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Factors and challenges in my life; find purpose in this world



jdlr22 4 / 2  
Mar 23, 2014   #1
Famous philosopher Ludwig Wittgenstein once said, "The limits of my language mean the limits of my world." Bilingual education was a disadvantage during my childhood. As generic as it may sound, the language barrier is easily the biggest challenge and hurdle of my life,however, I have enjoyed the language barrier before me and used it to learn more about the American culture and myself in a country that offered me a new life.

My dad day in and day out struggled to obtain a permit that allowed me to reside here in the US, once he got it, he took me to live with my aunt to Dallas and he returned to Houston, it was the first time that I separated from my whole family. When I moved here, I knew a few words of English, but I couldn't speak or understand what people said to me. I felt so bad because I couldn't ask in the store for help, I couldn't read warning signs. One day I was walking in the school hallway, when I suddenly heard a teacher asking me to take off my jacket, I understood that she wanted me to unzip it, so I unzip it, she told again to take it off, her class that was also in the hallway stared at me weird. I felt so embarrassed.

During the first days, I came back from school exhausted so that I had to take a rest for a while, stretching myself on the bed. For all the time, I strained every nerve in order to understand what the people were saying and why they were laughing. Constantly having to deal with unspoken rules and new physical surroundings made me feel alienated and tensed. Later on I realized that goals merit hard work if you really want to reach them. I was tired of non-being able to communicate, to show my feelings and thoughts to the others or just simply ask for a pencil in the classroom.

The goal was clear,learn English was the only thing that I had in my mind and in order to achieve it, I needed to study hard and ask for help. So I started asking classmates for help when I struggle with a word or phrase, at first teachers scolded me because they thought that I was just talking to interrupt the class, but later on they knew my case and they became more patient with me. At home stacks of magazines and children's books filled the floor of my room, I read a different magazine every week day and a book during morning weekends. When I watched movies, I turned on the subtitles.

After all that hard work I started understanding others well enough that I started to communicate with people. Finally I would like to say that I broke the language barrier and that now I can speak English freely. The language transformation was a long process but I did it.

Saqib 4 / 14  
Mar 24, 2014   #2
that helped me to gain

its too informal use well built instead

ripped

Since your trainer is person used the word who

I started going to the gym almost the entire week and do random stuff without any supervision

I went to the gym for almost the entire week and did random stuff without any supervision

or advice

on advice

pound

weight

and also a friend who opened my eyes

leave that phrase or adjust it; the flow is disturbed

He taught me

Also he taught me
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1170  
Mar 24, 2014   #3
all goals must have a plan in order to achieve them because you can't reach something without knowing what you are going to do.

Yes, agreed, agreed
For me, this is a good essay to read.

When I was 8 years old my family and I went to visit my grandma; she is a farmer and dependent on nature.

You don't need to put a semicolon between an independent clause and a dependent clause; use a comma instead

I started researching about the causes of the drought and what we can do to prevent them, (stop here)W hen I knew what caused it (a comma here) I ran towards my grandma and I told her what I learned.Then she smiled and hugged me.

When I moved here (a comma here) I knew a few words of English

Punctuation marks show the reader how the words would sound if they were spoken
dumi 1 / 6793  
Mar 24, 2014   #4
Throughout my life I've always tried to find my purpose in this world, since a child I used to ask myself how I could leave a legacy, something that has an effect in the world.

I like if you had two sentences for this :)
Throughout my life I've always tried to find my purpose in this world. Since my childhood, I used to ask myself how I could leave a legacy, something that has a positive impact on the world.

I was interested in something meaningful and beneficial, but I didn't have a goal to persuade. pursue.

pursue means "follow or chase (someone or something)"
persuade means "induce (someone) to do something through reasoning or argument"
Pahan 1 / 1824  
Mar 24, 2014   #5
When I was 8 years old my family and I went to visited my grandma (tell where- which country?.; sheisShe was into farming and very independent in naturea farmer and dependent on nature. She was sad because a drought had ruined all the crops.without any crops she could not be ableShe was struggling to pay her utilities bills without the crop that she used to sell. didn't know how to achieve it.
andial 21 / 48  
Mar 24, 2014   #6
Throughout my life I've always tried to find my purpose in this world, since a child I used to ask myself how I could leave a legacy

the sentence above is too general, try to be more spesific even if it is the first sentence in the introductory

since childhood a child(comma here )I used to ask myself how
Saqib 4 / 14  
Mar 26, 2014   #7
Post the original essay back. Nobody is going to make fun of you, we all make mistakes. But what matters is that we learn from those mistakes, as well as the mistakes from others.


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