Every morning, as I sit in class, I am flooded by the three reoccurring themes of stress: sleep, depression and eating
hello,, i think you should use the parallel words from the italic sentence. allow me to rewrite your statement;
Every morning, as I sit in class, I am flooded by the three reoccurring themes of stress: sleeping, depressing and eating
struck strucks me that students in my generation lack of the knowledge and experience required to develop effective stress coping mechanisms.
in the last paragraph, i think you should use simple past
Shortly after I got elected for Grade Representative, I proceeded to use the Student Council platform to co-establish our school's first ever Mental Health committee. The purpose of this committee
iswas to raise awareness within our school and de-stigmatize Mental Health. As of fall 2014, we arewere designing and spreading pamphlets that provideprovided essential information to students regarding Mental illnesses, how to cope with them and specific helplines. We expect students to proactively seek out help for their problems and implement effective coping mechanisms into their life; reducing stress one step at a time.