"You cannot achieve success without failure." UBC personal profile

Hello, I am currently writing the UBC Personal Profile. This is one of the questions I received:

Tell us about who you are. How would your family, friends, and/or members of your community describe you? If possible, please include something about yourself that you are most proud of and why. (maximum 250 words)

This is my take on the question. Any feedback is welcome! Thanks so much!

my failure teached me something

My calculus teacher once told me, "You cannot achieve success without failure." Math is a subject that I thought to be much more exuberant compared to my other courses. From my past school years, the reflection of my grades made it that much more exciting when partaking in calculus class. I didn't think much of it, calculus was like any one of my other past math classes. Following my past rituals, I decided not to complete most of the assigned homework but rather, study the day before the test. With a pencil tightly gripped, I opened the first ever calculus test and was faced with utter despair. As one can expect, it did not end well. Getting a C probably wasn't the end of the world, but it was something I was not fond of seeing. I didn't study, and I blindly went into a test and got what I deserved. I realized the importance of my grades and the reason I was at school. With this, I chose to work harder. In class, I became fascinated by how mathematics worked as my teacher went over the different proofs of different equations. My next text presented me with a well above average grade I was confident in achieving. Had I not failed, I would have never truly understood the importance of hard work. After all, hard work pays off.

Jason, you only responded to the part of the prompt that asks about what you are proud of about yourself. You did not respond to the question about how your family, friends, and / or family members would describe you. That part of the essay should be written from the third person point of view. Expect the need to revise your current response in order to make room for the parts that you did not respond to. You can't turn in this statement without a complete response because that would disqualify your application. For your parents part, you can discuss how they see you as a son and what traits of yours they are proud of. For your friends, discuss how they see you as a person who has their back when they are in need of help. As for the community, a reference to your social or civic activities would best respond to this portion. Try to respond to all parts, don't miss out on any portion because you want to offer a complete character response in the essay.