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Prompt: NYU is global, urban, inspired, smart, connected, and bold. What can NYU offer you, and what can you offer NYU? (200-400 words)
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New York University has always stood out as one of the most prestigious, progressive institutions of learning in America. After visiting New York and falling in love with the city, I realize that I want a college experience in an atmosphere different from the rural community I currently call home. Visiting NYU's campus, meeting current students, and experiencing the beating heart of the school, helped me reach the conclusion that New York University is the only place for me. After experiencing so many different aspects of the university, I realize just how much I yearn to attend NYU.
I have visited New York with my entire family, but most recently I experienced the city with just my mom; we were able to explore the areas of the city that aren't tourist hotbeds. The sheer size of the city and the diversity of the community that calls the university home amaze and intrigue me. The bustle and fast-paced action of the city as a whole excite me, but the quaintness of Greenwich Village, SoHo and the other communities that surround NYU remind me of home. I know I can fit in, grow, and give back to NYU and my community here in Alabama.
The opportunities for cultural enrichment and community service are unparalleled at New York University. I am excited about taking advantage of those opportunities, engaging myself in volunteer work, and immersing myself in the social diversity the university has to offer. My life experiences have given me a receptive mind--one that is open to different ideas, cultures, and lifestyles. My intellectual curiosity will bud at NYU, where I can grow with the world-renowned faculty, the bright and interesting students, and the challenging atmosphere.
NYU can offer me a place to develop and I can offer it the needed perspective of a boy from rural Alabama. My relationship will be symbiotic; I will take advantage of the amazing teachers and rigorous courses, but I will offer my unique perspective to the clubs, organizations, and class discussions in exchange. As an open-minded critical thinker, I will be capable of defending my ideas and opinions even in the face of opposition. Most importantly, I can add some southern flavor to NYU.
Prompt: NYU is global, urban, inspired, smart, connected, and bold. What can NYU offer you, and what can you offer NYU? (200-400 words)
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New York University has always stood out as one of the most prestigious, progressive institutions of learning in America. After visiting New York and falling in love with the city, I realize that I want a college experience in an atmosphere different from the rural community I currently call home. Visiting NYU's campus, meeting current students, and experiencing the beating heart of the school, helped me reach the conclusion that New York University is the only place for me. After experiencing so many different aspects of the university, I realize just how much I yearn to attend NYU.
I have visited New York with my entire family, but most recently I experienced the city with just my mom; we were able to explore the areas of the city that aren't tourist hotbeds. The sheer size of the city and the diversity of the community that calls the university home amaze and intrigue me. The bustle and fast-paced action of the city as a whole excite me, but the quaintness of Greenwich Village, SoHo and the other communities that surround NYU remind me of home. I know I can fit in, grow, and give back to NYU and my community here in Alabama.
The opportunities for cultural enrichment and community service are unparalleled at New York University. I am excited about taking advantage of those opportunities, engaging myself in volunteer work, and immersing myself in the social diversity the university has to offer. My life experiences have given me a receptive mind--one that is open to different ideas, cultures, and lifestyles. My intellectual curiosity will bud at NYU, where I can grow with the world-renowned faculty, the bright and interesting students, and the challenging atmosphere.
NYU can offer me a place to develop and I can offer it the needed perspective of a boy from rural Alabama. My relationship will be symbiotic; I will take advantage of the amazing teachers and rigorous courses, but I will offer my unique perspective to the clubs, organizations, and class discussions in exchange. As an open-minded critical thinker, I will be capable of defending my ideas and opinions even in the face of opposition. Most importantly, I can add some southern flavor to NYU.