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What do you think, Life Poem - Trying a new style



aguafria22 5 / 17  
Dec 10, 2009   #1
Trying a new style here...

Life

Tired.

Confused.

Lost.

Found.

For now.

Overload.

Monotony.

Change.

When.

Now.

Infinity.

Love.

Hate.

Perspective.

Subjective.

Seconds.

Decades.

Is it worth it?

Is what worth it?

EF_Susan - / 2310  
Dec 10, 2009   #2
I really like this! You might add a little drama by adding a question mark after the word "when". At the end, it seems like the person whose life it was, became senile, asking, "Is WHAT worth it?" Nice job!

:)
EF_Kevin 8 / 13052  
Dec 12, 2009   #3
Something important about this style is that it causes the reader to move quickly downward in a vertical line, and the shape taken by the line forme by the right side of the lines is significant. It has a particular effect. In that way, this kind of poem has an important visual aspect.
NonSequitur 3 / 15  
Dec 12, 2009   #4
I like it. But personally, I feel like this style of poetry does not give the reader enough 'meat' (if you will) to interpret.

I do love the last line though. Very clever. :)


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