Brain to learn - Should students work part time? No they shouldn't.

thanks everyone edit this presentation. I want to say about 5 minutes and informal!
We can see several students who work while studying at school. There are several reasons for doing so. Many are forced to find a job either to fund their education or to help their families. On the other hand, there are several students who are willing to work so as to gain experience. But, in the fact it doesn't like they think! In my opinion student shouldn't take a part-time job. Today, I want to talk 3 main reasons:

Firstly, there isn't enough time for self-study and to complete homework.
When you take a part-time job you must spend time to do it. The first, you think the part-time job will not waste much time, or you can make equal time between studies and work. However, you are attending the class daily on the morning or the afternoon and you have only remaining time to do your work. So, you don't have time to self-study or do exercise. How many students can make equal their time when they take a part-time work? In fact, at the college have a lot of students had fail in their final exams and must be retention. You can earn a little money, but you must be grant from their parents to retention (học lấi). Because of that reason, take a part-time job is no use.

Secondly, You will not concentrate your brain to learn.
"Our brain is a sponge, but just like any sponge oversaturated very fast". When you try your best to do overtime your brain will be distracted. After you complete your work and go home, you will feel exhausted, its reasons make your brain doesn't absorb knowledge when teacher explain a lesson in the next morning. Consequently, you are hard to concentrate on doing your responsibilities as a student.

You should focus on doing a good job than to do many things at once. If you do too much work you will get bad result for them. You should remember that: at the university the most important work of student is learning! Now, you should concentrate on accumulating important knowledge, it's necessary to help you find a good job and high salary in the future.

Thirdly, you may encountered many social evils.
When start take a part-time job, You always believe you can earn money or collect experiences. However, have you ever thought about threats of part-time jobs?

When you take a part-time, you might be deceived by the advertisement of part-time jobs. It's the dangerous part when finding or working part-time jobs. Many students lost deposits, identification, student card or wage.

In many case, students are caught up in rumors. Just rumors but it has bad effect of them. It makes them have trouble with family, friend, acquaintance and more than worst make them lost enthusiasm for learning.

Moreover, some students are embroiled in the social evils such as: smuggling drug addiction, prostitution, gambling...etc. That is reasons explain why they are delinquent and become an offender. Even, some of them were ending their life in prison.

In addition, part-time maybe give students some disadvantage such as: Sleep deprivation, poor memory, weight loss. That reasons they have to cramming and get bad grades.

Consequently, all of us should think twice before taking part- time jobs.
Don't lose your future just because of part-time jobs!

Hello, Your speech is good but could use some brush up on grammar. First, give a brief synopsis of what you will discuss, it is very unclear what your attention opening statement is or what you mean. For instance, Say something like "To what advantage does working and going to school play in the life of a college student? Studies have shown that freshman who work part-time are 75% less likely to graduate on time". Since you have 5 mins, you will have to make it brief and straight forward; I also didn't understand who the seven students were.

Also Firstly, sounds off. If it pleases you, keep it. However I would suggest, "I believe in regards to time management, inability to focus and the perils of illegal activity, working part-time while being attending school is a bad decision...In regards to time management, students who work part-time...a great example of this can be seen..."

Your last argument is not clear either, try and nail it so that it is clear yet concise. I don't see a good reason why working part-time can make you prone to illegal activity. So try and sell your point a little more. Work on the grammar as well, a lot of words are missing the plural sense like student. Hope this helps...good luck.

Thank you so much!

Even this is for a speech (that's what indicated and I assume that's the purpose of this writing), it' s good for you to introduce the topic to the listeners. Your topic is about whether it is good for the students to work part time while they are studying. So, start your speech with this introduction and then come to reasoning. You need to assume that listener does nothing about your topic and it is your duty to introduce it to the reader.