Alpinen Skiing; Bentley App/ change one thing

the question on the supplement is: If you could change one thing about your high school career, what would it be? (800 characters)
My response:
All through high school I have put a lot of effort into everything I do. Although I put the most into alpine ski racing. If I could go back, I would've spent less time skiing. To anyone who doesn't ski race it is a little difficult to explain but I missed a lot of school days to go to important races. This made me miss important material and sometimes made my grades suffer in the winter months. However, I have learned the importance of meeting with teachers, and I've experienced high levels of competition; so the time I've spent on skiing hasn't been a total loss. I have also learned that for the future of my education, it is essential to balance extra-curricular activities and school work with more focus on school.

Thank you in advice for ANY help

I think that this is very well written! You answered the prompt nicely. I like how you included a personal experience about how you would change something (well that is the question, so DUH, I'm glad you did include that haha but anyways...). I like how you ended with how you learned how to balance extra curricular activities with school work. Excellent!

I too agree with bubblegum101. You have presented the answere very creatively.
I only have one suggestion;


Have them in one sentence as the second one sounds incomplete;
Throughout my high school career I put lots of effort into everything I did although alpine ski racing consumed the most of it.