Making a difference in our community working at McDonalds

hi this is a employee scholarship program at Mcdonalds that has to be a 100-word essay about how you are making difference on the job at school or in the community. your feedback and comments are very important. thank you for reading.

Working at McDonalds has allowed me to make a difference by supporting charities and organizations. Ronald McDonald House Charities (RMJC) Canada is our community commitment that is important to our customers. It provides sick children with their families that they need the most. I have played an active role in our local community such as McHappy Day, a national fundraiser. One of the things that I do is smile and promotes Happy Meals to customers because ten cents from every Happy Meal sold goes to RMJC Canada. Where smiles are always free, it gives us a desire to make customers happy.

Hello, Jenny)
Well, your essay is not very distinct( I understand that to make a good answer in 100 word limit is quite hellish, never tried myself) , try adding more personal strokes, try to show what makes you different from others, maybe, your special approach, mindset, because everyone who works at fundraisers smile and promote.



just write RMJC, don't waste words on full titles, anyway the McDonald's guys will understand


well this is too obvious, I mean don't waste words on sentences like this, dig immediately into more personal stuff.

I noticed that you are writing more facts than what you personally did. You need to mention more things you have done to the mac donalds working community.

You need to make the essay more profound,let them get a feeling of desire to help the needy. Not just listing things that has happened. Also reread you work, there are a few grammatical errors.