I am applying for University of Washington in about ten days. I have a good personal statement, but I feel that the "Academic History" section is weak. Please provide me with corrections, comments, and feel free to criticize!
Ever since I was a high school student in Yemen, I have made learning my first priority. However, the low quality of education in Yemen was a real barrier for my goal. After I finished high school there, I started thinking of studying abroad. My father suggested that I travel to the United States, the country he got his Masters and PhD from. Once I started my first quarter in the US at Tacoma Community College (TCC), I noticed the huge difference in the quality of education. For the first time in my life, I got the opportunity to demonstrate the theories and concepts of physics in a technical lab. Despite the weakness that I had in my English skills, I did really well in my classes.
While TCC did provide me a great education, they did not have the resources I required to take that next step in my quest. I realized that the goal of TCC was to strengthen the foundation of their students and prepare them for a four year university, and they did outstanding job, but I was looking for more than that. I can not wait to transfer to University of Washington (UW) to take advantage of their ultimate resources, work besides their smart professors and students, and to be exposed to a wider curriculum.
Ever since I was a high school student in Yemen, I have made learning my first priority. However, the low quality of education in Yemen was a real barrier for my goal. After I finished high school there, I started thinking of studying abroad. My father suggested that I travel to the United States, the country he got his Masters and PhD from. Once I started my first quarter in the US at Tacoma Community College (TCC), I noticed the huge difference in the quality of education. For the first time in my life, I got the opportunity to demonstrate the theories and concepts of physics in a technical lab. Despite the weakness that I had in my English skills, I did really well in my classes.
While TCC did provide me a great education, they did not have the resources I required to take that next step in my quest. I realized that the goal of TCC was to strengthen the foundation of their students and prepare them for a four year university, and they did outstanding job, but I was looking for more than that. I can not wait to transfer to University of Washington (UW) to take advantage of their ultimate resources, work besides their smart professors and students, and to be exposed to a wider curriculum.