felixtobi 2 / 5 Jan 7, 2022 #1Slave to my Mirrorby Felix OlowokereAm I a slave to my mirror?Every night I stareAnd see a man far, yet so nearHaunted scenes in my headDrawn to it, can't comprehendStories that I heardMade me very scaredhaunting dreamsand united vampirescrazy sceneslike a man on fireAm I a slave to my mirror?or I'm just scared of the unknown?
Holt Educational Consultant - / 14,835 4783 Jan 8, 2022 #2The title you have provided for the poem is interesting and intriguing. It calls to mind an inner turmoil related to perhaps, a personal mental health struggle. The poem could use further development in terms of stanzas. The poem lacks poetic imagery in terms of development. There is no clear connection between the mirror and the memories of images. Markings on the facial features could be used to trigger thoughts. Imagined ravages could be dealt with through an introspective examination of the reflection of the man. Afterall, the man is seeing his demons within. There should, in my opinion, be at least 4 stanzas in this presentation that covers mirror representation, markings of a slave, and fear of the unknown, what the reality of the mirror representation is, all better represented by an inner analysis of oneself through the chosen themes.
