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|KGSP undergraduate Chemical and Biomolecular Engineering
2 - Okay. There is a problem from the very start of your essay. The opening statement is an exaggeration. The...
Scholarshipdomevel - Jul 7, 2020 / Holt - 2 days ago
|3 examples of how to use knowledge and skills + Possible constrains - Master of Commerce AAS
3 - Do not waste character count by counting out your discussion topics. Simply start the discussion. The 3-4 paragraph format...
Scholarshipnabhila - Jun 29, 2020 / Holt - Jul 4, 2020
|AAS - Master of Data Science & Master of Computing
Scholarshiprabka - Jun 28, 2020 / rabka - Jun 30, 2020
|(AAS) I choose this institution because there is an expert with similar research object
4 - Dear Holt and the moderator, thank you very much for your feedbacks! I will try to rewrite my essay...
Scholarshipphenylpropanoid - Jun 29, 2020 / phenylpropanoid - Jun 30, 2020
|Supporting Statement for Applying Australia Awards Scholarship as freshgraduate bachelor's degree
Scholarshipelpsy - Jun 23, 2020 / elpsy - Jun 30, 2020
|How will the proposed study in cybersecurity contribute to my career as a software engineer?
2 - You should not have included the discussion about Australia's position in the world in regards to their cybersecurity expertise....
Scholarshipdiwangkoro - Jun 29, 2020 / Holt - Jun 29, 2020
|Sugarcane factory: Why proposed this course and institution
5 - @Holt, thank you very much for the suggestions, very useful. I will try my best to revise my essay....
Scholarshipliyamu - Jun 28, 2020 / liyamu - Jun 29, 2020
|[AAS] Explaining study choice essay
5 - Hi, I think you can sharpen your essay by being very specific on which part of the course can...
Scholarshipjuliandika - Jun 22, 2020 / nabhila - Jun 29, 2020
|WHY DID YOU CHOOSE YOUR PROPOSED COURSE AND INSTITUTION? - AAS (MASTER OF COMMERCE)
4 - The first paragraph sounds more like you are just repeating known information about the course curriculum. It could even...
Scholarshipnabhila - Jun 28, 2020 / Holt - Jun 29, 2020
|STUDY CONTRIBUTION TO MY CAREER - a stepping stone for small scale industries (SSI)
2 - @nabhila Hi Nabhila, I must say that I am impressed by your choice of words. I think your first...
Scholarshipnabhila - Jun 28, 2020 / ros4nna - Jun 28, 2020
|Human Resource Management - Why this course choice in this vocational education institution?
3 - @Holt Thank you so much for the quick response, Holt. You're a big help! I will revise my statement....
Scholarshipros4nna - Jun 27, 2020 / ros4nna - Jun 28, 2020
|AAS - Masters in Development Studies - University of Melbourne
ScholarshipAGM1987 - Jun 27, 2020 / Holt - Jun 28, 2020
|PERSONAL STATEMENT FOR THE MASTER'S GKS SCHOLARSHIP 2021 IN INTERNATIONAL RELATIONS
5 - This essay sounds more like you are applying for citizenship to Korea rather than applying for a scholarship. The...
Scholarshipgabrielasantos0 - Jun 15, 2020 / Holt - Jun 27, 2020
|Applying to AAS selection - studying in Australia's top university and career impact
5 - Hi, This essay is relevant with the facts that the question is asking about. But, it is better...
Scholarshipsiwbatkrg - Jun 22, 2020 / Julia77 - Jun 25, 2020
|KGSP Media and Communication application; why this program, your background, experiences, skills
3 - oh thank you so much for the suggestions, it's really helpful. I'll back after fixing this text ^^...
Scholarshipmyhuyen2222 - Jun 24, 2020 / myhuyen2222 - Jun 25, 2020
|AAS - Why MSc degree in Project management at Queensland University of Technology choice?
3 - Hello, In my point of view, the essay didn't hit the main points that the question is asking....
Scholarshipzozoloi - Jun 23, 2020 / Julia77 - Jun 25, 2020
|Changing the traditional business management system (AAS)
3 - Dear Holt, Thank you very much indeed for your helpful feedback. You can really point out the key...
ScholarshipJulia77 - Jun 24, 2020 / Julia77 - Jun 25, 2020
|Doctor's degree. AAS 2020 ESSAY How will the proposed study contribute to your career
Scholarshipnurk4m1lah - Jun 21, 2020 / nurk4m1lah - Jun 23, 2020
|Ee-learning system - contributed to solving a challenge and to implementing change or reform
2 - It is very comprehensive example of the change you have worked on. I think that it will be helpful...
Scholarshiprareangon - Jun 23, 2020 / zozoloi - Jun 23, 2020
|Changing world - Why did you choose your proposed course and institution*?
6 - @zozolois I think you can answer this essay on another question. If every statement of each question were incorporated,...
Scholarshipzozoloi - Jun 22, 2020 / elpsy - Jun 23, 2020
|Regionalism and human development - Why do you choose your courses or University
2 - Replace "at a diplomatic mission" with the actual name of the mission in your final copy. That will give...
ScholarshipMichaelglowz - Jun 23, 2020 / Holt - Jun 23, 2020
|AAS- Choice of Course and Institutions-- Digital Law Course
2 - Bring the last paragraph up, creating a new first paragraph, then move onto the current first paragraph (now the...
Scholarshipranuarga - Jun 23, 2020 / Holt - Jun 23, 2020
|Practical examples on how will I use my knowledge and skills and list of constrainsts- AAS
4 - @rijumaharjan2052 I think you also have to explain how you will overcome the challenges / constraints...
Scholarshiprijumaharjan2052 - Jun 21, 2020 / ranuarga - Jun 23, 2020
|AAS 2020 : how the scholarship helps me to be more global-minded?
3 - @apk28 I think yo need to go into more details. Better follow the pattern: 1. what your firm needs...
Scholarshipapk28 - Jun 19, 2020 / ranuarga - Jun 23, 2020
|Essay question (why did you choose the course and institutions? Business ecosystem.
3 - In in my opinion I think you should give more clear explanation why you choose the two institutions. The...
Scholarshipsatriosadewo - Jun 22, 2020 / juliandika - Jun 22, 2020
|AAS - answering the question about a challenge and change implementation. Scholarship essay
3 - @She1194 AAS has prioritize some field for scholarships and focus mostly on national issues, public issues rather than personal...
ScholarshipShe1194 - Jun 17, 2020 / rijumaharjan2052 - Jun 17, 2020
|General PhD scholarship motivation letter
2 - The first 2 sections of your essay are not really significant to this PhD motivation letter. As a scholarship...
ScholarshipNeemah - Jun 16, 2020 / Holt - Jun 17, 2020
|This scholarship could contribute to my expertise in the field, to provide better human resources
2 - You should be considering the failures of the current human resources of your company. Explain what these problems are...
ScholarshipDInda Amalia - Jun 15, 2020 / Holt - Jun 15, 2020
|Public Health - Why did you choose the course and the institution? For Australian Award Scholarship
3 - You have to revise your essay. The AAS only allows for 2000 characters per essay. You have 2418 with...
Scholarshiprijumaharjan2052 - Jun 12, 2020 / Holt - Jun 13, 2020
|IMAESC- Motivation letter Erasmus Mundos Scholarship - Adult Education for Social Change
2 - Your motivation letter is overly dramatic. It is also way too long. You have to shorten the letter because...
Scholarshipdannccarranzai26 - Jun 9, 2020 / Holt - Jun 10, 2020
|AAS - Practical Examples of using the knowledge, skills and connections you'll gain from scholarship
Scholarshipdandheedge - Jun 8, 2020 / dandheedge - Jun 9, 2020
|International relations - Why did you choose your proposed course and institution? (AAS 2019)
ScholarshipSSari - Jun 3, 2020 / norman18 - Jun 8, 2020
|Malaria elimination target. Essay for AAS - Why did you choose your proposed course and institution?
5 - Thank you @dbooker, This is my first experience writing an ASS application and I think I still need...
Scholarshipnorman18 - Jun 6, 2020 / norman18 - Jun 8, 2020
|Contribution to Human Resource Development Needs
Scholarshippahlevireza - Jun 8, 2020 / Holt - Jun 8, 2020
|Australia Awards Essay 1: Why did you choose your proposed course and institution? To fill the gap.
2 - Your essay does not offer a clear reason for choosing the course. Be sure to use one specific masters...
Scholarshipprw - Jun 7, 2020 / Holt - Jun 8, 2020
|KGSP - G Personal Statement Psychology; pursuing master's degree
3 - @holt Yes I am applying thru university track. Thank you for your advices. I'll try to rewrite a new...
Scholarshipbrigittee01 - Jun 6, 2020 / brigittee01 - Jun 7, 2020
|Scholarship Essay for Australia Awards - INTRODUCING CITIZEN-CENTERED COURT SERVICES IN MONGOLIA
2 - You have to rewrite the whole essay. You only have 2000 characters to work with in this presentation. You...
ScholarshipKhosoo09 - Jun 7, 2020 / Holt - Jun 7, 2020
|Scholarship Essay for Australia Awards Q.2) How will the proposed study contribute to your career?
3 - I think you should separate you essay into paragraphs because it is more catchy to reviewers and also, write...
ScholarshipLunn Htar Moe - May 20, 2020 / Khosoo09 - Jun 7, 2020
|Court development - Scholarship Essay for Australia Awards on Career contribution
ScholarshipKhosoo09 - Jun 1, 2020 / Khosoo09 - Jun 7, 2020
|SUPPORTING STATEMENT - FOR AUSTRALIA AWARDS SCHOLARSHIP APPLICATION - Mas. of Bus. Admin Maritime
2 - You should be focusing on developing your content based on the following parts of your current essay: -...
ScholarshipWesleyAbegul - Jun 3, 2020 / Holt - Jun 4, 2020
|Master of Digital Media at Victoria University - AAS - Why did you choose your proposed course
Scholarshipdandheedge - May 29, 2020 / dandheedge - Jun 1, 2020
|Horns of Ethical Dilemma, Choosing between Friendship or Abiding to the school code of conduct.
3 - @Holt Thank you so much for your contribution. I really appreciate. I'll make the corrections as soon as possible....
Scholarshipobinnasvg - May 30, 2020 / obinnasvg - May 31, 2020
|Australia Awards Scholarship - Master of Information Technology in Cyber Security
4 - @syifabrina hi, I read your essay several times and there is 1 grammar point that makes me feel confused....
Scholarshipsyifabrina - May 20, 2020 / Khangquynh257 - May 30, 2020
|My entry to Ivy Panda Essay Writing Scholarship -is studying abroad really worth it
4 - Corrections for grammar, punctuation and spelling: 1. ... get out from of our comfort zone 2. ... den does...
ScholarshipLittledrunkgirl - May 28, 2020 / syifabrina - May 30, 2020
|AAS essay for Business Analytics course: why choose the course and institution, career contribution
2 - The 400 word allotment of this essay should be used to explain how each course at each university will...
Scholarshipvnd93 - May 24, 2020 / Holt - May 24, 2020
|Scholarship Essay for Australia Awards 1. Explaining University of Melbourne choice
3 - Dear, @Holt Thank you for your kind feedback, I will correct my essay according to your suggestion....
ScholarshipKhishig - May 24, 2020 / Khishig - May 24, 2020
|Kindly review my Essay for AAS in Commercial law in Melbourne Law School
3 - Dear, @Holt Thank you for your review, I will correct my essay according to your suggestion and look...
ScholarshipKhishig - May 23, 2020 / Khishig - May 23, 2020
|Master of Urban and Regional Planning - why I chose my proposed course and institution
ScholarshipEastman - May 20, 2020 / Eastman - May 21, 2020
|Some people think that children perform better in a single-sex school compared to a mixed school.
2 - Your prompt restatement is too short and does not properly respond to the given discussion question. You need to...
ScholarshipHanguyen921123 - May 20, 2020 / Holt - May 20, 2020
|KGSP 2020 Undergraduate Personal Statement / Media and communication - why KGSP?
Scholarshipbondareva - May 11, 2020 / bondareva - May 15, 2020
|Assistant Principle - Scholarship Essay for Australia Awards How I chose propose course
ScholarshipLunn Htar Moe - May 14, 2020 / Lunn Htar Moe - May 15, 2020
|Proposed study essay for AAS - Water Resource Engineering
4 - @TaraAryal23 thank you so much for the feedback, i will revise my essay again, thanks again and good...
Scholarshiptasslia - May 8, 2020 / tasslia - May 15, 2020
|Magister of Human Rights Law and Policy - AAS (Australia Award Scholarship)
3 - The first paragraph is superfluous. It does not add to the information regarding why you have chosen your proposed...
ScholarshipRafaza - May 14, 2020 / Holt - May 14, 2020
|AAS Master of Computer Science - Proposed course and Institution Essay
4 - @Holt Thank you for the feedback, it's immensely helpful, I'll make the necessary revision based on your suggestions. Yes,...
Scholarshipakmal16 - May 8, 2020 / akmal16 - May 10, 2020
|Career Contribution Essay - For AAS (Pakistan Economy)
Scholarshipkayzee - May 6, 2020 / kayzee - May 9, 2020
|Working and studying time - Write a short essay on something of personal importance to you.
2 - The response does not feel right. Something of importance to you should be a belief system, a personal value,...
Scholarshipkellywee1234 - May 8, 2020 / Holt - May 8, 2020
|AAS -District Program Coordinator role- solving a challenge and to implementing change or reform
ScholarshipTaraAryal23 - May 8, 2020 / Holt - May 8, 2020
|Scholarship essay for AAS - International Sustainable Tourism Management
3 - Hi @ Holt. Thanks for your feedback. It is really helpful. After receiving your input, I decided...
ScholarshipPradausa - May 7, 2020 / Pradausa - May 8, 2020
|Product Design - Why did you choose your proposed course and institution? Scholarship essay for AAS
4 - First Paragraph Updated Product Design that revolved around User-Centered Design, enabled me to think critically towards problem-solving approach...
Scholarshipkayzee - May 3, 2020 / kayzee - May 7, 2020
|MOTIVATION LETTER OUTLINING THE SUITABILITY OF MY CONSIDERATION FOR A SCHOLARSHIP
2 - The motivation letter that you are writing doesn't really come across as impressive. You have a run of the...
Scholarshipobene20 - May 6, 2020 / Holt - May 7, 2020
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