It sounds too good to be true. This is a problem.
I intend to develop and broaden my various skills by participating in clubs including, but not limited to the school newspaper, a theatre troupe, a community service organization, the math club, and the dance club.
First, you say you are doing this to broaden your skills rather than to contribute to the university. Second, and much more important, it raises the question of when you plan to actually study. I suppose you could join all these clubs and participate in each of them fully and still get good marks, but it seems to me as if you simply haven't thought through the time requirements involved, or else are making up a list that you think will be impressive without intending to follow through.
For community service, in addition to giving back to the local area around my college, I am interested in going on a service trip to help families in less fortunate areas of the world, such as Africa and parts of China, survive their economic hardships.
Actually, you might want to focus more on the "local area," thing, given your target audience. And why Africa and China? And what exactly do you intend to do to help out the people there?
Overall, you need to be more specific when discussing your plans, providing concrete details that show that you have really thought your answer through.