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Sticky: [WRITING TASK 1] The average on cell phone, national fixed line amd international fixed line service

4 - @Hannah Robjn Thanks for your feedback. Maybe i typed too fast so i made a lot unexpected mistakes. I...

Writing Feedbackelliemiller - Oct 13, 2020 / elliemiller - Oct 14, 2020
Air pollution's problems, its effect on Earth's creatures, and possible solutions

NEW - Writing Task 2: Air Pollution. People are doing many things that make air pollution, and it has made...

Writing FeedbackNguyen Thu Thuy - 9 hrs ago / — -
Schools should emphasize national literature and history for various reasons

NEW - The importance of literature and history for pupils I feel that school should emphasize national literature and history...

Writing FeedbackPham Hoai Trang - 9 hrs ago / — -
With the flourish of technology, working online has increasingly emerged as a new development

NEW - distance working pros and cons With the flourish of technology, working online has increasingly emerged as a new...

Writing FeedbackHiimmy - 10 hrs ago / — -
Four main reasons why teenagers from one African country use their phones

NEW - results of surveys about mobile phones in Africa The pie charts demonstrate the proportion of 4 primary reasons...

Writing Feedbackcinaque - 12 hrs ago / — -
The process of transforming geothermal energy from cold water into electricity

NEW - Please help me better my writing by giving your feedbacks on my structure, grammar, vocabulary and idea. I will...

Writing FeedbackPikaNam - 13 hrs ago / — -
The prompt: Many people leave their home country and go to other countries to live and work.

NEW - MANY PEOPLE LEAVE THEIR HOME COUNTRY AND GO TO OTHER COUNTRIES TO LIVE AND WORK. WHY DO YOU THINK...

Writing FeedbackThuyan1211 - 20 hrs ago / — -
The map with potential sites for two new shopping malls & major transportation features of a town

NEW - Task 1 - Planned Shopping Centre Locations Given is a town planning map that reveals the potential sites...

Writing FeedbackZZack0501 - 1 day ago / — -
Ielts - data on the spendings of citizens in the UK on three categories of fast food in 1990

2 - Seperate the data presentation. Pizza was consumed ata different financial representation. Do not assume shared data. This error...

Writing FeedbackMinhhanh5120 - 1 day ago / Holt - 12 hrs ago
IELTS writing academic about divorce; spikes in break-ups and divorces

2 - The prompt restatement is acceptable. The opinion part though, is not represented at all since there are no direct...

Writing Feedbackngochanh123 - 2 days ago / Holt - 13 hrs ago
Given are the pie charts comparing two sexes in terms of the proportion of occupations in the UK

2 - Clarify that the pie charts for each gender is seperate. This confusing reference to the number of pie...

Writing Feedbackpapcaii - Sep 23, 2021 / Holt - 1 day ago
Writing task 2: University or college is the best route to a successful career

3 - Your essay is so cohesive and logical, but you should have divided the body of the essay into 2...

Writing Feedbackmegazetz - Sep 23, 2021 / skinnypeter - 11 hrs ago
ESSAY ABOUT THE REASONS AND SOLUTIONS OF WATER POLLUTION

2 - This is not a direct response to the reason and solution question presented. A lack of discussion topic...

Writing FeedbackHarper - Sep 23, 2021 / Holt - 2 days ago
Beside maximizing profit, all the companies should care about making benefits for society

3 - You should learn how to structure an essay like this. In the essay, you have to answer "...

Writing Feedbacknnbapbap - Sep 23, 2021 / skinnypeter - 10 hrs ago
The two pictures illustrate how the layout of the ground floor in this house will be changed

2 - The word presentation, though passing in minimum consideration, does not allow for a maximum scoring consideration. If the writer...

Writing Feedbackambery - Sep 23, 2021 / Holt - 2 days ago
Increasing the price of fuel as the optimal solution to solve environmental problems

2 - The prompt restatement should never be over discussed. The topic presentation should not alter the original presentation by digressing...

Writing Feedbacknartarus2000 - Sep 22, 2021 / Holt - 2 days ago
People are interested in finding out about the history of the house they live in. Why ? How ?

NEW - Exploring stories about the past of their accommodation is becoming increasingly popular for many people in some nations. This...

Writing Feedbackhtphats - Sep 22, 2021 / — -
IELTS Essay about DANGEROUS SPORTS needed

2 - The first paragraph does not provide a restatement + opinion. Rather, the writer entered into a direct discussion in...

Writing Feedbackjangchul - Sep 21, 2021 / Holt - Sep 23, 2021
Discuss both views. Cheap products or long lasting product. This is an IELTS essay

3 - @Holt Thank you. I really appreciate your feedback which helps me improve my essay....

Writing Feedbacktuonghuy - Sep 21, 2021 / tuonghuy - Sep 22, 2021
Lots of teenagers today would rather socialize online than communicate in person

2 - Repetitive word meaning. Both refer to the 21st century. Use one reference only. There is no need...

Writing Feedbackqnhuluong - Sep 21, 2021 / Holt - Sep 22, 2021
How to build the medical health care system

2 - This is not an acceptable statement response. Consider the focus of the prompt which is building a health care...

Writing FeedbackPubricahealth - Sep 21, 2021 / Holt - Sep 22, 2021
Information about the travelling tendency (cities visited) by people from the USA, Canada and Mexico

3 - @Holt thanks for your feedback...

Writing Feedbackpapcaii - Sep 20, 2021 / papcaii - Sep 22, 2021
Essay about the factors bringing success - advise

2 - This creates a problem with the orginal topic rephrasing. There is no question being asked of the writer...

Writing Feedbackhelloitssheila - Sep 20, 2021 / Holt - Sep 22, 2021
IELTS WRITING TASK 2: Will libraries be relevant in the future?

2 - The opinion of the writer is unclear. Do you agree or disagree? The response can only support one...

Writing Feedbackchantran - Sep 20, 2021 / Holt - Sep 21, 2021
Ielts task on public, private and self-employed sectors of the economy in the UK

3 - in my point of view, you should have one more sentence in your overview ( like which field had...

Writing Feedbacknobodycares19 - Sep 20, 2021 / papcaii - Sep 21, 2021
[IELTS WRITING TASK 2] SHOULD CHILDREN DECIDE THEIR OWN CAREER?

2 - This is a topic reason deviation. It is not supported in the orginal statement. It has altered the...

Writing FeedbackItsthu - Sep 20, 2021 / Holt - Sep 21, 2021
Beside studying, there are more significant factors that pupils have to explore

NEW - Task 2: Everybody should stay at school until the age of 18. What extent do you agree or disagree?...

Writing Feedbackpaleodietcorner - Sep 20, 2021 / — -
[IELTS WRITING TASK 2] DISCUSS THE VIEWS OF ADVERTISING AND GIVE YOUR OPINION.

3 - @paleodietcorner Thank you so much, I really appreciate your feedback....

Writing FeedbackTraphan - Sep 20, 2021 / Traphan - Sep 20, 2021
Developing nations are often financially supported by prosperous nations, but poverty still remain

2 - Do not exaggerate your response. Format the answer as needed or indicated in the discussion question. This is...

Writing Feedbackvvananh88 - Sep 19, 2021 / Holt - Sep 21, 2021
AGREE/DISAGREE - CLEARING PUBLIC PARKS

NEW - Although many people value their public parks, this space could be better used for other purposes such as residential...

Writing Feedbacknartarus2000 - Sep 19, 2021 / — -
What can art tell us about life that science and technology cannot?

2 - Kick off the discussion with a proper topic outline. The reader needs to know that you have a...

Writing Feedbackdanlenze - Sep 19, 2021 / Holt - Sep 21, 2021
The data on the occupation of graduated and post-graduate students after finishing college in the UK

3 - it is clear that a minority majority of UK graduates ......

Writing Feedbackkimkhanhnguyen - Sep 19, 2021 / spandya - Sep 21, 2021
Higher number of youngsters move from developed to poorer countries, to do some charitable work

2 - The student cannot recieve a passing score for this essay. The discussion response provided does not align itself with...

Writing FeedbackHuyne - Sep 19, 2021 / Holt - Sep 20, 2021
Giving jobless people access to the Internet will help reducing unemployment issue. Agree/disagree?

2 - The student did an acceptable job in the prompt restatement but failed to provide an appropriate question response. Refer...

Writing Feedbacksourisdefoudre - Sep 19, 2021 / Holt - Sep 20, 2021
What is more vital: communication through word by mouth, or written language?

2 - Not a controversy. This has always been a topic for discussion. Avoid using sensationalist terms as these do...

Writing Feedbackngominhphuong - Sep 18, 2021 / Holt - Sep 20, 2021
WRITING IELTS ESSAY: Mothers should spend most of their time raising their children

2 - Hanging sentence. There must be a reason provided either before or after the word " while". This is...

Writing Feedbackgianggiangvn - Sep 18, 2021 / Holt - Sep 20, 2021
The line charts below illustrate the amount of energy consumed in the UK from 1980 to 2030

3 - Thanks for your advice! I forgot to upload an image for the report. I will reinforce my English words...

Writing FeedbackTurtle2000 - Sep 18, 2021 / Turtle2000 - Sep 20, 2021
Task 2: Traffic - a problem in major cities. Causes and solutions.

2 - The task 2 essay is the opportunity for the test taker to show his ability to explain his opinion...

Writing Feedbackpaleodietcorner - Sep 18, 2021 / Holt - Sep 19, 2021
Real or imaginary that you plan to do this summer. Try to think topic about time with friends

2 - What? This presentation does not connect well with the previous presentations. Avoid vague references since the letter calls...

Writing Feedbackjadevinct - Sep 18, 2021 / Holt - Sep 19, 2021
The line graph illustrates the amount of people who bought music over seven years time frame

4 - i think a conclusion is unnecessary in WR task 1. instead of that you should write one more sentence...

Writing FeedbackMrshangaung - Sep 18, 2021 / papcaii - Sep 20, 2021
Past and present views on damaged items

2 - Do not focus solely on the vocabulary aspect of the score. Such a presentation shows that the writer does...

Writing Feedbackspandya - Sep 18, 2021 / Holt - Sep 19, 2021
Money distribution from developed countries to those underdeveloped, does not stop poverty there

2 - If the writer completely disagrees with an opinion, then he must have the conviction to defend it. One...

Writing Feedbackmonicaaa0017 - Sep 18, 2021 / Holt - Sep 19, 2021
The amount of people who took train at London Underground Station in a day for sixteen hours

4 - I can spot some grammar errors in your essay as below for your review: Overall, people generally take...

Writing Feedbackmonicaaa0017 - Sep 18, 2021 / Kim2989 - Sep 23, 2021
The amount of money invested to study by the American government over a 28-year period

2 - The overall essay is well developed. It shows a great deal of time spent in analyzing the image. Next...

Writing Feedbackpapcaii - Sep 18, 2021 / Holt - Sep 19, 2021
The essay topic: It is said that children need time to rest than just focus on studying.

2 - The prompt restatement is confusing. The writer is combining unrelated ideas in the presentation sentences, leaving the reader confused.The...

Writing FeedbackStewieHarison278 - Sep 18, 2021 / Holt - Sep 19, 2021
IELTS WRITING TASK 1: The graph shows information regarding the birth and death rates in New Zealand

3 - Thank you for your feedback...

Writing Feedbackmegazetz - Sep 17, 2021 / megazetz - Sep 18, 2021
Hunger problem despite launched and implemented many advancements and breakthroughs in agriculture

3 - @Holt Thank you for your advice and comment!...

Writing Feedbackgianggiangvn - Sep 17, 2021 / gianggiangvn - Sep 18, 2021
The estimated jeans sales of the two Turkish companies and their projected market share

3 - First of all, there are other patent information that u can outlined, including a small decrease at first in...

Writing FeedbackAnhThi - Sep 17, 2021 / paleodietcorner - Sep 19, 2021
Number of controversies about gender equality in community, especially in educational environments

5 - I see many poor word choices, wrong usage and grammar mistakes Such as: Personally, I think...

Writing FeedbackNhung0211 - Sep 17, 2021 / megazetz - Sep 18, 2021
Public spending on promoting a healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness and medical expenses

3 - For the introduction you can say like this: It is often argued by some that spending public money...

Writing Feedbackanth2407 - Sep 16, 2021 / monicaaa0017 - Sep 18, 2021
Nowadays some people choose to live in the city while other chooses to stay in the countryside.

4 - Firstly, I think you misunderstood the prompt. You were asked to discuss the advantages and disadvantages for people who...

Writing FeedbackNguyet Ha - Sep 16, 2021 / megazetz - Sep 18, 2021
The analysis regarding the income of coffee and bananas in five different areas between 1999 & 2004

2 - Incorrect. There are 2 seperate tables presented for this report. This is automatically a 4 paragraph report due...

Writing Feedbackindah13 - Sep 15, 2021 / Holt - Sep 16, 2021
Task 1 The results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in Australia

3 - In my personal opinion, I think using the word "illustrate" would be a poor choice when talking about...

Writing Feedbacktrucinthesky - Sep 15, 2021 / megazetz - Sep 17, 2021
Social media are popular but the nature of online platform presents a myriad of potential issues

3 - When writing an essay, you need to make sure your answer complied with the given question. Question: Do you...

Writing FeedbackKylietran - Sep 15, 2021 / gianggiangvn - Sep 18, 2021
IELTS 2; What is the most appropriate place for children to study and develop - a school or home?

3 - For the conclusion you can say Although (...) method, attending schools is a way better because children can...

Writing Feedbacksamnguyen12 - Sep 14, 2021 / monicaaa0017 - Sep 16, 2021
International students in the UK attending and achieving second or even higher class degrees

4 - First of all, I would like to understand where this note was written. This is definitely not an article,...

Writing Feedbacktintiah - Sep 14, 2021 / PaulBrutix - Sep 17, 2021
There are good reasons for students to be compelled to wear uniform at schools

3 - For the first sentence of the conclusion you can add: Requiring students to wear a uniform is definitely...

Writing Feedbackkhanh ly - Sep 14, 2021 / monicaaa0017 - Sep 18, 2021
IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - ENVIRONMENT PROBLEMS: THE LOSS OF ANIMALS AND PLANTS OR OTHER ISSUES?

9 - @Ranee This needs improvement in grammar and sentence structure. It might help to construct short sentences. Good luck....

Writing FeedbackRanee - Sep 14, 2021 / hazelbas - 11 hrs ago
More Money Should Be Spent On Adult Education Than on Children's Education.

2 - The topic begs the writer to consider the importance of education based on the age of the learner. The...

Writing Feedbacktrypheenee - Sep 14, 2021 / Holt - Sep 15, 2021
The most wanted destinations for British travellers and their purposes of travelling abroad

2 - Avoid the temptation of a run - on sentence when writing the summary overview. The rule of thumb is...

Writing Feedbackmonicaaa0017 - Sep 14, 2021 / Holt - Sep 16, 2021

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