Appeal Essay for Science Course

Hi, I am currently appealing to NUS Science Course and will be more than happy for a feedback on my essay.

Every man has definitely done a dangerous move at least once in their life. When I choose to apply to NUS Science Course, I know that I am doing it. With grades that are pretty far from the cut-off point, getting rejected is not a surprise for me. However, I would like to give my words if I am going to be accepted through the appeal. I will maintain at least 3.5 on my GPA and hence able to graduate in time. I am a man of my words. I promised my Chemistry teacher to be the 'most improved student' for the subject. I am not sure if I do win the title but the improvement from S to B within the span of 2 months does prove something. This happens with my Mathematics too, my grades improve from U to C. Furthermore, even if I do not fulfill it, NUS has nothing much to lose. I will simply join the small list of undergraduates who neglect their studies. However, for me, I will lose my credibility and it means that I had wasted my life by not able to earn something when most people can.

If possible, do give me suggestions on how to end it. I am still working on the ending. Thank You.

p.s: S to B is something like F to B.

Everyone man has definitely done made a dangerous move at least once in life.

I'll use a colon here-----> However, I would like to give my words of promise so that I may be accepted through the appeal: I will maintain at least 3.5 on my GPA and hence able to graduate in time.

I am a man of my word . I promised my Chemistry teacher to be the 'most improved student' for the subject, for example, and although I am not sure if I do win the title, the improvement from S to B within the span of 2 months does prove something.

You MUST add a paragraph to tell them about your plan for entering a particular field... tell them about your plan for the future... what you want to accomplish as a professional.

:-)

I am not an expert when it comes to making corrections. However, if you are sincere in what you are saying it will come through your writing. I suggest to make the correction that the Kevin provided and read it out loud. I wish you the best.

jalexander

i dun reli get wat u mean...i dun tink u shd say u neglect ur studies..

wat bout about saying with my improvements in my subjects especially chemistry and mathematics, coupled with my burning passion for science i would make a pretty credible student..or something like tat..good luck in ur appeal!

Since u explained about chemistry in past tense,i guess the following should also b in past tense.

This happened with my Mathematics too,with my grades improving from U to C.

Good luck.