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What is one value you have that cannot be compromised?

phongbilly 2 / 4 1  
Aug 4, 2017   #1

Albert Einstein once said "I have no particular talent. I am merely inquisitive."
If I had to talk about one trait of my personality that cannot be compromised, I would indubitably choose my inquistiveness, my eagerness to discover more about this amazing world.

I have always told myself that the sky is not the limit, and it is needless to say that there are many things for me to discover. Questions like "What is beyond space?", "How do we solve most pressing world's problem?", and "What are us human beings?" always pop up in my head and sometimes even keep me awake at night trying to figure out the answers. I would not bother to stay up late just to read articles teaching how to code, set up a website, or articles about World War II airforces. Not only did I read to gain my knowledge but I also tried to learn new skills. I was once curious about how many people could solve the Rubik's cube so fast, so I got myself a Rubik's cube and learn to solve it as fast as I could. In the end, I managed to solve in just 15 seconds after two months of practicing, which made me very proud.

If you asked me "Why do you have to dig in all of those information, doesn't it make you tired?" I would tell you that I am not tired at all, I am proud of the attribute that helps me understand our world better.

I strongly believe that my inquisitiveness will never be compromised. I believe that with my inquisitiveness, I won't have have any problem with my studying. I believe that my inquisitiveness will help me acquire more information, analyze it and thus broaden my intellectual luggage.

What else should I provide with this topic? What should I eliminate? The word limit is 300 and I have already got 295.

Katthew Kim 6 / 12 6  
Aug 4, 2017   #2
I think this essay is pretty well organized. But if I should put some comments about your essay, my suggestion is to align the ending conclusion with the main content. You want to emphasize the fact that your inquisitiveness will help you acquire more information, analyze it, and thus broaden your intellectual luggage. I think main contents are too blurred so you had better describe one specific example to show how your inquisitiveness benefited you so much. I think this approach will attract the reader's attention.

Ashkan123 12 / 33 2  
Aug 4, 2017   #3
Your essay looks good to me.However the third paragraph is too short. As far as I know,your essay should have five paragraphs and each paragraph should contain at least five sentences.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 11,562 3753  
Aug 4, 2017   #4
Ngo, your inquisitiveness is not a topic that I feel is correct for this discussion. The question posed is not one of interest or character trait but rather one of a moral compass. What is your moral belief about something? Why do you believe that? In an instance when you will be asked to compromise say, your principles about cheating during an exam, would you do it? Why or why not? A sense of inquisitiveness is not something that is compromised each person is inquisitive and it often leads him into certain situations, but nobody ever asks you to compromise that character trait. In fact, it is encouraged in people because it is a learning experience that helps one develop a moral compass. Which is the whole point of this essay. Think of your moral compass and what you would be willing to compromise. Make a list. From that list, is there a sense of decency that you feel you cannot violate for some reason? If you find the answer to that question, then you have found something of value to you that cannot be compromised.
Ashkan123 12 / 33 2  
Aug 4, 2017   #5

Thanks for your advice.I was trying to write one paragraph each time so I can get benefit of of grammar correction since it is easier to edit 1 paragraph rather than whole essay. But from now on, I will upload whole essay together.

Thanks again

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