyle - 14 hrs ago / Holt - 3 hrs ago
|Essay about the advantages and disadvantages of taking a gap year
2 - There is a difference between discussing advantages V. disadvantages and . The latter is a totally...
Writing Feedbackcamtu0502 - 1 day ago / Holt - 15 hrs ago
|IELTS Writing task 1 - Bar chart - Information about high school graduation in 3 countries.
2 - The summary overview must always be presented within 3-5 sentences. The information must be individualized into separate sentences due...
Writing FeedbackHuysero11 - 1 day ago / Holt - 15 hrs ago
|It is a waste of time for high school students to learn literature such as novels
2 - The writer has over stated the original topic. It is no longer based on the simple original statement. This...
Writing FeedbackZari - 1 day ago / Holt - 20 hrs ago
|Question about the benefits of universities. It is a topic for IELTS Writing Task 2.
2 - The restatement can be considered properly developed to the extent that the writer shows an understanding of the original...
Writing Feedbackkenny311006 - 1 day ago / Holt - 20 hrs ago
|The process of making electricity from a geothermal power plant - Cambridge 12 Test 8 Task 1
2 - A clear lack of task 1 writing knowledge is evident in this writing. It is non- passing for several...
Writing Feedbackfanncia99 - 1 day ago / Holt - 20 hrs ago
|The most effective ways to deal with environmental problems
2 - Do not confuse the IELTS writing tasks. The response provided here is incorrect because the format used was for...
Writing Feedbackstellamnj - 1 day ago / Holt - 21 hrs ago
|People have a tendency to store knowledge on the internet at the present time
2 - Excellent work in making it very clear to the examiner that you are stating your personal opinion throughout the...
Writing Feedbacknhuver - 2 days ago / Holt - 1 day ago
|IELTS TASK 2: Crimes committed by young people are increasing in major cities throughout the world
2 - The thesis statement is useless. It does not accurately restate the prompt nor establish the discussion platform for the...
Writing FeedbackChauAnnnh - 2 days ago / Holt - 1 day ago
|TASK 2 people tend to have children later in life
2 - Do not place the basis of the writer's opinion / thesis statement in the first sentence. Always follow the...
Writing Feedbackantiphysics - 2 days ago / Holt - 1 day ago
|The increasing rate of immigration is causing substantial changes in societies
2 - The prompt restatement is ill effective for a number of reasons. The first, is that is deviates to a...
Writing FeedbackWufeiyan - 2 days ago / Holt - 1 day ago
|IELTS WRITING TAK 2: Replace parks and gardens instead of apartment buildings. Discuss both views.
2 - The overall discussion is off topic. The result will be a failing score because the writer changed the discussion...
Writing Feedbackquynhtotrd - Jul 4, 2022 / Holt - 1 day ago
|Considering the amount of money that we can earn when choosing a job - WRITING TASK 2
4 - Reducing your usage of the following words and/or phrases in your paper: have to, a lot, big, get, good,...
Writing Feedbackvukhanhlinh - Jul 3, 2022 / Vink - 2 days ago
|IELTS Writing task 1 - Bar chart - Information about high school graduation in 3 countries.
2 - This is a 3 paragraph report. It is missing another paragraph to complete the analysis aspect. A problem that...
Writing Feedbackdecember09th - Jul 2, 2022 / Holt - Jul 3, 2022
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1: Films produced by five countries between 2005 and 2009
2 - There is a lack of clear image identification within the presentation. A specific image name is required for the...
Writing Feedbackalextieu98 - Jul 1, 2022 / Holt - Jul 3, 2022
|Writing task 1 - line graph - illustrates the amount of spreads consumed from 1981 to 2007, in grams
2 - While the witter produced text above the word count minimum, he could have scored better if he had written...
Writing Feedbackchemistryforever - Jul 1, 2022 / Holt - Jul 2, 2022
|Travel by air have a lot of negative effects to the environment. Should it be restricted?
3 - Just a reminder I'm a student, not a professional teacher or instructor. First of all, the word "air...
Writing Feedbackkenzo8 - Jul 1, 2022 / anmolwrites - Jul 2, 2022
|SERIOUS CRIMES SOLVE BY DEATH PENALTY OR OTHER SOLUTIONS. DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS
2 - The discussion does not represent the correct for this discussion. It only portrays the personal opinion of the writer,...
Writing Feedbackjaneedilyss - Jul 1, 2022 / Holt - Jul 1, 2022
|Essay about the influence of international sports events on a country
2 - When creating the prompt restatement, the writer must always review the prompt requirement. There are 3 statement that need...
Writing Feedbackphanngan - Jul 1, 2022 / Holt - Jul 1, 2022
|TECHNOLOGY AND TRADITIONAL CULTURES. AGREE OR DISAGREE
2 - The prompt restatement is acceptable, along with the thesis statement. However, the question response is not within the expected...
Writing Feedbackjaneedilyss - Jun 30, 2022 / Holt - Jun 30, 2022
|[IELTS WRITING TASK 1] THE NUMBER OF SHOP CLOSURES AND OPENINGS IN A COUNTRY FROM 2011 TO 2018
2 - The trending paragraph is no longer a trending paragraph. It turned into a report already due to the over-information...
Writing Feedbackangeloanh - Jun 30, 2022 / Holt - Jun 30, 2022
|Fewer to become a teacher in secondary school, give reasons and solve it
2 - The prompt restatement is highly inaccurate. The given opening sentence is a writer's opinion, which is not represented in...
Writing Feedbackanhtuan2312nek - Jun 30, 2022 / Holt - Jun 30, 2022
|IELTS Writing Task 2 - Live performance neccesity
3 - @Holt Thank you for your feedback. Would it be able to directly answer the question had I put the...
Writing FeedbackHoyEu - Jun 29, 2022 / HoyEu - Jun 30, 2022
|IELTS writing task 2 about gap year out of formal education
2 - Please remember that the main score of this essay will be based on 2 important preliminary aspects that can...
Writing FeedbackJenny le - Jun 29, 2022 / Holt - Jun 29, 2022
|Advantages and disadvantages of changing jobs IELTS writing task2
4 - -Same above, you must change the pronoun "you" into other pronouns, such as people, human beings, they,......
Writing Feedbackanhtuan2312nek - Jun 28, 2022 / janeedilyss - Jul 1, 2022
|Writing Task 2 - Polution and Solution essay (problems caused by deforestation)
2 - The most severe problem with this essay is the lack of proper sentence development in relation to the discussion....
Writing FeedbackVink - Jun 28, 2022 / Holt - Jun 28, 2022
|Do you agree or disagree with the following statement ? Playing a game is fun only when you win.
Writing FeedbackCindy Trinh - Jun 28, 2022 / anhtuan2312nek - Jun 30, 2022
|These days, there are more human deforestation activities caused serious results of the environment
2 - The prompt restatement should never contain any repetition coming from the original prompt. Not a single sentence, phrase, or...
Writing FeedbackVink - Jun 27, 2022 / Holt - Jun 28, 2022
|In recent years, pressure on school and university students has been increasing and they are pushed
2 - Kindly remember that the direct question to be responded to it "Do you think this is a positive or...
Writing Feedbackmiinffuc - Jun 27, 2022 / Holt - Jun 28, 2022
|Even though organic fruits and vegetables are more expensive than conventional fruits and vegetables
3 - @Holt By the way, this is an IELTS essay, so incorrectly overstated an opinion as far as I know...
Writing Feedbackfoxdiem4u - Jun 27, 2022 / foxdiem4u - Jun 27, 2022
|The topic of whether a country will gain an edge when its students study overseas
2 - While the writer shows a good understanding of the discussion topic, a problem arose with the incomplete opinion statement....
Writing FeedbackBla - Jun 26, 2022 / Holt - Jun 26, 2022
|Some people say that doing multiple tasks at the same time can be beneficial, but others disagree.
3 - - in your introduction, structure "While..." is used wrongly. insteads, "While A..., B..." -"assist+ --> "assists"...
Writing FeedbackKwan0504 - Jun 26, 2022 / janeedilyss - Jun 30, 2022
|Schools offer now qualification through distance learning from the internet
2 - 2 problems exist with the topic restatement. The first, is that the writer has said the topic is "irrefutable"...
Writing FeedbackRedsoxnation - Jun 25, 2022 / Holt - Jun 26, 2022
|In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people
Writing FeedbackPotato Gardener - Jun 25, 2022 / Vink - Jun 28, 2022
|In some societies, the number of crimes committed by teenagers is growing
3 - 1.which can leave them to end up suffering 2. i would rather say the prosecution of persons ......
Writing Feedbackbeckaa - Jun 25, 2022 / Redsoxnation - Jun 26, 2022
|Many benefits for children to learn a foreign language from primary school
3 - 1.In paragraph 1, you got a run-on sentence "It has many benefits for children to learn (...) it is...
Writing Feedbackdiepanhnguyen - Jun 24, 2022 / beckaa - Jun 25, 2022
|Energy consumption by the fuel - line chart in ielts writing task 1
3 - The line graph doesn't end at the moment but continues to the future so I don't think the sentence...
Writing Feedbackhoanglinh220301 - Jun 24, 2022 / beckaa - Jun 24, 2022
|IELTS Writing Task 1 - The amount of fruit produced in four countries from 1970 to 2010.
4 - I suggest: "In general, the amount of fruit produced by Spain took a leading position over the period shown....
Writing Feedbackelwynht - Jun 24, 2022 / janeedilyss - Jul 1, 2022
|Academic style essay about what are the qualities that make a good leader?
2 - There is no clear personal definition of leadership in this presentation. The definition should only cover one paragraph, rather...
Writing Feedbacktinganc - Jun 24, 2022 / Holt - Jun 24, 2022
|IELTS Writing Task 1 - The percentage of five kinds of books sold by a bookseller
2 - This is a 4 paragraph presentation. The paragraph number is dictated by the number of images for comparison reporting....
Writing Feedbackdtthinh - Jun 23, 2022 / Holt - Jun 24, 2022
|Every day, millions of tons of food are wasted all over the world. What are the effects? And how can
3 - Firstly, I am not professional so I hope my comment can help you with your writing! In introduction,...
Writing Feedbackbeckaa - Jun 23, 2022 / doanhly - Jun 23, 2022
|The increasing rate of young people embarking on crimes is becoming a pressing concern
4 - in the 2rd paragraph, there is a grammar mistake, "some of..., creating...", I recommend you should change into "some...
Writing Feedbackhoanghone - Jun 23, 2022 / janeedilyss - Jul 1, 2022
|IELTS Writing Task 1 - The changes in ownership of electrical appliances and time doing housework
3 - Hi, firstly, I am not professional so I just give some personal comments about your essay. Introduction: ...in...
Writing Feedbackridzkiekky - Jun 22, 2022 / doanhly - Jun 23, 2022
|Although a lot of translation software available, learning a language could still be advantageous.
2 - This essay may be written correctly in the eyes of the writer but, in the eyes of the examiner,...
Writing FeedbackTiomo - Jun 21, 2022 / Holt - Jun 22, 2022
|Opportunity to observe his motivation, personality and work ethic. LoR on behalf of Supervisor.
2 - There is very little difference in the tone of both opening paragraphs. These are actually more like clones of...
Writing FeedbackIcy - Jun 21, 2022 / Holt - Jun 21, 2022
|How many people contracted diarrhea in Mashhad throughout the period from 1983 to 1992
2 - The shortened presentation requires more work. It is extremely short and creates confusion for the reader. Image identification is...
Writing Feedbackitsyourlinh - Jun 21, 2022 / Holt - Jun 21, 2022
|The line graph depicts the proportion of people in the UK who went to the movies once a month
2 - Be careful with the use of tenses in the report. remember that the reference years have already passed. Therefore...
Writing Feedbackbeckaa - Jun 20, 2022 / Holt - Jun 20, 2022
|Opinion essay regarding the trend that shopping is taken as a hobby.
2 - The writer cannot use an opposing point of view in the development of the response. He was prevented from...
Writing Feedbackparaghat - Jun 20, 2022 / Holt - Jun 20, 2022
|The chart illustrates the amount of waste that was disposed and how they changed (2005 - 2008)
2 - A clear summary presentation must be composed of individual information sentences. By definition, a sentence is composed of one...
Writing Feedbackdrcyyy - Jun 20, 2022 / Holt - Jun 21, 2022
|Advantages and Disadvantages Essay about the value of Advertisements
2 - The essay that has been written does not meet the discussion requirement. The current presentation uses an advantage V....
Writing Feedbackdanielsmith - Jun 20, 2022 / Holt - Jun 20, 2022
|The chart compares the proportion of students who come from China, Japan and India to North Dean Un.
3 - The chart compares (...) and India who enrolled at North Dean ... ... Chinese and Indian students, while ......
Writing Feedbackahihihu - Jun 19, 2022 / danielsmith - Jun 20, 2022
|The Graph Bellow Compares Changes In The Birth Rates Of China And USA Between 1920 And 2000.
4 - 1. You can not use the phrase "It is noticeable that" from this sentence "It is noticeable that the...
Writing Feedbacklittlecozyhome - Jun 19, 2022 / beckaa - Jun 26, 2022
|In your opinion, what benefits do these celebrations have for society? Ielts Writing Task 2
5 - -In your introduction, you forgot to show your own opinion, which is really important and has a huge impact...
Writing Feedbackdouyin20102006 - Jun 18, 2022 / janeedilyss - Jun 30, 2022
|Teenagers get a year-long break for pursuing their dreams, travelling or learning something new
3 - Nowadays, some people believe that freshmen are likely ... In this essay, I will scrutinize ... For...
Writing Feedbackdongoclinh - Jun 18, 2022 / danielsmith - Jun 20, 2022
|Today, women no longer feel the need to get married due to strong financial capability. Do you agree
2 - Do not overstate the opinion presentation by using an emotional response. This is not an extent response essay. Use...
Writing Feedbackglish27 - Jun 18, 2022 / Holt - Jun 18, 2022
|Some say that because many people are living much longer, the retirement age should be raised
2 - The writer did an almost excellent job in the prompt restatement and personal opinion. The topic presentation uses enough...
Writing Feedbackdoanhly - Jun 18, 2022 / Holt - Jun 18, 2022
|Effects of science on the food we eat
2 - This is not an academic sounding phrase. Since the writer is practicing to write academic papers, informal English...
Writing FeedbackManaro - Jun 17, 2022 / Holt - Jun 17, 2022
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