Electrical engineer, with strong technical background - academic qualifications and study objectives

Dear All,
I need your feedback and inputs regarding my essay as an answer for below question.
Thanks in advance for your reply.

Describe your academic qualifications and study objectives.
And how you plan to apply your studies (up to a maximum of 200 words)

corporate support and career progression

I'm an electrical engineer, with a strong solid technical background which was shown on both academic and professional aspects; I was working in technical position in oil & gas (Halliburton) which proved my technical capabilities as I got the senior position in a very short time solving hard technical issues in a field that wasn't my major study in faculty, meanwhile I was studying for my masters degree where I studied 10 courses then dig deep to select the point of research which is in line with the corporate where I'm working now (Siemens). Apart from my technical academic qualifications, I also achieved several milestones in professional academic qualifications starting from TQM, PMP, IPMA, RMP and CLAC (In progress). All those activities are part of a big roadmap I put in order to be part of the change I want in the world. Being well qualified in everything will support achieving perfection in all positions. I do believe that if I got this fellowship I'll be able to take right decisions based on knowledge I acquired in MBA, which in return will support the corporate I'm working for and expedite my career progression.

Here is a brief corrections

I'm an electrical engineer, with a strong solid technical background ...

I am a Bachelor of Electrical Engineer with good technical foundation laid academically and professionally.

State your grade if possible and build up points on your academic strength

After that, move to your study objectives, be brief and show clearity. outline the objectives of your proposed study

Ahmed, when you speak of your academic qualifications, just mention the course major that you completed. For example, you can say;

I graduated with a degree in electrical engineering that led to my current employment at Haliburton. My collegiate academic training was further enhanced by my workplace experience and additional training in TQM, PMP, IPMA, RMP and CLAC (In progress). Combined, my college education and current training have shown me that I need to strengthen my abilities in XXX in order to further enhance my electrical engineering skills and theoretical knowledge. After completing my studies in XXX at XXX university, I see myself applying my newfound skills and knowledge in the process of XXX in my capacity as XXX at Haliburton.

If you will be interested in following the platform of my example, you will be able to create a concise response that gives the most important data to the reviewer without including unnecessary information. Since you will be submitting other additional documents to the reviewer, it is not necessary to get into too many specifics since your supporting documents will provide the in-depth analysis of your skills and credentials that your application requires.

If you received any honors as a college student, then mention it in this overview just to highlight it in the eyes of the reviewer. If you don't have any, then just say you graduated with a degree. Don't mention your grades in the essay if it is not accompanied by honors. The idea is to impress the reviewer enough through the essay that he will read the rest of your documents and consider your application regardless of your transcript GPA.