hello guys，
My english professor had left me one task of writing a paragraph describing the difference between the undergraduate life and graduate life. and i have written some words but i need your help to improve!
thank you very much for your advices.
the difference between my undergraduate life and graduate life
Life is the process of pursuing progress constantly. Undergraduate life and graduate life are both of great importance for me. When I look back my life with more rational and mature view, I find life in my graduate is very different from that during undergraduate, which mostly reflects on the following aspects. Firstly, relationship with both classmates and teachers changes, now we are more like colleges and partners, we need to play teamwork with each other. Secondly, now we begin to learn what we are really interested in, the teachers incline to teach us both methods and knowledge providing us considerable amount of material in relative fields to read out of classes. Thirdly I have my own tutor. This means a lot for me. Even though I am not together with my tutor in space, He teaches me how to learn, deal with difficulties and regulate my daily life. I benefit greatly from what he told me and appreciate all that he has done for me.
... are both of great importance to me. When I look back on my life with a more rational and mature view, I find life in my graduate studies is very different (....) on the following aspects: Firstly, relationships with both classmates and teachers have changed , now we are more like colleagues and partners, we need to play teamwork with each other (maybe you mean work together?) . Secondly, now we that we are beginning to learn what we are really interested in, the teachers are inclined to teach us both (...) fields to read out of class . Third I have my own tutor. This means a lot to me. Even though I am not together with my tutor in space (not sure whta you mean?) , He teaches me ...
I hope I could be of some help!
Great corrections, Michelin. Huoer, I see that Michelin aded the word "studies" to one part. I was thinking that it could be fixed this way:
...life in my graduate years is very different from that during my undergraduate years, which mostly reflects on the following aspects. Firstly, ...
Either way is fine, but it seems incomplete the way you had it.
This needs a semi-colon:
Firstly, relationships with both classmates and teachers changes; now we are more like colleges and partners, we need to play teamwork with each other.
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