If it was easy everyone will get it. My personal statement for applying scholarship

My interest began when i played 'the sims'. It is the game which we can build a building and design the interior space by ourselves. Since that time i began to love everything that related to the building especially the interior one.

I conducted a research regarding Malaysia universities that offered interior architecture. After doing some observations, i decide that ucsi is the best university for me. Xxx is a prestigious university that have accreditation from LAM and MQA in their interior architecture degree. I believe that Xxx will give me the opportunity to expand my experience.

I'm worthy for this scholarship because i have a strong persistent. I have good academic record and i got 89 on my average score including all the sucjects and for math and physics i got 96 and 93 respectively.I have always love math and physics because they are full of challenges. I had involved in extracurricular activities such as photography,drawing and gymnastics. Throughout these i increased my skills in leadership by being a leader in my photography team and I also learned to collaborate with others .I advanced my communication skills by joining a debate team during junior highschool

Receiving this scholarship will help me to alleviate my family expenses and to accomplish my goals.

My goals are to work in architectural firm for a year to gain more experience then i will use part of scholarship fund to continue my study to master level and after graduate i want to have my own company.

My essay consists of 254words but it must be 200words. I will really appreciate your help.thankyou :)

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Since that time i began to love everything that is related to the building ...

I conducted a research regarding Malaysia universities that ...
After doing some observations, i decided that ucsi is the best university for me. Xxx is a prestigious university that havehas accreditation from LAM and MQA in their interior architecture degree. I believe that Xxx will give me the opportunity to expand my experience.

I'm worthy is it fine to say that? for this scholarship because ...
... average score including all the sucb jects and for math and physics ...
I have always loved math and physics because ...
... and I also learned to collaborateion with others .
... joining a debate team during junior high school

Receiving this scholarship will help me to alleviate myour family's expenses and to accomplish my goals.

... scholarship fund to continue my study to master's level and after graduateion i want to have my own company.

Your reasons are not adequate I guess, I think you should think about adding some more ideas

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