***I'm having trouble with a conclusion and I am not sure what a college is looking for in a letter of appeal... If you could just help me out that would be great!
My name is ******, and I have recently been informed that my application to the University of Florida was not approved. I am writing this appeal because I would like another opportunity to become a student at your university. The University of Florida was my first choice college out of those I applied to, specifically because it offers an amazing pre-medical and medical program that I feel is not surpassed by any other college in the state. If my application is appealed, I will do my best to meet and exceed the expectations required by the students attending your college.
I understand my standardized test scores are only just above the national average and I attribute this to my being homeschooled and living in a foreign country as a child. As is shown in my Advanced Placement test scores from 11th grade, when the material is available to me I am able to study and achieve my full potential; receiving a 4 in United States History and English Language and Composition, and a 5 in Spanish Language. This year I am taking five AP classes. After two years of high school in the Dominican Republic, I realized that I would have to push myself past what my old school had to offer. The only level I could take was considered "on level". This is when I made the decision to start school for the first time in the United States in order to take advanced classes. Changing from a student body of 40 to one of 1500 was a difficult transition for me and it was extremely hard for me to juggle the large caseload as well as get used to the culture and people after being away for seven years. However, I managed to join several groups and maintain a steady B+ average in my advanced courses throughout junior year.
It is extremely important to me that I receive the best education for the lowest price. After receiving my medical degree, I hope to work in a hospital and gain some experience, during which I would like to organize medical teams to various third world countries, mainly those in South America and the Caribbean. Mission work has always been my passion, and by allowing me the chance to study at your school I believe that not only I will benefit, but that those I wish to help will profit from my education in medicine.
If the problem did not lie within my grades but because this University's recent cuts to the amount of students it admitted, I would not be against changing my application to the Summer 2010 term. I have taken on a workload much harder than last year's and have received better grades. My transcripts show that even though I have two more AP classes than last year, my grades in them have improved.
***I'm having trouble with a conclusion and I
My name is ******, and I have recently been informed that my application to the University of Florida was not approved. I am writing this appeal because I would like another opportunity to become a student at your university. The University of Florida was my first choice college out of those I applied to, specifically because it offers an amazing pre-medical and medical program that I feel is not surpassed by any other college in the state. If my application is appealed, I will do my best to meet and exceed the expectations required by the students attending your college.
I understand my standardized test scores are only just above the national average and I attribute this to my being homeschooled and living in a foreign country as a child. As is shown in my Advanced Placement test scores from 11th grade, when the material is available to me I am able to study and achieve my full potential; receiving a 4 in United States History and English Language and Composition, and a 5 in Spanish Language. This year I am taking five AP classes. After two years of high school in the Dominican Republic, I realized that I would have to push myself past what my old school had to offer. The only level I could take was considered "on level". This is when I made the decision to start school for the first time in the United States in order to take advanced classes. Changing from a student body of 40 to one of 1500 was a difficult transition for me and it was extremely hard for me to juggle the large caseload as well as get used to the culture and people after being away for seven years. However, I managed to join several groups and maintain a steady B+ average in my advanced courses throughout junior year.
It is extremely important to me that I receive the best education for the lowest price. After receiving my medical degree, I hope to work in a hospital and gain some experience, during which I would like to organize medical teams to various third world countries, mainly those in South America and the Caribbean. Mission work has always been my passion, and by allowing me the chance to study at your school I believe that not only I will benefit, but that those I wish to help will profit from my education in medicine.
If the problem did not lie within my grades but because this University's recent cuts to the amount of students it admitted, I would not be against changing my application to the Summer 2010 term. I have taken on a workload much harder than last year's and have received better grades. My transcripts show that even though I have two more AP classes than last year, my grades in them have improved.
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