Good Day
If there is any mistake in format below, Please I need correction and your advice
My name is Hamed omer. I am 32 years old, I graduated from high school in 2005, I am married, I worked one and half year in Falak company as a Personnel Assistant. Currently I am working as contractor Admin clerk in Sabic company since five years, I am very responsible,. My administration skills are excellent,. I enjoy working in a team environment, and. I'm willing to learn and help others.
As an experienced administration I'm able to multitask in a very busy environment. My organizations skills help me to get along with others well, and keep the business going smooth.I am an optimist to enjoy to your company.
suggestion
I am 32 years old, I graduated from high school in 2005, I am married, I worked one and half year in Falak company as a Personnel Assistant.
1. I am 32 years old and married. I have completed my high school in 2005. I have worked at Falak company as a persoonel assistance for one and half year.
ps: usually, people will saying that he/she graduated from university not high school.
Currently I am working as contractor Admin clerk in Sabic company since five years
2. Currently, I am working as contractor administrative clerk at Sabic company. I have been working there for five years.
ps: Currently ...since. It seems like incorrect. Please, anyone tell me regarding this sentence. Am my correction is correct?
I'm able to multitask in a very busy environment -> I am a multitasking person who able to cope with the busy environment.
organizations skills ???
organizations skills
organizations skills ???I think this is ok (organizational skills) or my skills
I appreciate your support , Many thanks.
Hi Hamed,
Today, I just read an article, which also use graduate from high-school so my comment on Question 1 is wrong. Sorry for the missleading.
Good point, Thanks
Hi Hamed,
I would like to suggest the ending of introduction, " My maturity, practical experience, multitasking and eagerness to enter in your company will make me an excellent (position you are applying for). I would love to work as a...(position) and am confident that I would be a beneficial addition to the Company".
This is just a suggestion..:) Your's is also correct but, I thought if you will summarize all your skills in one sentences at the end then that will sound more good. (..it's my opinion)
Hope this will help you.
Good luck!!
Thanks
Ana.
My suggestion;
I currently work as a Contractor Admin Clerk at Sabic Company since 2007. Before joining Sabic I worked as a Personnel Assistant for xxxxxxx(tell the designation of the person that you worked for as PA. e.g. Managing Director) at Falak Company for one and half years.(usually you tell them your current position first and then talk about your previous experience) I have proven track records of being a responsible team player with excellent administration skills. I am also very keen and enthusiastic to learn and further develop my skills.
Hi Hamed and Duminda,
I love this forum. You not only can improve English here but also develop your personality. I don't know whether my comments are correct or not but, I am always trying to explain as I can or as per my knowledge. While doing all this I am learning very good and new things. I would like to thank you all moderators and contributors especially the person who created this site. Thanks a ton..!!
Thank you so much:)
Regards,
Ana.
I like your suggestions, it is usefuly ,
Thanks a lot.
