Chevening is looking for individuals who will be future leaders or influencers in their home countries. Explain how you meet this requirement, using clear examples of your own leadership and influencing skills to support your answer
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I was one of the leader at high school student council and a director in the theater club. The result of my influence when in student council are we become the more active organisation than before. Also, we won as the best director and best performance in a district theater competition which I am in charge.
After finished my undergraduate degree, I worked at a retail company. My responsibilities are to make sure that employees actively delivered best service quality both internal and external.I am in charge for 72 store as store fokus to meet the required target with service excellent. To achieve it, company trust me to oversee 27 employee who report directly to me. At first, they were a staff at the store, after one year trained and mentored with me, 19 of them become the store leader.
On 2017, I decided to contribute to community and joined with ROLE Foundation. I was the capacity builder who responsible to coordinate, communicate and search funding for the foundation. When work there, we conduct a few charity event. One of this charity event are to fund the Baliwise, women empowerment program. This program focus on helping marginalised women to get educated and decent job, so they can gave appropriate living for their family.
Even after not worked at the retail company and ROLE Foundation anymore, the employee I trained and student I met keep in contact with me and sometime asked suggestion or just shared story. At least, 60% of them have a better job now.
Please help me check my essay.
English is not my first language if you can more details it would really great. Thank you for your help.
The result of my influence on students
I was one of the leader at high school student council and a director in the theater club. The result of my influence when in student council are we become the more active organisation than before. Also, we won as the best director and best performance in a district theater competition which I am in charge.
After finished my undergraduate degree, I worked at a retail company. My responsibilities are to make sure that employees actively delivered best service quality both internal and external.I am in charge for 72 store as store fokus to meet the required target with service excellent. To achieve it, company trust me to oversee 27 employee who report directly to me. At first, they were a staff at the store, after one year trained and mentored with me, 19 of them become the store leader.
On 2017, I decided to contribute to community and joined with ROLE Foundation. I was the capacity builder who responsible to coordinate, communicate and search funding for the foundation. When work there, we conduct a few charity event. One of this charity event are to fund the Baliwise, women empowerment program. This program focus on helping marginalised women to get educated and decent job, so they can gave appropriate living for their family.
Even after not worked at the retail company and ROLE Foundation anymore, the employee I trained and student I met keep in contact with me and sometime asked suggestion or just shared story. At least, 60% of them have a better job now.