UC application #2 (describing activities in limited space)

Hey Gloria.

Please edit any grammar mistakes and any suggestions on how to make them better? Thanks!! My general question would be: how do you describe your activities lists given such a limited space? Thank you!

1. I earned the Public Spirited Award in 9th Grade for my involvement and dedication in community service inside and outside of school

2. I worked for Blue Point Advertising Agency. I was in charge of collecting data, organizing them, and also as a translator

3. I am in charge of translating mostly Chinese and English either in text, or speaking.

4.This course has taught me how the different cultures of artists affect their brushwork and other. It has taught me to look at art more in depth.

5.This course has helped me question how reliable are the knowledge we get from others. What is correct? How is it correct? What is truth?

Good morning :)

Let's see:

1. "in" should be "to."

2. "them" should be "it."

3. Remove the comma after "text."

4. Other what?

5. "are" should be "is."

Excellent ideas and descriptions. Keep up the hard work!

Regards,
Gloria
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