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Becoming a diabetic nurse: explanation of educational goals for a scholarship app.



tulalipangel 1 / 2  
Jun 18, 2010   #1
Hi! I am applying for a scholarship and I have not done this in ten years so I need some assistance. I need to explain my educational goals. Here is my rough draft:

To: LASCO
From: Angelica Paquin

Greetings! My name is Angelica Paquin, and I am a mother of three talented and intelligent children. My purpose for returning to school is to recapture a dream that I once had about ten years ago. As I was graduating from high school in the year 2000, my future appeared very bright. I was the valedictorian of all graduating American Indian students in Washington State that year, a member of honor society, a participant in several competitive internships, and the recipient of a full academic scholarship to the University of Washington. However, everything did not play out the way I had imagined it. I fell in love, and I became pregnant, and I dropped out of school with the intention of returning as soon as possible. Well, I did not return to school until this year.

I am glad that I have had a chance to experience life before I stepped back into a classroom because I am sure about what I want to become and that is a registered nurse! I have been working with the public for the last 13 years, and I care about people. However, this is not the only reason. My dad is a diabetic, and I have witnessed his health deteriorate before my eyes for the last 15 years. My father has lost a leg and five fingers to diabetes, and I wished that I had the knowledge and tools to help him fight this disease. Now, I intend to gain the skills necessary to assist my father and other diabetics in their struggle.

I not only want to become a registered nurse, but I want to become a diabetic nurse. I plan to complete the nursing program offered at TCC, and transfer to the University of Washington-Tacoma. At the UW-Tacoma, I plan to enter their accelerated RN to BSN program, so I can obtain my bachelors degree in nursing. Then, I would like to continue my education and become a specialized diabetic nurse. I have a long road ahead, but I know I can do it!

I have overcome many obstacles in my life so far, from being single a mother to caring for a sick parent to keeping a roof over my family's head. Furthering my education is not an obstacle for me because I see it as a pathway to a new beginning. Learning new information is a passion of mine, and I want to learn as much as I can. This scholarship will help me gain intelligence, a degree, and a career. With this scholarship, I will accomplish my dream.

Exact instructions: Please include a cover letter that explains a little about your educational goals.

McGregor10 4 / 20  
Jun 18, 2010   #2
Honestly, I can't think of anything that could be improved. This is very well written! Yours goals are clearly defined and you have used your experiences as a single mother, a caretaker, and a provider to demonstrate to the readers your ability to overcome any obstacles that life may present you with. As a type 1 diabetic myself, I applaud your aspirations to become a specialized diabetes nurse. Good luck!
EF_Kevin 8 / 13053  
Jun 19, 2010   #3
My purpose for returning to school is to recapture a dream that I once had in high school. about ten years ago. As I was graduating from high school i in 2000, my future appeared very bright. I was the ...

I fell in love, and became pregnant, and dropped out of school with the intention of returning as soon as possible. Well, I did not return to school until this year.

I am glad that I have had a chance to experience life before I stepped back into a classroom, because I am ...

Excellent enthusiasm, the writing is great.. i guess if it was my essay I would add some discussion of intellectual topics in the field of diabetic nursing. Show that you are keeping up with the discourse in the field. You'll have to do some research and maybe read some articles and see what kind of national organization exists for diabetic nurses, etc... professional journals? Read some articles and show off your knowledge.

Also, congratulations!


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