a letter of recommendation to a congress man (into the us airforce)

introduction
Congress Man ...
it gives me a great please writing to you about this matter. Joining the air-force been one of my greatest aim and dream in life i would like to accomplish and will do my possible best to enroll myself in.

introduction
Congress Man ...
it gives me a great please writing to you about this matter. Joining the air-force been one of my greatest aim and dream in life i would like to accomplish and will do my possible best to enroll myself in.

Congress Man ...

Dear Congressman ...

It gives me a great pleasure to be writing to you about this matter.

Joining the United States Air Force has been one of my greatest desires, and one of the most important things I will ever do. I will work hard and do my absolute best to accomplish this.

I added a few things and changed it a little for dramatic effect! Good luck!

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thanks susan . i will like to hear more from you

please help me correct my errors and embellish it with your word. this is just two fifth of the letter.

CONGRESS LADY NAN HAY WORTH,
It gives me a great pleasure to be writing to you about this matter. Joining the United States Air Force has been one of my greatest desires, and one of the most important things I will ever do. I will work hard and do my absolute best to accomplish this. My interest of joining the air force begun when i was in first grade, this dream of him was beyond recognition. My mom being the most inspirational figure in my life always inspired me to be best in any kind situation i get myself into. at a very tender age my made me join the boys scout association went for camps and also exposed me to a religious organisation and other types of organisation which helped instill or inculcate a kind of leadership and problem solving situation personality in me.

Ever since i migrated to the United States, i realized it had the best military academy not only in the nation but also in the world. this country serves people with different kind of opportunities which makes it unique. i have be motivated by veterans and other people to join the air force, even my grandfather who joined the army because it is one of the greatest places to be in life. So i always ask myself how to be enrolled in the air force academy.My desire to serve this great nation and to attain the rank of a military officer has decided my future.

Making the letter formal would be nice!!!
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how should i make it formal can you please help me . this is also a rough draft.

Dear Congress Man,
It is a great pleasure writing to you about this matter. Joining the Air Force has been one of my greatest aims and biggest dreams and I would like to accomplish it seriously. Thank you for giving me this oppurtunity to talk to you about this matter.

Sincerly,
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