"DESCRIBE YOUR FINANCIAL CHALLENGE" applying for scholarships

Hey guys! I`m applying for scholarships, and I have to write a short essay on the prompt above, "Describe your financial challenge". I don`t know whats going to over due it, or make it sound like a sob story. Can anyone help?? I`ll post a small summary about myself, and what I am thinking of including! Thank you in advanced for any help supplied!

I am an 18 year old single mom, chasing after my dream of being in the medical field as a nurse. Currently -until I get on my feet- my only income is from the state, $385 a month. My mom does not support me financially, hence all of that money goes to items my son needs. Maintaining school full time, and a new baby on my own, is very challenging not only emotionally but financially. I am struggling to stay in school with all my bills adding up. I need as much help as I can in order to stay ahead and continue on a good path and get off of state assistance. I do not want to be another number, depending on welfare.

I am not sure what else to add, or what to take out. Any input?!

maybe you can state something like:

with the help of the scholarship, I will do ...(something) to improve not only the life of my own but also the community...
i guess the school is going to help somebody who can contribute back. maybe you want to show some aspects of that!

I need as much help as I can in order to stay ahead and continue on a good path and get off of state assistance. I do not want to be another number, depending on welfare.

I think you should cut this part and try to write about your passion and your hard-working through difficulties. Do not just only tell them about your bad situation, convince them with your effort and maybe write about your bright future if u would be granted this scholarship.

Hope that my comment is useful for u in someway :)