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"I was born in Korea and might die in Norway."



wooyong 1 / 2  
Mar 27, 2011   #1
I was born in Korea and might die in Norway.
I also might die in Saudi Arabia, USA and Japan.
It doesn't matter where we live.
Even though we are living different countries, being different ages, having different apperence, different favorite singer as well.
But If we are friend, and getting close, we might be find common something.
I want to be your friend.
Although we're far apart, but also this site is connected with us.
I want to hear what you said. I want to talk about me.
You never know, we might see each other.
You know What? It's a small world.
Plese Don't say four-letter words. People all weak.

jco19 1 / 9  
Mar 27, 2011   #2
I've striked out the errors to be removed and bolded corrections.

I was born in Korea and I might die in Norway.
I also mightmight also die in Saudi Arabia, USA andor Japan.
It doesn't matter where we live.
Even though we are living in different countries, being different ages, having different apperenceappearance, different favorite singer as well. (This sentence sounds unfinished. I suggest adding another sentence to emphasize the main point you are trying to make here).

But If we are friends, and getting close, we might be find common somethingsomething in common.
I want to be your friend.
Although we're far apart, but also this site ishas connected with us.
I want to hear what you said. I want to talk about memyself.
You never know, we might see each other.
You know What? It's a small world.
PlesePlease Don't say four-letter words. People allare weak.

Hopefully this helps. Good luck! :)
OP wooyong 1 / 2  
Mar 27, 2011   #3
Thank you, jco19. It really helped a lot. You maked me excting!
EF_Kevin 8 / 13052  
Mar 28, 2011   #4
"I was born in Korea and might die in Norway."

Wow, intriguing title. I just wanted to mention that it is even more powerful if it is shorter:
Born in Korea, Might Die in Norway.

Very, very cool title!!

I also might die in Saudi Arabia, USA and Japan.

Interesting. "And"??? Maybe you mean "Or"

It doesn't matter where we live.

In the Tao Te Ching, it says you can see the whole world without leaving home.

I want to be your friend.

Awesome, powerful line here.

I like your style!
I do not like the last line. It seems so disconnected and irrelevant. Also, I want to be able to use four letter words!

:-) you are great...


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